How far will one stallion run to escape what pursues him?
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Someone needs to introduce Twilight to the Platypus.
6994041 I read somewhere the the platipie have certain brain genes that are terrifyingly close to humans and are most likely to become sentient first.
(second I guess) I'm not saying I believe it but it's certainly curious to think about
6994041 ah yes, the mammal that lays eggs.
Dogs and cats living together!
These guys do realize that the mirror dudes will just evac into another dimension, don't they?
I think the idea is to hit them with communicable nasties before they realize they've been hit. So even if they escape they still die, and hopefully doesn't do much damage to wherever they end up.
6994041 Or to the waterbear.
I finally did it. I caught up! Whew, what a ride!
I suppose I can finally take a little break. All that running has been hard work. Roughly 80,350 words a day for 28 days is what it took me to get here! And I even found some typos on my way through. I commented on all the pertinent chapters with corrections.
So, now that I'm here, I can say that this story has been a real treat to read. The style evolved well from humble, slightly messy beginnings into something well written and with few errors. Your strengths are in your world building and focus on interpersonal relationships.
I am also very, very glad that Bucky recovered nicely from crossing the line into Mary-Sue back into a somewhat realistic (as realistic as one can be in a high magic setting) and relatable character with weaknesses and depth. Hard to come back from that, but you did it.
I also gotta note, your command over numerous characters is great fun. Sentinel the 'honor pony' has stayed a favorite, from his humble beginning to the Alicorn of the Hunt. Pina and Dinky as a team are an awesome concept, their magic and skills complementing and completing one another.
Harper is best foal, even though Sukari holds a space in my heart just for being so incredibly realistic, and Cadance is great and also very tragic. Peekaboo is still awesome, too, and she has stayed a fun character. I can't wait to finally 'meet' Bell Heather, Bandua, and Crisis as they develop their characters and grow.
I feel like, out of everypony, Derpy is the most underutilized character of all of them, which is sorta sad, because she is so important. I guess, though, she stands as the constant center, the home maker that gives the rest a place to return to.
I hope that my hunting for typos has helped improve the story overall. I always find little errors to be jarring when I'm reading, and eliminating typos keeps things flowing and increases my enjoyment overall.
6994449 I doubt. If they could or, more probably, if the wanted to move on, they already could do it, moving to a less demon-infested planet/dimension. IMHO the Night Stallion crazyness make him stay in his little happy piece of living Tartarus, just for the sake of staying in the worst possible place, or, because, that place is HIS...and NO ONE took what is HIS from him !
Also, by the time they notice ponies bleeding from the eyes, mouth and ears, it would be already too late...
"Attention *cough*...let´s start *wet cough* the evacuation procedures *looooooong cough...splat*...is...is that my lung ? *dies*
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Magic. The reason is magic. Had people been paying attention, they would know this simple answer. In other realms, his magic grows weak or becomes non existent. The Night Stallion will not allow weakness, so, he stays rooted in a place where his magic is strongest, and he has turned it into a breeding grounds to create the strongest soldiers possible.
6994041 DAMN IT PERRY THE PLATYPUS!!!
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Bucky has infused them with the overwhelming need to preserve life. The newest ones dispense life saving drugs.
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I wasn't necessarily saying it would happen, rather if it happened then the Sisters would make sure it never happened again.
6994041 Just don't let loose...'The Drop Bear' duh duh duh duugghhh!
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I piddled.
I smell Starlight approaching.