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Huh, guess Spike was right. There are zombie ponies.
Right before he went into the cave, my first thought was "Quicksave, just in case!"
...I think I've been playing Skyrim way too much.
I'm excited to see the battle in the next chapter, though!
And more zom-zoms
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And Suddenly I'm reminded of Vincent Price's rap from thriller.
Darkness falls across the land
The midnight hour is close at hand
Creatures crawl in search of blood
To terrorize your neighbourhood
And whosoever shall be found
Without the soul for getting down
Must stand and face the hounds of hell
And rot inside a corpse's shell
The foulest stench is in the air
The funk of forty thousand years
And grisly ghouls from every tomb
Are closing in to seal your doom
And though you fight to stay alive
Your body starts to shiver
For no mere mortal can resist
The evil of the thriller
Yeah, this fits that perfectly. Nice job, and I didn't notice any specific Typos, but I'll give it another go in a while.
Just thought you'd like to know you were reviewed super hard.
I'm off to kidnap Ellen Paige and have her communicate with my dead wife and child.
Undead spellcasters. It doesn't get much less fun than that...
I find it interesting that shadow bears haven't been seen on the other isles. Are there restrictions on the mysterious means of transit, or did the force behind this corruption just not want to tip its hand?
In any case, looking forward to the duel. And thank you for providing some cuteness beforehand to brace us for the upcoming struggle. I get the feeling we'll need it...
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So, source for the review?
Or they don't like that this sweet little love story with some tribal difficulties turned into something this dark.
I don't complain, it's still a very good read.
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After a few readings, the review really loses its impact. Rather than anything actually insightful to say, it relies on jargon and slang to invoke emotion, rather than anything intellectual.
It looks like something written by a 4chan mouthbreather more than anything else.
**Shrugs**
Opinions are like assholes. Everybody has one and they all stink. Including my own. I'm kinda touched that somebody hated me enough to spend five minutes out of their busy day giving their asperger-ey goodness laced review and it was worth a couple of laughs.
I find it fascinating that someone who has been a member of this site for three days at the outside. Can read one story and deduce that it does not conform to how the rest of the stories on this site frequently shift gears from slice of life to adventure.
Lich lich lich lich LICH!
Gah, I HATE liches! Nastiest form of undead ever!
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Protip: Dafoe didn't write that review and the reviewer was talking about the show itself when he went on about genre transitions.
4948401 Wow, kudzu, you really have something to make people hate you with burning passion sometimes. Are all aspects of your life that much all or nothing, or just the writing ?
I´ll not make comments ´bout this chapter ´cause...well, i´m still holding the breath. Quite literally...
Everyone, and your mothers, know how fanboysh I am ´bout this story. Not only this one, sure, Stardust, Hard Reset, there are a lot of amazing stories here but, yes, i am specially connected to this work. So i know that i´ll look over any problems and failures on booth the story and the author. I´m pretty aware that THERE ARE errors, that the work could be better, hack, the wrok can ALWAYS be better bit, notheless, i really love this story.
So, if someone makes a harsh review against this, it´s natural that i look at it with bad eyes. "Oh, how dreadfull, you dare insult something that is so precious to me, your ruphian ! :raritydespair". But i like to think that i can, at least, give a chance and look at the critic, to see if the responsible have, at least, a point on it.
If it have, he forgot to write.
It´s just a bunch of offenses with no proper real value as a criticism. At some point the guy writes "...and started demanding the readers give a fuck about its hollow characters". That´s not the only example, but it the most eye catching. This is not a review, it´s a work of hate. If the guy wrote something like "...and started demanding the readers to love about characters that have no emotion" i could agree or disagree, since it´s a review, its the author opinion, but the way he wrote, it´s just pure and simple rage.
So i would recommend you to read the review, at least to the point you can brace yourselves to hold that much rage. Maybe you can find something usefull. Myself ? Not worth the pixels used to show this on my laptop screen, being not a review, but just a way to make a great work (again, not perfect, but, notheless, marvelous) looks like a bad thing.
