After being attacked by a Nightmare creature Naruto awakens to find himself in the magical nation of Equestria. Making the best of his situation he befriends its citizens and make a new life there unaware of the role he will play in its future.
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So where you been? Haven't seen you comment in a while.
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It's because I'm lazy and reused old versions of my chapters. Sorry about that. I have like three betas now I swear.
Awesome chapter. The fight scene was great. Great idea about using the berries as steroids and making Naruto give free Dojo classes to help the people at the town.
You have Damb good time I was about to go to bed
aww yehh
Kinda curious when the rest of Naruto's friends will learn his past. Kinda hinted that RD might be next here, tho Shy and Pinkie are still waiting too. And that's just the bearers.
Another great chapter as always.
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Those two already know his past.
5587398 Musta missed that, guess I'll need to dedicate some time to re-read eventually.
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Sweet Epona! This is the first MLP story I've seen that actually has bachelor herds like some of the non-MLP anthro horse tales or RPs I have read or been in.
So the gender balance isn't as bad in this timeline as we believe?
I greatly enjoy how this story is going and I hope that Luna joins the herd since she and Naruto had such a great time on their date.
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Yes wanted to make the tribes more distinct.
And wanted to subvert the common anthro cutie mark is there and everyone practically flashes their asses.
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Glad that was translated over. This chapter hints at many things to come.
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The twilight development will of course be the most involved and among the most important parts. As always I try to have a purpose for the information I write.
A mix of romance and action in this chapter, you sir have outdone yourself. We got to see how herding works in this world, what with the whole Alpha mare being in charge of keeping the others in line and be the voice of reason as well as being the one who heals their stallion when he’s down. The “Bachelor Band,” group idea too really got my attention, I’m excited to hopefully see more of this idea later down the line, and maybe Bones too (although I really didn't like him that much). Just a question though, the “Prism Berries” you introduced in this chapter. They wouldn't happen to be related the “Energy Steroids” that were shown in “One Piece” would they?
5587453 So far it's been explained that the gender ratio issue is an isolated incident to Ponyville, and quite frankly, I like the idea I mean really, 5-20ish m/f is a bit absurd for such a flourishing country :P
I only wish you made Naruto break every bone in that creep's body.
6254042 And burn him eternally in an ever-burning pit full of diesel. :D
The meeting here between some of the Mane 6 was a nice start to the herd's formation. The fact that Pinkie made it abundantly clear that Rarity was the alpha from day one was a rightful observation that AJ seemed to have overlooked. To me this is where AJ and Rarity's conflict came too be as AJ just couldn't see her fashionista friend take command of a group in a herd-like setting. Would have liked to see how this conversation would have continued but it was rudely interrupted by the "Bone-head Brigade".
This was a cool way to add in actual stallion behavior while making it fit within the story. Sure, it does seem a bit of a coincidence that this group would show up while Rarity brought up herd matters but it definitely brought some unexpected action to the chapter. The fact that Rarity's attempt at resolving this issue peacefully was shot to hell probably added more fuel to AJ's fire in that Rarity wasn't fit to be an alpha. Just as long as we ignore the fact that AJ was basically laid low a couple of paragraphs later.
For a one off character, I found Bone's to be effective in showing the negative side of herding and giving the readers a clear view on how Naruto's own herd would be the complete opposite. The fact that it's now publicly known that Naruto is building a herd was probably not wanted but it did give us a quick Ditzy cameo that allowed us to see just how interested she is in the idea. Finally, the speech and brief political talk was a nice way to end the chapter and allowed for some fun byplay between the characters.
Bone just learned lesson no. 1: Don't piss off Naruto!
So after re reading this I found out that the song 'Song for Daisy' by JT Music really fits this chapter. Said song.