After being attacked by a Nightmare creature Naruto awakens to find himself in the magical nation of Equestria. Making the best of his situation he befriends its citizens and make a new life there unaware of the role he will play in its future.
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This is all being redone
Well, well. I didn't expect this to continue or restart. About time that it did though!
I must admit, when you said it was anthro, I was rather worried, but now that I've seen a little of whats to come, I can honestly say that those fears are gone. Keep going! This gonna be good!
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Indeed it is.
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What about Anthro part were you worried about?
Wait. What? when did they become bi-peds?
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The mere fact that it was anthro. I've had some rather bad experiences with anthro stories...
This story seems interesting.
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Sorry, but its not something I want to relive... *shudder*
great to see this story alive again.. even if its remade... since its remade im kinda hoping for a harem route
hope to see your next chapter soon
cheers!!!!
5199138 got to say still like the story but a little mad at you for dropping the old one I really got into that one
You still seem to have several grammatical errors, but there is only one issue that I found truly jarring in the story.
When Ditzy/Derpy was introduced you used both names interchangeably, might want to pick one or the other there.
All else I have little difficulty reading over.
Now to get back at it and see just how far I can read before bed.
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Lol I know you aren't the only one. Plenty of people wanted that, but I assure you the amount of Ship tease is going to go through the roof.
The backstory between Derpy and Golden Harvest was nice, it's good when you get to see some of the characters besides the main character interacting with others. The idea of other candiates besides the ones we know was interesting, it shows more of the traits that they hold dear to themselves without having to go in the long run and explain way to much just to get some nice little points across. The fact that Naruto has been living with Rarity for a while now opens up some doors that I would like to see between the two's relationship expand later on down the road.
A good fanfic! However, I feel like you have sucked up all of Naruto's fun loving positive energy out of him and made him too serious of a character. There's none of his energetic, happy-go-lucky personality from the Shippuden series.
Of course Pinks would tease the stallions she trusted about admiring her, admittedly, voluptuous figure. Would continue reading this.
Overall this was a great introduction to the Mane 6 (minus Dash) and a few other of Ponyville's residents. I liked the fact that Naruto didn't automatically know just who were the Elements but had to spend a day to figure it out. I've read way to many OC/SI fics where the main characters are unanimous in finding the Element Bearers; given they've seen the show or not.
Again, it was nice to see cameo's from some of the other residents of Ponyville but two of them were a nice surprise. It was great to see that Cheerilee was given a nice cameo here and I'm hopeful she see's more screen time later on. There are way too many authors who tend to push her to the far background or use her solely for comedic effect with the CMC or a token Big Macintosh romance. Any fic that uses her outside of this are an instant plus in my book. Also I was also surprised with your use of Carrot Top as she is usually only used for a filler chapter or if an author is in need of a change up with character interaction. Sure her being friends with Ditzy can be a tad bit overused but if written freshly it works. The same can be said of her being a nag or jealous of the Apple's success and I'm very happy to see that you haven't taken that path in her characterization. Here she seems to be a very down to earth mare who isn't as high strung as her other counterparts.
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Its always nice to give an introduction to the characters and include side characters. I really wanted to give a feel to some of the town and characters before we jumped right into the main story. To give everyone's reaction and history to Naruto a genuine feel.
The artwork for Applejack and Pinkie are new. I don't remember seeing them the last tine I read from the beginning. Still great chapter. Can't wait to read more.
Well that happened!
6814991 What do you mean?
7228621 my guess is the whole pinkie flirt scene
Mayor Mare really comes off as professional and looks so in the pic. Think she ever gets tired from all the disasters and weirdness that seems to come to ponyville nearly every week? Cheerilee really looks great in the picture and she and Naruto seem like they could have been a good couple. I'm guessing she'll be with Big Mac. Carrot Top comes off as good friend to Ditzy which is great since it was mentioned that she doesn't have alot of friends. And the story of how they met was funny and cute. Of couse Naruto could relate to Ditzy about being lonely and bullied. Well this is a good description of Rarity and the picture is a nice touch. This gives the hint that they might have feeling for each other if your reading this for the first time. Mac is probably the most seen background stallion in the show. He still as quiet as on the show maybe Naruto can help him out there. Applejack’s intro here was very well done. In the pic Naruto kinda looks a little embarrassed. Also seems Aj might have a little problem with Rarity but they'll hash it out. Pinkie is exactly the same as in the show and she looks playful as ever. And Naruto seem to have just about figured the elements out. By the way, what would be the opening song for this point in story?
Lady like and masculine really? Also you need a space between lady and like.
8147981 Fixed.
Well I got spoiled on who naruto Is shipped with from your profile picture kyuubi....GREAT job there buckaroo....
Which brings to mind......
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