In my humble opinion.
Kudzu, one more time...thanks for your efforts. Your work is praised and is very enjoyable. Thanks.
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Being butthurt is okay. It happens to everyone. But don't be an asshole about it.
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I am not being an asshole about anything.
Am I not allowed to make remarks in my own story comments section?
Im guessing its a Lich Focus like a Phylactery, kind of an antenna for the "Evil". Im guessing this was to be the fate of Harper. Its horn and brain are probably still alive while the rest of it is reanimated to sustain function. This kind of thing must be how it extends its reach out beyond the L.O.S. of the evil's resting place.
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And I do believe that if I was an "asshole" about it, there would have been at least two deleted comments so far. And that hasn't happened, has it?
So...
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If you're going to insult someone, then it's fair game to be insulted yourself.
I'm pretty much impartial, but someone put effort into that review, the least you could do is accept the pain that comes with it with an even hand and get over it.
God knows I know how it feels. It's something you put effort into, it's something you dedicated time to, and seeing someone take a swipe at it feels bad. But that doesn't give you complete licenses to call someone a neck beard or shove them off like they're just being assholes.
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No, deleting comments makes you a cunt. Being a snarky gobshite makes you an asshole.
Trust me, I've been the kind of butthurt you are right now, just settle down and it passes.
4948483
Did you seriously just make fun of somebody for using autism as a joke and then make fun of aspergers?
Also, believe it or not, crass language does not devalue evidence.
The review itself comes from a user named "Queue De Spool."
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Meh, fair enough, but I was pointing out the irony in the review about autism and how hollow everything was, when the review itself was pretty shallow and meaningless.
Wasn't meant so much as an attack as simple reversal. The reviewer is obviously guilty of the same thing they are accusing me of and I thought it was funny.
So no, no butthurt and I wasn't being an asshole. I included myself in the stinky asshole opinion category.
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>Crass language.
Exactly right, it simply means it was written by someone vulgar. I'm vulgar as fuck, but I can still carry a complex idea with enough planning.
4948634
Was pointing out the irony of their statements, that's all.
4948635
Dude...be butthurt...or rather, accept that you are. It's a pretty normal reaction, and from the underlying snark and bile in your statements it's apparent that you are.
It's fine to be butthurt, it means you're not a robot, and that you care.
4948465 I'm just glad this arc is finally wrapping up...There's so much crap to keep track of, I don't know how the author does it...
4948641 k den
You still basically ignored everything in the review and said "what a putz."
I once ignored a lecture given by my college professor. I did not call him an idiot.
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Meh, I could show you snark, but I am not really in the mood so let's just let this go.
What I am actually exhibiting is good natured sarcasm, but I realise it can be hard to tell that through text sometimes.
Second guessing somebody's actual intentions is what makes you an asshole.
4948641
Again, blog source is user Queue De Spool.
4948653
>Meh
You had to type this. This is dismissive. You're not listening to me, you're probably never going to listen to me. You're not going to listen to the review, or people that care about you bettering yourself. Either accept that this is not the best, and keep writing, find the want to move forward, or change.
But then again, you bothered to type out the sound "Meh" so I'm not holding my breath.
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Oh, he's pissed because I blocked him from the comments. He was a loyal devoted follower who liked to piss on other commenters and he became rather... unpleasant. And then became unpleasant towards me as well.
So I deleted a few comments of his that were really ugly personal attacks and blocked him, and now he can't comment anymore, so this makes a lot more sense. So thanks!
It makes it much easier to dismiss everything now. He's still carrying a torch, creating alt-accounts, and regularly downvotes all of my comments when a new chapter is posted.
Which is hilarious!
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I was listening, and even tried to explain my point of view. What do you want exactly?
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Accept that you're angry, because it's extremely obvious that you are. Get over it.
