After being attacked by a Nightmare creature Naruto awakens to find himself in the magical nation of Equestria. Making the best of his situation he befriends its citizens and make a new life there unaware of the role he will play in its future.
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Love how Naruto pointed out all the flaws the town, the Mane 6, and Trixie did thought the Boast Busters episode? Didn't really like how self righteous all of the girls but Twilight, Shy, and PP acted in that episode or how Snips and Snails got a minor punishment while Trixie got her career ruined. Thanks for this chapter.
I really hope Naruto returns to his human form. Maybe when they go up against Discord he could accidentally do it. Naruto's chakra and Discord's chaos magic could combine and have unexpected results. Also, there were some mistakes but overall it was fine. Getting someone to do a little editing wouldn't hurt, but as I said, it wasn't too bad.
Does Naruto have only Kurama, or does he have bits from the other 8 as well?
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Yeah I took some time to really think about how I wanted to handle this chapter. It took me more effort and consideration then usual, but I still felt like I may have flubbed some dialogue or repeated some passages at points. Though I do enjoy setting up important set-up that is of course going to eventually pay off.
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I've been looking for an editor/beta reader. No one wants to do it or answer. I'm hoping someone eventually will do it.
As for the human thing its one of those elements that is going to pop up time and again.
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I'm leaving that up for everyone to wonder and to debate about.
5317319 Pop up as in he returns to being a human :D? It would also be nice if he returned to his old strength, although I'm assuming you made him weak because he might have been too strong. It will be interesting to see him grow stronger as the story progresses. Maybe even stronger than Celestia and Luna. It's just kind of painful seeing him so weak.
I've been wondering, how old is Naruto here? It's been maybe 2 years since I've read Naruto, but if I remember right, he was 16 in the comic, wasn't he?
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He was around his early thirties. The manga has ended.
5317898 Being stronger than an Alicorn would be just reckless as they are at least Star busters in my head canon.
5317990 How old is in your story?
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That remains to be seen.
Soooo...the alicorn amulet has reared it's ugly head up again. I was actually wondered what happened to it after Nightmare Moon's defeat and I know you, you wouldn't have it just show up when you get to "Magic Duel" out of nowhere without some kind of explentation for it. Also, bravo on how you played Trixie out. Most people just kind of tend to make her stuck up for no real reason and that bothers me a lot when you introduce someone without giving them a reason on why their like the way they are. I'm curious now what exactly Night Shade's plan is and how it involves Trixie, guess we'll just have to wait and see.
Spike... Go with the Soul Patch! It suits you.
Not the biggest fan of Boast Busters but this was a fun read that added a bit more to the overall episode. The bit about how it is difficult for unicorns to learn magic outside of their cutie marks was an interesting spin on just how powerful unicorns can be. Being as this is the first time we see Trixie I thought Naruto's initial reaction to her appearance was funny seeing as her outfit seems a bit revealing to what he's used to.
This chapter also brings to mind how unintentionally rude some of the girls can be. I'm not the biggest Trixie fan, but I do feel that she was somewhat in the right when she outsmarted some of the girls when they intentionally heckled her. Trixie is a performer and boasting is kind of her thing if she wants to get some recognition. I will say that Naruto's scolding of the crowd was a nice bonus since being as this was almost right after Nightmare Moon you would think the citizens would have a bit more respect towards their saviors.
The bit about Twilight's trust being taken advantage of was a cool way to explain why she wasn't the most sociable of mares when she showed up in Ponyville. It also explains just why Twilight isn't big on being the center of attention. She isn't close to Fluttershy levels of shyness but more along the lines of not gaining more attention then she already has.
Finally it was nice to read about the cameo's of some of the better known background characters. From Time Turner to Bulk Biceps, I felt that each had a nice role in this chapter no matter how small it was. Also Lyra still being a badass with shields still gets me. I really can't wait to see if her reaction to Bon Bon's secret in Slice of Life is different later on down the road.
Este es un enfoque más maduro de la misma historia