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Oh, I am quite open to criticism, I just refuse to deal with personal attacks. There is a difference. Be civil, be polite, and you have nothing to worry about.
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Oh, there has been all manner of unpleasantness. But if you scroll down, you can see that I've been openly interacting with quite a number of people who have something to say and their comments haven't been deleted.
So please, enough with the forum drama. I even left a very negative review up in the comments untouched. It was a valid review. I didn't agree with it, but I left it there. So stop making meaningless assertions to try and stir up yet more unpleasantness.
4982126 I wonder where you picked that phrase up...
4982126
Being told how to "fix" a story, particularly a story in progress, without having solicited such advice is, frankly, insulting, and I don't blame kudzu in the slightest for deleting it.
4982155 Looks like it. He's saying the alicorn of war is not needed. He's supposed to balance Cadance, but surely no war and more love is better?
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I do take feedback and implement it. All the time.
Rather pompous of you to think otherwise.
I constantly do Chase Q&A sessions where I gather all manner of data and feedback and then try to use it to make adjustments and minor plot corrections. I've even introduced major plot elements beforehand trying to get some kind of reader response. And I listen to that response.
So please, let it rest. Let people discuss the story here. Please?
Maybe with this knowledge, Bucky can tell everyone to go fuck themselves in regards to the Alicorn of War considering what it is meant to actually do.
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Do you think he will be allowed to remember this?
4982212
Damn it Kudzu. The one out Bucky would have to make everypony drop it and he is once again being denied.
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Have you read it?
Let's just get this out of the way. Have you read it? Or are you relying upon biased second hand information?
4982199
Love leads to overpopulation...
What kills off excess population?
Well, one way anyhow.
4982239 Well, they could always use protection. And if they want to feel each other, I'm sure a spell could temporarily render them infertile.
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So, in a future a thousand years from now with an immortal Cadance, who gets to decide who has foals and who is forced to use protection with an unsustainable population upon the planet? And what of other species, who are also influenced by Cadance and her magic. What do you propose as a fair solution?
4982248 I guess I didn't think that far ahead.
But I can also see that even though Bucky outright refuses to become the alicorn of war, something will force to have no other choice, much as most of his deeds on the isles have done.
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I ask the same in return. Don't discount my points based upon the incomplete data set you are working with. I am the writer. I am aware of my intentions, my failures, my improvements, my shortcomings, and areas I need to work on.
You aren't even a reader. You are a parrot at best, repeating the opinions of others, having none of your own. You came here for no other reason than to keep the drama going and keep shit stirred up. If you wanted to be constructive and positive, you would read the story yourself, formulate your own set of opinions, and contribute. But you haven't done that. So what do you have to offer that is actually yours?
I am more than willing to listen if you have something valid to say.
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The person who made those negative comments felt like The Chase was THEIR story and didn't like that it went the direction it did.
As for the deleted comment, I missed it, but I think it had something to do with the author and cancer. The combination of the two is horrible as it is and so far it was the only deleted comment made by that person.
If there was a comment graveyard then I'd agree with you, but there isn't one. Kudos to kudzu on that.
Also, please, for the love of god, calm down, both of you. This is fanfiction for god's sake.
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Yep. Much shit was stirred up. I was being told what to write and how to write it. It wasn't even criticism, it was outright commands that certain characters had to do this and certain events HAD to go down this way or the story would be screwed up beyond repair. Several somebody's wanted me to tell the story their way and make it their story. It was the story they wanted to tell, but lacked the talent, effort, and time to make it possible, so they just figured they would hijack mine.
You wouldn't believe some of the private messages I've got from people telling me why I need to kill off this character or that character to make the story better, or that Lyra needs to be murdered somehow so Bon Bon can be freed to become the bisexual she was always meant to be.
Some of the stuff that comes my way is unbelievable.
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No, just asking you to put out some effort into making your own opinion. Is that so difficult?
I am more than willing to discuss your opinions with you.
I cant stop laughing, this sounds so wrong
anyway, really love your Story, you pretty much brought me back to fimfiction after i grew bored of it
The most amusing things in the comments are people posting without reading or trying to direct how the story goes. I'm actually kind of saddened that there are people that self absorbed or stupid around these parts, but i suppose that's how it is.
Keep up the good work, Kud!
>> kudzuhaiku
If there is any criticism to be had I'd say this latest chapter was a little too focused on explaining Celestia's motivations while I thought it was pretty self exclamatory across the past chapters. Then again, that could just be me and you could say stuff it and ignore me as you should say with this neigh sayer on the forum. While I agree with your wisdom in openness to criticism know that the plotline, character development, and concept is some of the best I've seen in the stories on this site and don't let anyone tell you otherwise.
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Everything will be explained in time. I know 185 chapters is a lot to read, I did it in the span of a week and a half and it was worth it. Lore isn't meant to be handed out right at the beginning, but rather revealed in bits and pieces.