Then again, I don't read this, I have no stake, so I could just as easily leave and let you wallow in your anger and be snarky to people pointing out flaws (However rude they might be)
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That would imply that Queue's opinion on the technical aspect of literature is worthless because of his attitude.
It isn't, especially given that it's his field of expertise.
How much does anyone want to bet it's a pony (or was a pony) from House Averice?
I hope I spelled that right.
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I am not angry though.
Annoyed? Mildly.
Peeved? Certainly.
Angry? No. Too much to do to be angry. Sorry.
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*nods* Sure. Well, perhaps my definition of "Angry" is a bit looser than yours. Or, you're going to continue to not listen and I'm practically talking to a wall. Either way I don't think we're gonna see eye to eye and I'm just going to leave.
Should take what you can from that review, because it's right, and I could compare certain stories I've written to the same problems he outlined.
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If you haven't read the story, how do you know if he is right?
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Because the review hits a lot of points I worried about myself. Retrospect is a good way to see your own flaws, but in the middle of things (As you are) you tend to miss them.
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Fair point.
That said, seeing is believing.
BTW, I liked Ben and the Bats.
I wasn't trying to be dismissive of you for whatever it is worth. If you'll note, I have addressed every single one of your posts and have tried to explain things or offered a different view point.
When I am writing, my posts tend to be brief, maybe a bit dry, and to the point. Some might even say brusque. And that is fair to say. But I do try to talk to folks who are kind enough to interact with me in a civilised manner, which you have done. So thank you for being decent.
Nah, it doesn't make their brains hurt (not like they have a brain to hurt)
it makes their balls feel big and their lives less empty
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Ben and the bats is suffering the same problems this is.
These stories we write turn from Slice of life to grand adventures, and my other works feed off eachother, but you need to understand each of these has to stand on their own, and at some point they need to end.
For you I'm worried you might be padding, along with the usual character problems that stem from the SoL to Adv switch. Point is, hammer down your characters, humanize them with traits quirks and ideas, give them pasts without writing said pasts. Let actions show more than you. Then agian, this is 10X easier from the outside looking in. So...yeah...good luck, but don't dismiss Queue just because he's an asshole, but so am I, it doesn't devalue the objective points he provided.
'impossible for the dead to cast spells'
Depending on your definition of 'dead', a lich might fit. Not truly alive, yet far from dead.
Anyway, you are a great author, and I eagerly await the next chapter, whenever it arrives.
Sure 58 people downvoted your story, so what. Think of it more as 862 people upvoted your story. I say it's a big win on your part.
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Padding? No.
This story follows a character through their entire life. I've planned it out to be around a million and a half words or so. It will probably be even longer. The character notes alone for this story and the story notes total over 50k words, which is longer than most fanfics. I've researched, studied, and dug into obscure topics to add flavour to the story.
The characters are well fleshed out and have quirks. If you read it, you'd know that. They have weaknesses, fears, flaws.
Ask some of the other readers. I'll be more than happy to let them speak for me.
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A word to the reviewer: If you want uselessly detailed description, try reading Moby Dick.
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Tell him yourself.
Queue De Spool.
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Err - 32 feet per second^2.
5 on the moon.
Ballistically, this would be ending up at about mach 1, with a fall of a little under 3 miles.
A human falling only falls ballistically for the first 3 or 4 seconds, with drag rapidly slowing their fall after that, coming to around 100MPH.
This would make the jump-off point 'only' 4000 feet, or so - a mile.
The implication of him hitting substantially faster if he fell all the way from space is that air resistance doesn't affect him.
So - the first guess would be ~3 miles.
Even dropping much higher - 60000 feet - only doubles the impact velocity.
(Numbers, of course for earth - I don't know if anyones tried to extract a working value for 'g' for Equestria).
On the downvotes.
Do you get information about where it occurred?
Is this people getting to the end of chapter 1, or turning to the dark side at chapter 130?