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Thistle could catch enough fish ( ? ) those who hungered. [ for]
Sentinel and Pina are best foals.
Well, as she is still unnamed, I'm voting Hope for the filly, giving the current situation. Not sure what clues we're supposed to be spotting here, but... Really Sentinel? Really?
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Really Sentinel... what?
Not sure of the context here.
As for clues, observe any similarities between Sentinel's and Bucky's behaviours?
4849709 damn, fourteen minutes too late
4849733 Pack animal behavior? (I'm not sure... I never pay attention to the little things)
4849733 Wanting to piss on the foal. And as for clues, they both want to be protectors, not only of their family, but of ponykind.
4849203 problem with taht is just because something is ucltural does not make it any less destructive or toxic. what dinky might endure could make a unicorn like sweetie belle confused and resentful, making her behavior even worse. any methods that requires violence and pain has the potential to have a negative reaction and making behavior much worse. there is no one method that works, especially with children.
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Still, the wording is redundant, and obfuscates the point you're trying to make. If you were speaking, I would understand, but writing does not always communicate tones as clearly.
That said, if this ever gets a read-aloud or radio play version of it made, that line would be perfect.
4849733 I would say the feline traits of low light visibility, marking territory, the shedding xD ect
It seems apparent to me that Bucky is becoming a Lunar Unicorn, of sorts. The teeth, carnivorous nature, night vision, intense shedding in hot weather...
Also Dinky getting the shivers. That's a little distressing, but I guess he's taking care of it.
And -- less of a typo than a syntax error -- near the beginning, "Derpy did not crush Dinky to the stone floor, but instead was snatched between Derpy’s forelegs" is wrong. It starts in active voice ("Derpy does this" and abruptly switches to passive voice, with Dinky as the subject ("Dinky was snatched by Derpy") without an indicator of the change of subject. As written, it says "Derpy did not crush Dinky, but instead Derpy was snatched between her own forelegs." It should either say, "Dinky was not crushed to the stone floor, but instead was snatched between Derpy's forelegs," or, "Derpy did not crush Dinky to the stone floor, but instead snatched her between her forelegs."
The latter would probably be better, since Active voice is more direct and easier to read, but the first would be acceptable since Dinky IS intended to be the subject of the sentence.
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Not on the foal, just around the foal's area.
Like how he marked the wall.
Lyra had awoke briefly with the foal had cried
You probably mean "when" not "with".
things were tighter than everywhere
You mean "ever", right?
It seems you need to get some sleep.
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I had some sleep. I woke up feeling even worse than I did before I went to sleep. Bugger everything.
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More than that. Look how Ripple's behaviour was. She rubs her face on other ponies too. So does Derpy.
Derpy also has scent glands under her wings, but those help to attract a mate. Sentinel's are more for defensive purposes, marking territory.
I keep dropping subtle clues about pegasi biology.
Edit: It goes back to the earlier part in the story where somepony theorised where pegasi originated from.
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That is actually going to become a big part of the story later, when Bucky challenges Celestia's teaching methods.
That's not a spoiler. More of a teaser. Meh. People should know by now that the comments are full of
spoilersteasers.4849873
Uh, I'd hold of on judgements before you go any further, especially about the earth pony bits.
You have NO IDEA what you are in for.
And nothing is ever quite as it seems.
This is a fantastic sentence, and you should feel good for writing it.
Also, Sentinel is an excellent big brother, Bon Bon is figuring out the secret of the sanity glands, and Bucky's being changed on a fundamental level. I can't help but recall that Luna had to stabilize the shadow essence of the lunar pegasi, that they were monstrous things before she did. I'm almost positive Bucky knows what he's doing, though. Almost.
Looking forward to more.
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Knows what he's doing?
He doesn't even know he is changing.
4849880 simply my face value anlysis there. still saying earth ponies instinctually rely on a species that could fling through a wall at will kinda iffy. will have to see.
also i have had arguments on how strong earth ponies are. my vote is they have to be pretty damn strong as an average else what point is there having a magically enhanced physicality if you are like a tenth stronger than average?
4849836 You mean how pegasi in you r story are part griffon and therefor also part lion, thus the feline traits. Traits Bucky would have gotten from sentinel by using his shadow essence in his horn and eye. Would also explain his eye sight sucking in the day but being better than normal at night.
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That is the implication, yes.
I think I see a clue...but I'm not sure...
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How do earth ponies fight dragons, griffons, or airborne enemies?
