After being attacked by a Nightmare creature Naruto awakens to find himself in the magical nation of Equestria. Making the best of his situation he befriends its citizens and make a new life there unaware of the role he will play in its future.
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I think I might have forgotten about the confessing to that kiss part. Other then that I did write about everything else.
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I don't even remember Twilight Analyzation bit to be honest. I did rewrite that part for the sheer purpose of making Twilight that kind of fighter, but I can not recall anything else.
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Is the name still Night Shade? I screwed up and decided to change her name into Midnight. I don't know what was going on, but I changed it for thematic reasons. I think Midnight was the alpha version from the first version.
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Yeah I went with the latter, but decided screw it, I wanted to save the fun version of a scene like this when the entire Mane Six could get in on it.
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How do other people do nerdy Twilight? I'm not sure what you mean.
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That's right. Love. Character. Fluff. I am incredibly excellent on those. I just wish I was better at fighting dialogue and plots. XD.
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To be honest CheerMac was pretty much the main reason, then I spontaneously made them like siblings. XD It worked so well.
Oh that crafty little pegasus. She found a way to make Naruto accept her money that he wouldn't argue to much with!
Looking forward to when Naruto finishes revealing his past to the girls too, he's half-way done already.
Love this chapter. Glad to see Fluttesrhy using her modeling as a way to help Naruto.
So Fluttershy’s plan all along was to model for a while until she got enough money for Naruto’s dojo…clever little girl. At least with most of the money down, Naruto can finally start working on his dojo and start giving out lessons. I can now see why you made this a two parter. While I’m not a big fan of this episode, except for Fluttershy’s general adorableness and her little freakout on the catwalk, I did like how you portrayed Rarity’s jealousy over Fluttershy becoming a model and her redemption towards the end with Naruto.
You know I'm very on the fence with Photo Finish. I understand she's a very tropey character in that she is a domineering fashion photographer but I just don't like the mare. Maybe its just her personality itself being a bit too much compared to some of the other characters of the show, but she's really just a throwaway character to me.
For the conclusion of this episode I feel that you did a great job in having Naruto be the one pushing for Fluttershy to quit seeing as she is uncomfortable being center stage here. Doesn't help that he came off a bit to blunt in pointing out that Rarity was the one wanting a chance at making it big here. He was speaking the harsh truth here and seeing as they are so early in their relationship, the harsh truth of Rarity's desire for success is still a little to fresh. Their resolution to the conflict was done very well and didn't seemed to rushed. I could definitely see this conflict lasting maybe one more chapter if it didn't become resolved.
The fact that the only reason Fluttershy wanted to continue modeling was for Naruto was a sweet act on her part; just doomed from the start. Fluttershy at this point would probably buckle under the pressure of the fame. I still love the kicking the vase scene as its still one of the funniest ones from the show and I'm happy its still here. Rarity and Fluttershy's talk about their issues here were quick and too the point. Nothing to changed from the show but still fine here.