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if he... then she... well that escalated quickly
moonbow an diamond tiara finally meet and it went pretty well.....
sighs. i still disagree with what broke pinkie. pinkie's power comes from her altrism, what she gives to others. hearing bucky laugh like a maniac would not work at all. laughter would know a true laugh when she hears it. and showing her horrors would not maim her. she would practically regenerate as she works to undermine them and bring joy and beauty to others.
however we already know what her true weaknes is. isolation, rejection, fear. either you make pinkie fear other ponies, or make other ponies fear her or reject her. party of one showed us this. that is how you break her.
though ultimately so long as laughter has the other elements to come to her aid she can recover in time.
no i am not telling you how to do the story, before you say it. i am simply making a critique, and analysis if you will.
Agast, I believe should be Aghast.
Replace the first "to" with "a"
Something comes to mind about that third laugh. If it isn't the Element itself the only othr being that comes to mind is Sonata. Wonder what the sirens are doing now in this continuity if that event happened.
Who is Buck?
I literally just clicked on my favorites. And I found this. Thank Luna Pinkie will be okay now.
5316821 think about it like this. You are taking the thing that defines who Pinkie is and using it to inspire fear while leaving death and destruction in your wake. You have taken something pure and good and twisted it to make something truly horrific. That is why she broke. She had the thing she uses to bring love and happiness to her friends twisted and used to the opposite effect.
5316821
That's the problem.
Genuine laughter and amusment at the death of others and the manner of their deaths.
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I guess it was the killing part that did it. I mean, the MLP-villains laughed all the time about their evilness and cruelty.
5316900 no it isn't....... that is kinda a fact. he is laughing to cope with his own madness. he is laughin as a defense mechanism not out of joy. pinkie would probably know it was not a true laugh in any sense. if anything him laughing like that would drive her to want to make him laugh truly later. because that is what laughter in its true form is for. to ease suffering.
besides how often has pinkie heard villains laugh already. she would recognize the tone. more likely she would simply be disturbed that bucky would be capable of such a laugh.
5316884 ...... shoulda combined these two replies i think.
answer is no it isn't. you really think bucky is finding them amusing? the answer would be his laughter is a coping mechanism, something to shield himself from what he is doing. and pinkie would probably be able to hear that.
besides even IF she did break. she has her friends. if she cut herself off mentalyl from reality, have twilight enter whatever little world she sealed herself into and carefulyl draw her out.
simply think interference by the fates or even cheese is not necessary in this situation. they had the tools already available to heal her.
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In your head maybe.
But this is not your story...
and to note, not sayhing this is an end all thing or anything. just that its execution is somewhat questionable and it seems to make the mane six seem...... pitiful almost to break so easily.
5316943 exactly. It has the alternate universe tag. This is your sandbox.
5316943 someone said that to me the other day, or something similar. though the primary difference is that here it is whether or not pinkie would have been strong enough not to outright break from that.
the other story had a changelign queen taking controlf of canterlot, having one of the elements of hrmoyn in her possession, and that being the reasons she was not shoved out of canterlot...... problem being all four alicorns are out and active, and we have seen what four alicorns are capable of. so basically it makes no sense that the queen could have held anything against four alicorns.
sometimes what makes sense in your own head does not make any sense at all. and i will agree that maybe i am missing something.
5316955 alternate universe has its limitations.
So, Pinkie´s healing arc, Moonbow arc (wich is funny, ´cause, you all know, arc, bow, they have similar shape...funny, right ?...please, don´t judge me) and Get to Know your Birdwife arc too.
So may arcs, so little updates.
5316981 yes. It needs to be related to My Little Pony. And that's it. That is the limitation. The characters are being portrayed according to this universe.
5316875 Her future foals.
Oh boy, lotsa of mini-Pinkies. Poor Equestria.
Lordofmyth, sure, you have all the rights to estabilish your own headcannon. What I´ll say is MY point of view of what hapenned, wich can be, and probably is, wrong too.
It was not only the maniac homicidal cackle of Bucky that triggered her catatonic state. The whole situation did. Pinkie, for all of her "Inner Vision", probably felt more then anyone what was happening and was ´bout to happen. Even worse, since she knew that in a subconscient level, not having any rational filter to help soften all the horror. Remember that Bucky´s visor was already signing that she was off (remember the visor indicating Pinike with a red sign, before she went off, even without any fisical injury ?). So the most innocent pony (Fluttershy is shy, not inoccent, she know how nature works, all the killing of the natural life cicle, again, Flutter is WAY stronger then anyone gives her credit) is the one to be more aware of everything, without any previous life hardening events to help her endure this, and without any rational filter to help her too. And, yet,. she was holding, barely, but, still, holding.
And, then, came the last trickle...the maniacal homicidal cackle. Her very last lifeline, at wich she hold with all her strength to keep a minimal level of sanity, her very inner element, the laugh, twisted in a horrible way. Actually, I think it´s a very beatiful metaphor for the situation.
Sorry for the wall of text.
5316943 i can see the reasons for this. you wanted cheese sandwhich in the story and wanted one of the elements strengthened as result.
however the problem there is that it makes the element bearers appear frail. their power is supposed to be great. a force to rival war. yet if it could be broken so casually, then it kinda ruins that appearance completely. what could harmony do against war, and even more so what could the elements possibly do about whatever enemy they were made to fight if they are so easily disposed of?
