After being attacked by a Nightmare creature Naruto awakens to find himself in the magical nation of Equestria. Making the best of his situation he befriends its citizens and make a new life there unaware of the role he will play in its future.
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Oh great. The gala. What great things await us in the next chapter....
Nice chapter.
Still got a few errors from changing to anthro, but I only caught two this time.
Also, I believe that Rarity has shown more overt interest in Naruto. Makes their relationship change from platonic friends to Rarity having accidentally 'friend-zoned' herself. Nice job increasing the potential relationship drama.
I feel like Naruto isn't shown or active enough in these episode chapters, and is only there to point out obvious facts?
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Come on Moon gaze, talk about the characters. Talk about the plot. Make suggestions.
Which mare do you want to win? Something.
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The more comedy or slice of life episodes really don't give major room for massive changes, especially since those episodes were for the mane six's character development. After all Naruto is their friend, not their keeper or their parent. He isn't around to be omnipresent and to prevent them from making every little mistake. Besides there's going to be other multiple plot lines that are going to be going around that isn't based around the episodes of the show. There is going to be plenty of character interaction as well as building upon the characters histories. It is merely a matter of being a bit patient for those bits to come out.
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Uugh, at least having the old chapters make it easier to convert then having to do it from scratch, even if I do mess up from time to time. Are you sure I didn't mean hoof as in feet? Also I could have sworn I had this chapter betaed.
Anyway I can't remember if I correctly detailed all the facts. Now we know that part of the reason is Rarity holding onto her own desires for a prince. In my headcanon when she was younger she was burned several times in her earlier dating history and began latching onto the ideal of that perfect prince.
Of course that moment of the Satyr changed everything so Rarity is pretty much in war with herself seeing as Naruto kind of clashes with that idealized upper crest culture that Rarity wishes to be so much part of.
5426949 OK, I'll talk about character development as the plot of the episode is nearly unchanged...no offense. I find it interesting that Rarity kept her interest on Blueblood if only because she's unsure of her feelings for Naruto. AJ's penalty for losing the bet reminds me of Dusk Shine's Love Life, but given Big Mac's choice for the stallion that AJ would have claimed impregnated her, odds are AJ has feelings for Naruto and, if so, I would like to see her become more interested. So far, Fluttershy is my favorite if only because I find her interest in Naruto cute, as demonstrated by her constant blushing around him in the previous chapter, as well as her sudden competitive strike to be hilarious. Naruto's interaction with Twilight in this chapter was very mature as he helped her deal with her insecurities for choosing one if the girls. I hope this comment is more of your liking,even though I feel like a pretentious ass.
P.S: Will we have another interview soon? I want to see AJ or Fluttershy's reactions when Naruto asks for their measurements. BTW, will Twilight also be interviewed?
5427004 Just two
here
and here, unless Naruto decided to stand on Twilight... She's not into that kinda thing, is she?
5427004 I think the version you put up might have been the one you sent me originally cause I remember changing the phrase "goody-four-shoes" into "goody-two shoes." I also put the letter from the Princess at the end into a quote box and changed the font from regular to italics in A.J.'s flashback at the beginning to show those two scenes were different from just regular talking scenes.
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Nah this is pretty good. I would love to see more reviews like this. For the slice of life/character episodes I haven't seen any yet that need major changes because season 1 handled the episodes rather well. As for that being the same as the Dusk Shine one, I find that rather humorous because I had the same idea as this is a hold over from the previous version. The whole shotgun wedding and lying and all that was the rather easy and obvious joke to make with Applejack. Also humorous if you're a Married with children fan.
As for another interview one, its going to be soon actually. I think I'll do the applejack interview seeing as her character centric episode is coming up.
As for the Rarity struggling with her feelings, I do admit I kind of flubbed up as I meant for an early scene depicting of Rarity picking up on Fluttershy's feelings and decided to be Generous to her friend and allow her to not only have a chance at Naruto ,but to also support her. Seeing as Fluttershy would easily be dominated by a strong personality, especially if she would ever end up being in a herd.
Okay it took me a moment to remember which Dusk Shine fic you were talking about. There's so bloody many of them. I think there's another Naruto fic that might make a similar joke on ffnet, but I stopped reading any of those because they were mostly tossing dialogue at you without any descriptions of scenes or any real interesting character moments.
Right now I'm actually making side chapters of certain subjects while figuring out where to place them in the timeline. The main thing is I'm working on a chapter to show the extent of damages that were caused by the events to Ponyville instead of just mentioning them. The only one I know of is of the unpublished chapter 26 to which the events of that plot will play the role of an important subplot for Apple Bucking Season.
I think what I'm going to do is further the moments with Rarity/Luna next chapter, do something original with Bridle Gossip by having other ponies in town be affected by the poison joke mishap and then eventually go into the Applejack and Pinkie Pie bonding/episodes.
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Uugh, the difference between my original content and remaking my old chapters. I skim by too quickly, but I could have sworn I sent this chapter to thatonebrony so he could beta it. XD
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i SEE, How's chapter 26 coming along?
5427566 I'm currently out right now with some friends seeing "Into The Woods," but I'll have the chapter done before midnight. Just got to do my double then triple check before I send it to you.
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Ok.
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Hey, got any idea for the kind of clothes the mane six would be wearing for say, an excursion into the mountains? I would be thinking about them, but kind of busy writing the Fluttershy interview. XD
5440550 Not an expert on fashion, mate. Still, I'm glad that the Fluttershy interview will be next.
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Hey you been keeping up?
You know, the first time I saw this episode on tv, I was just wondering why Twilight just didn't ask Princess Celestia for some more tickets. I know it's a big party and all and that there is a chance that there are only a limited amount of tickets available, but I'm surprised that the idea of just asking for some more tickets never came to mind. It also made me question why Celestia only sent two tickets to her in the first place. The Princess knows Twilight made friends after the Nightmare Moon incident so it made me scratch my head why she only sent one for Twilight and one for Spike (assuming the other ticket was for Spike in the first place) and not take in fact that Twilights friends might want to go, but at least you did point it out near the end, so kudos to you.
Poor AJ, she should know not to make a bet before making out the terms. I've always enjoyed the sibling ribbing of the elder Apple children since outside of some fanfics Big Mac is basically mute and used solely for comedic effect since he's one of the few sane ponies on the show. It's always fun reading how easy of a time he has of riling up AJ; exactly what big brothers are for.
Kind on the fence with this episode outside of it being very easy to see it as Celestia trolling her pupil. Poor Twilight should have just declined the tickets and let things take its natural course. Yeah, this was a good way of showing a friendship problem, but it made Twilight feel like the bad guy when she had to choose who was to go.
Naruto was smart here and just getting the hell away from most of the situations and allowing the girls to figure out how ridiculous they were acting. He may want to warn the next victim of a spontaneous hiraishin before he gets a surprise he most likely doesn't want. I felt both his prep talk with Twilight and how they resolved this issue was better then the shows since it expanded on the reasoning on why Twilight couldn't pick who she would take.
6350384 Derps I have alot of respect for you you are the only pony that steps up to plate to do these long reviews and for that I thank you
Shouldn't have said that. He should not have said that.