Panic had become a threat, and pegasi had only one singular response to threats.

OH SHIT HE'S GONNA BLOW!! GET DOWN! AWOOO-GAH AWOOOOO-GAH

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I am confuzzled.

He's gonna blow?

Bucky is not a pegasus...

Panic had become a threat, and pegasi had only one singular response to threats.

Death by snuggles.

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Panic is so getting snuggle struggled.

Actually that seem really manipulative. What right does Luna have to invade like that. Patrolling nightmares is fine but...

Oh wait. Absolute monarchy. Nevermind. Ponies have no rights. Carry on with your totalitarian state.

I don´t know what to say exactly but this is one pleasend Chapter

A strange sense of peace had settled into his mind, The painful ache of loneliness that he had fallen prey to recently seemed to have vanished.
Panic, his ever present companion, gave him a violent mental prodding to remind him of its presence

Finely, Panic is gone.
Yo bro what's op
w-w-what are y-you doing h-here.
I was gone to go and ged som ice cream. Do you want som?
NONONONONONONONONO NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!
... A simple no would be enough

Sounds like DT's mother should have taken her as well.

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Terrible thing to say without perspective.

4332505 Well, unless you're going to explore who her mother is, I'm going to stick by that statement.

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It is going to be touched on briefly.

Spoiled, self centered, self serving, unwilling and unable to soil herself with the responsibilities of caring for a foal, walking out, door slamming, etc.

4332363 It seemed like you were saying Bucky was beginning to think more like a pegasus and if a pegasus only had one response to threats,which I'm guessing was beat the stuffing out of it, Bucky might go just a bit crazy

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No. Pegasus here being Derpy. She responded quite well the last time panic reared its unwelcomed head.

4332390 Ahh struggle snuggles the spice of life

Man, this story has a surprising amount of ups and downs to me. Some chapters are good and relatable, and some just don't work. I suppose in some ways this story is now feeling driven to make some kind of point regardless of how much it does or doesn't make sense. Kind of like a Captain Planet episode if you will.
Again, its my perspective, but at this point I enjoy every other chapter or so. The overarching theme just feels forced to me. I don't know anymore, I think the story has definitely changed from what it once entailed in the basic description. It's not a comedic blooming love story between Bucky and Derpy anymore with some interesting world building explanations on Equestrian society. It's just getting too 'preachy' for me.
Of course it's your story and this is just my opinion.

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Pull people in with a simple hook...

Try to keep people in with well developed story.

Try being the key word.

Dark is not evil, but that doesn't mean it's nice.
Also, the mental image of Private Pansy—and by extension, Fluttershy—as you described her was... well, I'm just going to put a derpface up. There. That was my reaction.

As for the second part, it's increasingly clear what the problem is. The unicorn focus on rising above the instinctual self has distanced them from the part of the herd dynamic designed for them. By constantly resisting what they see as mindless animal nature, they're denying a key part of themselves and driving themselves crazy (or crazier) in the process. And rather than see this as a warning sign, they revere it. Poor mental health is seen as a positive because of the society's twisted, unbalanced values. It's going to take far longer than the scope of this story to fix such a problem, but in at least one case, the fix is under way.

Looking forward to more.

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Potentially, why do you think he never speaks?

Trying to explain it might be complicated!

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Yes, yes indeed, that is the end that I am working towards.

The implication here is that each 'tribe' pony is only one third of a complete individual, each part of a singular body that functions best when together, and this was the major discovery that the Founder's had made.

Flash forward one thousand years or so....

Tribes are still struggling to integrate, but Celestia has Ponyville, a microcosm where integration is being worked on, studied, observed, and the effects being duplicated under semi-scientific scrutiny and heuristic testing.

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Recalling painful childhood events is one of the many emotional hooks I use to snare readers.

.....Well played.

I have to say, I haven't come across a story like this in a long, long while. It's a different breed, and utterly rich with worldbuilding, which I adore. And polyamory to boot? There was no way I was resisting.