5316991 the characters also have to be themselves and be competent.
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So what would happen when she feels the joy Bucky felt in the act of destroying everything. Bucky was in the throes of war, the act mandated to him in order to destroy everything. For Pinky to see and feel the emptyness of complete destruction I would think there is no sadder or lonelier thing. The wellspring that is Pinkie requires others to feel joy, but what happens when there is no joy to be felt. As seen in patry of one Pinky had to see the joy in others before she could recover, in her comatose state she can't see or feel anything.
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And you are pretty much correct. Somebody was paying attention.
Pinkie was already broken.
5317025 in the show they aren't always competent though. There fore this is fine.
That's right, Diamond Tiara! Luna knows all about your terrible Power Ponies fanfiction hidden under your bed!
5317033 she was harmed, yes. the area was alien and terrifyting and they were in deep trouble. yet at the same time she had her friends there. right next to her, in trouble and needing her help.
the biggest issue is that it ultimately makes the mane six insignificant compared to bucky and in the grand scheme........ the power of the elements seem equivalent to the bond of the beareres. however it makes it seem that their bonds iwth each other are insignificant if they can be shattered so easily. and makes them seem even less significant when it takes two outside sources and putting the element of laughter into another's hooves to heal a fallen member of their team.
put simply their friendship was easily defeated. the same friendship that beat so many monsters, cast aside as if it was nothing..............
i will say this though. i concede pinkie would have been harmed by all these events.
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It doesn't reduce them at all.
5317033 besides, she grew up on a rock farm. if any place can give you a outlook of misery it would be working in such a place..........
5316820
Two elements of laughter?
5317184 ultimately when the chips were down pinkie fell to pieces, and shut herself away from reality itself and left her friends behind. put simply, these bonds added up to nothing to the pony who relied on interpersonal bonds the most.
their bond faced the ultimate test, and completely failed, as the element that is sustained most by bonds shattered completely. she was, in a sense, their core, where the need for loyalty, kindness, honesty, and generosity comes from. and she broke.
i would say that it does reduce them if a bond that defeated discord could not survive this. and i am saying Survived it. there would be wounds, yet they just..... broke.
5317020 the last blow that caused the hairline fracture to shatter.
Explanation accepted
"Pinkie Pie has been kidnapped by ninjas! Are you a bad enough colt to rescue her?"
Looking forward to more Sentinel, DT and Moonbow.
tail
5317184 it is ultimate only partially character issue, and mostly thematic i think.
the mane six and the elements have largely been unused throughout the story. and this whole grpyhon incident seems like a test that they failed. thus it would mean that they could not possibly have the strength to help in the future ifthey could not have at least endured enough that pinkie was not left as a shell.
I'm glad that Moonbow wasn't neglected in this story. She's my favorite character.
He's the only one who can save her cheese sandwich?
Careful where you put your commas, and were you DON'T put them
Funny fact, if you pull on most birds tails they become incredibly horny. So much so that they will bend over and show you their ass, pressing it against the cage and begin doing a butt dance for you. My pet bird wants me to fuck it and I find that oddly hilarious. I keep pulling the feathers and the same shit keeps happening. And during that butt dance I'll look over, see her colon wink at me and shiver, then laugh like a maniac.
IS. THIS. NORMAL?!! My friends won't answer me, think I'm just taking a joke too far.
5317300 Your mission, should you choose to accept it, is to shag Pinkie back to happiness.
5317224 she lost it
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OK didn't realize that.
Oyus. Best pun has returned.
5318405 and i still feel a little conflicted on how that all went down to be honest. something just seems off to me.
Read once. Read twice.
Oh....Oh...OOOOOOOOOOOOHHHHHHHHHHHHHH !!!!!!!!
AUHAUUAHAUAHUAHAUHAUHAUAHUAHAUHAUHA...oh Lugus, please, why not look deeply in Bucky´s eyes and say those lovely words !?!?!!? He sure will LOVE to have you by his side....AHUAHUAHAUHAUAHUAH !!!!!!!
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**giggles obscenely**
I was so hoping that somebody would get this joke... you made my morning!
5318670 Now that I think ´bout it (told ya, I´m sloooooooow), since the poor bird can´t look at Yew, no, not you, kudzu, her wife, nor to Bucky, and they all were in a closed space, this must mean that he was looking either to one of Bucky´s wifes or to...BARLEY !?
"Yo, lass, ma sorry, but ma balls don´t swing that way."
Thank goodness. And nice touch with the Tree working to restore Harmony. They may have another ally against the original alicorn...
As for Belisama, I'm honestly not surprised by any of that. It all follows from what we know about griffon culture.
I loved Diamond Tiara and Moonbeam's meeting. The giant, chain-bound filly really isn't so bad when you get to know her.
In all, a great chapter. Looking forward to more.
Happy turkey day x3
5318824 Don´t say that...it is still a lot of fun reading his comments. Actually he helped me, a lot, understanding some aspects of the story, specially what happened to Pinkie.
5318670 ???¿
Nope, do not get... Must have forgotten something this is referring to?
No one caught this one?
Moonbow I think you meant.