After being attacked by a Nightmare creature Naruto awakens to find himself in the magical nation of Equestria. Making the best of his situation he befriends its citizens and make a new life there unaware of the role he will play in its future.
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I have to applaude you for your continuous effort to entertain your readers. This shows a lot of hard work on your part and for that, I thank you.
It doesn't matter I think it is important to get the average viewers perspective.
Do you think you could do a sort of Mane Six Reacts to Naruto's Life sometime down the line? Like showing how he got his nindo, Sasuke's defection, the encounters with the Akatsuki, the Fourth Ninja War and his final battle with Sasuke?
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I'm not interested in doing that. Its 99% of the same thing in every fic of every crossover that does it. There's crying and disbelief about those evil Konohains. I'm not interested in that.
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That's the thing, I don't go in blind I would have to go in and learn more about noir content in general before I go and explore something with those themes. I don't like going in not knowing any of the context or themes of a work.
I really like the fact that Fluttershy and Twilighr are developing closer bonds with Naruto.
Who the hell in there right mind if fucking trying to mug fluttershy.
This chapter... such a ship tease...
You also still have some errors from converting this to anthro,
Noticed this same issue last chapter too.
The bonds between Fluttershy, Twilight and Naruto are growing all the time. The scene between Naruto and Twilight with the scrolls is a good one for me. Just seeing how new Twilight is to the whole friendship thing and how she reacts to some of them scenarios really shows how much she's trying to get it right, and even the smallest thing can set her off. It's kinda cute and innocent, like a little puppy that doesn't know when it does something wrong. Fluttershy's scene though kinda came out the left field for me. I was kinda wondering if this is something that I could see happening, but it did improve the friendship between the two of them so it's not bad actually, just kinda suprised me is all lol.
5321101 Aah yes thank you, its always nice when someone has something worthwhile to say. As for checking out your fic, I'm afraid I have little next to know information on the whole noir setting so I don't think my feedback would be all that great.
Might want to go over it again I know you're using content from the first chapters before the rewrite. (Months until he finally felt comfortable enough to use hooves all that time. Naruto couldn’t help but feel both hurt and angry.) Since the characters are anthro now you will have to come up with something else since they have hands.
After that nice bit of foreshadowing at the beginning this chapter was a nice break from the chaos that was Boast Busters. Naruto and Pinkie's scene within the Corner was a nice insight into their budding relationship and again it shows how easy it is for Pinkie to needle Naruto's composure. For a guy who usually keeps a level head in this story this was one of the first times we see Naruto not in control both in his anger and his worry over something he was unable to stop.
Before this chapter most readers probably saw that this Naruto may have been a little too perfect outside of embarrassing situations with the girls when they teased him. Sure he wasn't overpowered physically but his demeanor and interactions were a bit too perfect at first glance. Here though we see Naruto in two different situations where he shows actual, realistic responses to situations that anyone could find themselves.
Firstly is his legit anger towards Twilight when his hard work is ruined by her nosiness. Sure it could be fixed in a day or so, but the fact that it happened would annoy anyone. His response may seem harsh but given the circumstances of those scrolls I would be mad too. Twilight's curious nature is fine and dandy but when you go nosing around things that people tell you not to expect to be reprimanded. Quite frankly she's lucky that Naruto realized how much of an ass he made himself out when it came down to a friendship or doing some extra work. The resolution between the two was very nicely done and both realized their faults.
Lastly we saw the the first signs of legit panic and worry from our displaced ninja when he found himself in the middle of Fluttershy being attacked by an old bully. Really this scene from the start to waking up the next day was probably my favorite from the chapter. This would be a horrifying scene to walk into and Naruto's whirlwind of emotions here were greatly done. To be honest, I don't think we've seen any retribution towards this stallion which would definitely be a nice comeuppance. Overall this was a nice and insightful look of how Naruto viewed his relationship with Fluttershy so early in the story.
It should be done instead of doing.
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Naruto is still sleeping with the scrolls
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Agreed. Show me the fool and I'll have his head on a plate by nightfall.