Some things have been addressed in side stories, as well as introduced characters that will be a part of this one.
Speaking of which, I can't wait to see what you have planned for Slate, kudzu.
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To be fair, it was a forced perspective shift, (185) so your comment has some validity. But it is meant to showcase her position and why she did what she did, and explains her many failures.
Think of it as concrete confirmation for those who haven't puzzled things out yet.
... What's this bollocks of Bucky putting War and Love at the opposite ends of a spectrum? Seriously, Cadence even says that she would go to war for love. No one can love the whole world, creatures that follow any sort of normal natural laws literally don't have the mental space to make everything important to them, and even if Cadence encourages love in everyone she would ultimately encourage them to fight over the interests and prosperity of those they love against those they do not love.
It's about as bad as the idea that if Bucky were war he would inevitably simply kill everything else. That's not what war's about, war is about imposition, about controlling the world around you for your and those you care about's benefit, and about taking extreme action to do so. Not to mention the constructive benefits that conflict has, and how wars in the microcosm can end without gore and death. In his vision he wasn't the alicorn of war, he was the alicorn of indiscriminate slaughter.
On the other hand, if you want to give Bucky the concept of war and he sees war as nothing more than indiscriminate slaughter, then I guess he'd probably just go out and kill everything anyway. So I guess he's making the right choice not accepting it because he is a poor candidate to bring any sort of balance if he sees war as inherently imbalanced.
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It's my headcanon that Celestia had been manipulating everything since the beginning, so it doesn't surprise me.
Ahhhh..... But, what Bucky doesn't realize is that if he fails to ascend when he dies a new embodiment of war will be born. And that embodiment will have the choice. The system is always trying to correct itself. One way or another the system will have its Doomsday weapon.
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Pause to consider for a moment how Bucky has mirrored Cadance's actions. Cadance makes ponies love one another. She can fuel their love.
Now think about Bucky's want it need it spell jar and what it did, what it represents. The ultimate perversion of love, and turning it into act of unbelievable violence. He weaponised the physical aspect of love and used it for war, stripping away any and all of the emotional things that make loved special. He took the physical expression of love and turned it into a horror.
It was probably the single worst thing he has done so far. Now, stop to think all of the other aspects of love that he has perverted or otherwise placed his own skew upon. I don't want to spell them all out like I did the jar filled with magical rape, but they are there, waiting for somebody to notice them and go... "that's horrible" and I will leave them be. Subtle indicators that something is fundamentally wrong. Character flaws.
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Actually, people are upset because the Isles Arc is showing... had I skipped it, as many people suggest, would have been guilty of telling when I introduced new characters into the story. So I can't win either way with my critics.
bullshit. if this is the endgame of your plot? its total bullshit. a fallacious argument.
how the bleeding hell, did you go from what started as a simple romantic comedy, to an angst-driven sadistic maiming of not just your characters but all of equestria?
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Nope. Not the endgame. So relax, settle down, the story hasn't even hit the halfway point yet.
This is just another forced perspective to make you see things in a focused way from a different perspective. In time, there will be another. And another.
But this is a big perspective shift. And understandably upsetting. More of the bigger picture has been revealed, but not all of it.
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Already have. As stated. Hang out with the community. Listen to what other people have to say here. Others will tell you just how much time I spend collecting data for this story. Or look through my blog posts and see for yourself.
And you know, you could try reading. I'd love to hear what you have to say!
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Also, I needed a really simple hook to draw people in and make them read. I thought about it for a long time. Original drafts of the story had Bucky in school and following him as he grew up, eventually meeting Derpy in Ponyville.
I cut all of that away and went for a simple hook, which became the embodiment for the story. Misunderstanding. It all comes down to misunderstanding.
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i see your ignoring the fact that your story has gone from a rom-com to a sadistic maim-fest. and thats the real problem- you really should have split off into a sequel when you started the war, because the entire tone is different now. you added in Gore, and are writing a tragedy. you need to update your tags to reflect that.
4982299 you totally need to anonymously put all those on a blog xD
i dunno, i find my self loosing interest with what is going on, its like... we know the ending cause you told us what is going to happen, bucky is going to kill everyone, because no matter what he will have to choose to kill everyone quickly or kill everyone slowly.
it is also like, Oh another chapter, i wonder how hard i will have to think to find out all the foreshadowing and character development
4982508
Maybe. Fair point. But I can only have so many tags, and the current tags do reflect the whole of the story. The Isles Arc is necessary to tell the rest of the story, which is all about reconstruction and integration. It ended up having a much darker feel than I intended, I will confess.
The upcoming griffon diplomacy arc will have some tense moments, and then after that, everything is free and clear to return to slice of life and more comedic elements as the characters heal, adapt, adjust, and eventually, thrive.
