After being attacked by a Nightmare creature Naruto awakens to find himself in the magical nation of Equestria. Making the best of his situation he befriends its citizens and make a new life there unaware of the role he will play in its future.
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5260142 I was almost finished last night, but was way too tired to continue. Had to finish it this morning and now its time to head on to the next chapter.
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Well if you can point out the specific errors that help.
I likes the chapter.
I likes the chapter.
aaannndd...
Caught up!
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What do I do now?
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Guess I'll just have to wait for more, shouldn't take that long... Right?
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You can always read the companion piece I put out for a quick fix.
5263454 lol, i just saw that after I finished here
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I should have a canonical Naruto x Rarity one out soon.
Missing a human tag.
The conclusion of the fight between Naruto and Luna and Nightmare Moon was pretty intense. I'm actually wondering how the fight would have gone down if you would have made it longer, but for the length that you made it, I'd say it did a really great job and Twilight's fight against Nightmare Moon was really good too, using her skills of examination to find weaknesses was actually brillant if I do say so myself. I'm interested to see how Naruto and Luna's realtionship will develop on later on (even though I have kinda read ahead a couple of chapters ;-P)
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It's an anthro story not human
So, after reading that offer of asking for any OC, perhaps I could offer mine? I know I'm a few dozen chapters late, but if you are still willing, I would love to offer my ponified OC to your story. If you are interested, then send me a PM. If not...well, then I just wish you the best of luck with this story.
Great conclusion to an otherwise epic story arc. Out of the three battles here I have to say my favorite was Luna and Naruto's battle within the mindscape. It gave off a very Marvel comics vibe in just how large and devastating the battle went. Swap the characters around and this could be a Silver Surfer/Galactus fight in certain points. Both Luna and Naruto seemed to naturally flow around one another in the battle and it gave the whole thing a nice back and forth flow.
The initial fight between Nightmare Moon and Twi gave us a great chance to see just how capable she is in a battle even if this was her first. The almost guerrilla warfare like attacks that Twilight showed by taking a somewhat hit and run approach helped establish that Twilight can be quite the terror in combat. The fact that Celestia actually gave her some combat training is probably the biggest factor in how well she handled herself. Tia has probably seen a lot of conflicts in her life and with that comes experience.
After the rest of the girls showed up for the final showdown I felt you did a good job pointing out the fact that even though they handled themselves rather well in the Everfree, their inexperience as a team showed with them rushing into combat without a solid plan or better teamwork. That initial charge and NM's dispatching of them one by one kind of showed how outclassed they were when it came down to a tyrant vs. some random civilians. It's a good thing that Twilight finally got it through her head that she and the girls were the elements or they may very well have been defeated.
Finally the reunion between the royal sisters and the resolution of the groups victory was very well handled and as in character as you could get.
A little choppy at the beginning, but the story has progresses nicely. I certainly am happy that I followed the story to this point, and I am happy to say that I will continue. Best of luck on future endeavors!
I am happy that I put this on my list to read later. Started to read today and man I really like the story. You have me doing all the right emotions at all the right times. You had me crying at the right moments, that is not easy to do so you have done a real dame good job.
So now I will put this golden nugget in a nice book shelf and keep my eyes on this.
6482705 How'd you like the story now?
6584793 How do you like the current chapters?
causalities, injuries
These are the same thing
Also why am I listening to abrecadavre while reading this?
I don't know but it's a good song
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Causalities usually mean Dead/Death or out of Commission and Injuries mean hurt but can still keep going or will be able to get back in the Game Sooner than Later.
Twilight remembering Naruto encouraging her and Celestia teaching her how to fight and her going over her motivation was a great start to the fight with Nightmare moon, she really gave it her all and and that say a lot about Twilight's potential since this is her first fight and she's going up against a goddess and she managed to not only out smart her, she managed to overpower her when NM was about kill the others. Naruto and Luna's battle with Nightmare Moon in Luna's mind was just as thrilling, the back and forth between them was exciting. So Naruto can still lend his some of his power to others. Naruto and Luna showed pretty good teamwork and while Nightmare Moon had a lot of power, Luna was just as powerful and Naruto has not only just begun to get his strength back, he has plenty of experience with fighting divine beings. The others put a great fight too, they managed to save Twilight and fight off NM as much as they could. The reunion between Celestia and Luna was heartwarming. The party was nice and even if the after effects the attack are going to be a pain, they certainly earned this little rest.
MANGEKYO SHARINGAN!
AMATERASU!
that explains so much