My compliments. I look forward to seeing how this story progresses.

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You are up to no geode.

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Guess I'm just getting boulder.

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Puns can be a turn on for some people. And some events of nature. I once shouted some puns at a volcano.

And then,

Magma cum loud.

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I think I lava you.

Seriously, you win. That was easily the best one. Go treat yourself to a cookie or something.

Panic had become a threat, and pegasi had only one singular response to threats,

I am going to hug the panic right out of you. Don't you dare move.

“Just think about it now and then,” Bucky answered, smiling. “The magic has to go somewhere. If channeled into creation, it makes other ponies happy. otherwise, bees.”

Well, Dinky, in a way, this is kindergarten... magical kindergarten.

Magic kindergarten is a real place, where you will be sent at the first sign of defiance.

If channeled into creation, it makes other ponies happy. otherwise, bees.”
“I don’t want more bees!” Dinky cried.

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18 down 147 to go and more to Come....

4941794 hell for me it's 18 out of 194. . . . . Well this is going to be a long night.

4998618 try 18 out of 250

5092389 18 out of 290, do I win a cookie? Or do I sulfur a penalty?

I forgot completely about these two

and Filthy Rich felt as though his thoughts would down him
it makes other ponies happy. otherwise, bees

1. Drown.
2. Forgot to capitalise.

5173103 really how about 18 out of 472

18 out of 732 (but does it count if I'm re-reading?)

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18 out of 759.

>Luna’s mind eagerly seized upon this opportunity as this was a mind she had been working on wearing down for a long, long while.

... And here you made me forever hate the loony pricess. She'd better stay on the moon forever.

Another epic chapter, smashing good work dude :D
Nice job!

4941794 18 out of 808

2% of the way done!

Still thinking about Bucky being able to cause several 'thousand' tonnes of pressure in the last chapter. You do realize that elephants are only about 2-6 tonnes, and the Ursa Minor that Twilight struggled to lift would be less than than 10 elephants.

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Several is a word to describe 'more than two, but not many', so it fits just fine. While twilight would struggle with 10 elephants, one or two wouldn't be too much of a problem, and it would make sense for a magic surge to temporarily brake past mental limiters. Hence why they can cause uncertain damage, as it's not known just how much pressure the spell put on the pony. Unless i'm reading something wrong, Bucky seemed to have his own (comparatively) minor magic surge. Crushing a slide doesn't seem to make much sense otherwise.

As someone who has Social Anxiety Disorder, I can say that it DOES help to have others there with you, to help shoulder your burdens. To help silence those irrational fears and the not so irrational fears.

It is a terrible thing when your brain is like "Hey, you know that feeling when you forgot to study for a test, and the teacher reminds you that the test is about to start? Yeah. Have fun with that!" Only you try to tell your brain "But brain, I don't need this. I don't want this. That thing we are ANXIOUS and/or SCARED about isn't even going to happen! Look at all those times when we did the thing and nothing bad happened!" Your brain will be like "It doesn't matter! I could happen! It WILL happen! PANIC!!!!"

blindly going from this life into whatever lie ahead in the great beyond,

Perhaps: blindly going from this life into whatever lay ahead in the great beyond,

Ah yes I have noticed the Unicorns suck" comments. I just... haven't paid to much attention to them. Welp I have a bad feeling about the unicorns ruining something. Like maybe Bucky's parents coming into the picture something like that? Eh i don't I'll just not try to predict where this story is heading at all. That's to much work.

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Panic had become a threat, and pegasi had only one singular response to threats.

My current ideas about how each tribe approaches a treat, in one line.

Pegasi: "We tripped it, go for the throat! For the herd!"

Unicorns: "Oh dear sweet Celestia and Luna! Kill it... Kill it with fire!"

Earth Poines: *in a Spanish accent* "We hit it till it DIES!"

Am I correct?

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Hah, I got that.

.......Long live Don Fluffles.

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Cincinnatus at the plow.