You pretty much have Celestia down as I've envisioned her. It explains a lot as to why she let things go down the toilet...she pretty much couldn't help it as she didn't have her sister around to do her duties. Doing the job of two immortals probably drove her at least to distraction, not to mention the strain on her mental capacities given how you described their responsibilities.
I can see why Bucky doesn't want to be an alicorn. Saying why he doesn't is one thing. Explaining why opens a whole new realm. I think he wants to help Cadence in his own way by declining his ascention.
I get the feeling there are more alicorns to come. It might not be necessarily in this story, but you've hinted at it, kudzuhaiku.
There are a few things I don't agree with you in this story (and I said which one was my biggest gripe in the lost chapters), but overall, I'm always eager for the next chapter to be posted.
I get the feeling Bucky is going to look up to Luna for advice, but won't shy from going to Celestia. They're both going to mother him. There's also the possibility he might become immortal without becoming an alicorn, or at least have a very long life filled with foals.
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That isn't the ending at all.
Think of all the perspective shifts in this story. Is anything ever really what it appears to be when first presented?
Cheerilee was a bad teacher, the worst teacher ever. Filthy Rich was irredeemable. Etc, etc, etc.
Forced perspective. The trick is to break out of it and try to see from a different angle than intended. See why the forced shift is important and then figure out why it might not be true or might be different.
Or, just wait a few chapters or a few hundred thousand words and have the answer revealed.
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There are things I don't agree with in this story and they are very uncomfortable to write. I just plow through them anyway. I hate them, I don't like them, I find them morally reprehensible, or just plain ugh.
But I understand that a writer occasionally has to write opinions other than his own. Or her own. Not trying to be gender specific. I have to force myself to look through a perspective I absolutely hate sometimes in order to tell the story, and people really do hate those characters sometimes, and it bothers me that people can't always distinguish the characters from the writer and thinking that every opinion expressed is somehow my own.
This story is real deep; I can't even imagine how much time it would take me to build a world like the one you made. The story gives me an exercise in morality where few care to venture. Kudos!
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I see your logic, all Bucky is seeing now is IF he becomes the Alicorn of war, he WILL kill everyone and end everything. Its presented as black and white, but just like Alicorn God nothing is set, he/she is a Horse of a different color. I'm guessing this is damage control for the Fates sticking their foal loving hooves into Bucky's decision. Visions of the future has changed Bucky's path and it has cause the system to go ecus. Now God cant make Bucky become the Alicorn of war because sentient beings were given free will. But maybe in this way Bucky's decision is not so colored towards the Fate's favor. Possibly opening a path for a new system.
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And we all love you more for that. What fun is there if everyone agreed with one another. If every argument was back and white where one character was obviously wrong just so they can play the antagonist. I've always loved the antagonists prospective, I often find my own ideals align with the antagonists prospective at times, I love it when I feel that those ideals are given valid weight in a story rather than mocked just to be counter to the authors point.
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Yes... I suppose Bucky is a bad candidate to help put love and conflict in balance for far more reasons than he doesn't have a very good understanding of what he has been chosen to represent. Other ways he perverts love... I'll have to look out for it, and figure out the difference between his dysfunctions and something that's genuinely horrible that he's done or is implied by what he's done.
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TLDR:shut up and enjoy the story; OMG GOD PONY; ugh typing on phone
To be honest, I don't have any opinion as to which plot is the right plot. I just think about the bones thrown at me and enjoy, or revel in disgust, until the next chapter comes out. All this argument about this being a happy go lucky slice of life or a dark story forgets to take many things into account. I think one would be apparent once they read kudzuhaiku's other stories, which is that when kudzu writes a story, there is always a psychological or philosophical moral in it. And seriously... don't comment if you haven't read the story, and don't read if you don't enjoy it.
On a more story related note, OMG GOD ALICORN!!! WHY THERE BE SO LITTLE COMMENT ON THAT. This guy is literally genderless, ageless, and pooping out galaxies, yet no one seems to care. Can't wait for the reveal as to how much of "the Touch" Bucky has and what it is.
Another question, is the god Alicorn actually an alicorn? Or did he take that shape for effect?
I really have to stop using my phone to read and comment, it takes forever to write anything.
I've been thinking, since fulgurite glass is such a good conductor of magic, what about volcanic glass, or Obsidian? Or perhaps even pure obsidian sand made into fulgurite?
And what if the next Alicorn was born as an Earth Pony? We've had Alicorn sisters born as Alicorns, an Alicorn born as a Pegasus, and an Alicorn born as a Unicorn. An Earth Pony turned Alicorn is the only one left...
It's you story, write it however you want.
And hey, space alicorn.
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a man was told he would die
afraid of death he ran
he ran over mountains
he ran through rivers
he ran through forests
and he ran through fields
as he ran he fell down into a canyon
a stranger was there
he asked why he had fallen down
"i am running from death" he answered
"but why did you run here," the stranger asked
"when it was here i was supposed to meet you?" death finished