After being attacked by a Nightmare creature Naruto awakens to find himself in the magical nation of Equestria. Making the best of his situation he befriends its citizens and make a new life there unaware of the role he will play in its future.
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5199138 So is it safe to assume then that eventually Naruto will get into a relationship with a or some mares?
5209241 that was his original plan to begin with
feels like some parts are missing. like it goes from the meeting with Pinie Pie and then it seems like she bumped into Naruto
Really enjoyable use of foreshadowing with Nightmare Moon's perspective from the moon and Naruto's dream involving Shadow Fright. I will say that Naruto's bumping into Twilight seemed a bit off like it was missing a sentence or two of how he was suddenly there. That paragraph itself just seems a bit awkwardly written compared to the rest of the chapter.
Otherwise this chapter was a very nice take on Twilight's adventures beginning in Ponyville.
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Yes, foreshadowing is awesome. With that initial issue being solved this makes a great continuation to the opening.
6338426 dear sir, I must ask, who does your art? and do they accept trades for art?
Maybe comb through the story again to pick up minor typos and mistakes like how nightmare night is used to scare misbehaving fowls. I know fluttershy has trouble with her chickens but they didn't invent a holiday to help her.
Amazing drawing
Pretty good, not many authors describe how the characters look and what clothes they have on at the time. A great introduction to Twilight and Spike this early in the story and the moment that started it all. Nice descriptions of Minuette, Twinkle, and Lemon Hearts. It a little sad to think this caused Moondancer to be a shut in but you can't control what happens and Twilight does eventually make it up to her. Will that happen sooner? This explains where all the lore and legends about Nightmare moon came and how she got her loyal army in the Nightmare children. So this is what Naruto was doing before he ended up in equestria. Would it make sense if he heard a mysterious but motherly voice telling him to wake up before he actually woke up in equestria? Interesting first meeting with Pinkie as always. The picture showing Naruto meeting Twilight and Spike for the first time is spot on and you'd never would have thought that they would get together or all the adventures they and the rest would have from this first meeting.
This was a nice chapter, but at one point when you were describing Twilight's classmates you misspelled Cutie Mark.
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Why is it whenever I hear this, I immediately think of Canteen Boy?
I have one question where is kuruma