By developing an instinct that makes them trust pegasi to protect them from the threats they can't defend themselves against.
needs an a after felt
4849949 dragons would be a problme. gryphons though i question. largely cause, well, the talons are claws are dangerous but they ahve to get close to the small equine able to smash down door and smash stone.
then again headcanons are headcanons. my mind's eye i never seen gryphons preying on ponies. have an idea that first contact kinda ended with a gryphon going after what it thought was an easy meal and ended up geting flailed around by the tail by a mamma earth pony.
with dragons, they re jerks but rarely hunt. and when they do they go for effort and reward. and ponies, even if there weren't taboos with eeating something that can have a conversation with you, definitely not worth the effort. too organized, too varied in aiblity, and too capable of causing internal bleeding if swallowed........
and i do not mean cultural taboos. more like ice demons feeding on the hate of thousands kinda taboos. or as i invented in the lore, a supernatural death plague appearing because of the hate of the dead kinda taboo.
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Griffons with bows and arrows would pose quite a problem, but you never thought of that I bet.
I have good reasons for what I do. I think about these things.
As a side note, what do you DO? You update this at LEAST once a day, and you are constantly around to reply to comments and fix errors. Don't you have a job?
.. Not that I mind it one bit. I just don't see how you have time to DO all of this, if you are also working or taking classes or whatever.
Or are you actually a team of writers, present around the clock to create the illusion of someone with absolutely nothing better to do?
Are you Proletariat?
4850059 i thought it was being presented as a more primitive situation. like predator to prey and such. and even then instinct woul dnot be as strong a factor cause the earth ponies would also have weapon tehcnology..... also they could wear heavier armor than any other species and thus muc more durable armor.
........ and i also think. often randomly. like i imagine that more pony swords are single edged weapons, the hilts are molded in a way for their mouths to hold, they use their tongues largely to help in manipulating objects orally, and also have this weapon concept called the Bit Hammer, which is basically an earth pony weapon that is shaped like a hifting weight and basically turns a earth pony's head into a war hammer. of complimented with a durable helmet.
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I'm disabled. And I don't sleep much. And writing distracts me from the pain.
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She's not in the story... yet. But she will be.
Ok first i just want to say how much i love your story,i just spent the last 4 days powering throught it (naughty bits and all ;) ) and i got to tell you i loved the scociology of the tribes and the interactions of the ponies, it added such an extra depth for me, please continue writing this fantastic tale and i look forward to your updates
Wait... Shouldn't it be "Ripple and Piña" here instead of "Ripple and Dinky"? After all, Dinks got tackled hugged by Derpy out into the hall...
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Yes... thanks. Usually I spot these things.
4850221 In this canon, it´snot the use of magic that causes the mental issues, but it´s mere presence, whatever it is used or not. The more potential you have, the worst are the mental issues. Type 3 being the more powerfull "normal" ponies have the worst issues.
If i understood correctly what Bucky wants to do (there are alot of hint in those chapters, but i´m not the smarter cookie ) he pretends to booth increase the ammount of unicorns under training, being type 3 or not, AND, the most important, he wants to integrate other tribes in the teaching, seeing that they have their own magic, and unicorns cannot work properly without their counterparts to either fill up empty slots AND stabilize then to fully work.
As i said, i´m alreading missing the Isles arc but, at the same time, i´m starving to see this new teaching method. The mainland arc gonna be a blast !
And Ponnyvile wil lbe the cleanest city in the universe, if cleaning will be the standard method of punishment for unicorns in training...
thanks for the update!!
I know that bat ponies are a thing but what is the unicorn equivalent?
Research is needed...
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Lunicorns.
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Right.
Pfft. Ahh, kids.
4850989 really? that just sounds like the unicons that succumbed to neurosis and became crazy
unless...
Haha, And here I thought the Cat was bread out of the hippogryph. I wonder are the Lunar pegasus defended from Manticore. Scent marking with the scent glands is a lovely cat behavior. Coupled with his nocturnal hunting behavior, the more I think you baised Sentinel on a cat. As for the shedding, I'm curious if this is also a cat manifestation, I suspect there is something else at play here but I can't quite put my finger on it.
Also I'm kinda sad, I'm still holding out hope Lyra and Bon Bon go a bit Bi for Bucky. I guess I'm a bit confused about their behavior as well. At times I feel like Bon Bon is almost disappointed Bucky isn't trying to woo them. At least not yet, I suspect it has to do with the heat. But I'm defiantly in the corner with Gay part time Bi.
Major Kirrahe would be proud of Bucky.
He held the line.
4850059 I'd imagine earth ponies with catapaults would be as well
Just trod.
Great chapter keep 'em coming.
4850989 You get a whole lotta yes from me
Haha!
Man, Sentinel (otherwise known as Bean) is acting like a cat a lot, it's adorable
Nicely done!