After being attacked by a Nightmare creature Naruto awakens to find himself in the magical nation of Equestria. Making the best of his situation he befriends its citizens and make a new life there unaware of the role he will play in its future.
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You're asking like chapter 20 in of a two-hundred chapter story?
17,893 words,
Part me wants more... the other wants you to rest those fingers because god damn! you deserve a good rest.
Great way to end the most epic fighting I've read in a loooong time!
Geeze there's a ton of things to cover in this finale but I'll try to cover some of the more stand out parts that this chapter consisted of.
Firstly, the battle between Midnight/Eclipse/Nightmare and Twilight and co was the best within the story yet. Sure, this isn't saying much given I've praised the past bouts that a majority of your arc's end with, but considering how much was at stake and the final outcome this was an epic battle that certainly left me satisfied. Eclipse herself was a great end boss for the arc and season finale whose actions greatly shaped just how power the Nightmare could be once given free reign. Twilight held her own throughout the battle up until Eclipse pulled her trump card in anger, but everyone's favorite purple pony pulled through brilliantly. The struggle throughout the fight showed a great deal of skill and luck on Twilight's end that flowed perfectly from the initial Midnight/Twilight magic tossing to the stripping of the Nightmare from a clearly neglected mare manipulated by a malevolent force.
And with that we get into the probably the most controversial piece of the story. I can see some throwing a fit with this section of the chapter, but outside of some initial surprise at actually going this route, I'm all for it. Throughout the story I've felt that Midnight would probably die when her time came so it was a great surprise to see that she would get a chance at redeeming herself. Sure, its probably going to be a long a arduous path for the teen but its bringing an interesting dynamic for the story here on out. It also help's that her backstory itself is a bit more complex then some of the other Dark Elements.
Now to continue this thread we reach the big dividing point that may turn off people from the story which is the chibi-fying of Nightmare into Nyx. I've no problem with this inclusion of the young Nightmare other then maybe having Twi scoop her up for adoption so suddenly seeing as its a bit overused with the Nyx character. It will be interesting to see how you go with her as a part of the herd's shared responsibility now that Naruto and the girls are willing to chip in with raising her. I did like the confrontation that Luna had with the filly by giving her this chance to prove herself at being redeemable and it would have been a huge switch if she were to have offered to take up adopting her instead but given this fic, I have a feeling Lulu is going to have a hard time completely accepting Nyx as being innocent. Even though it may be a big turnoff to some now that Nyx has joined the fray, I can't help but wait to see what kind of misadventures the young Nightmare gets herself as the story goes.
The music throughout this arc was greatly appreciated since it did a great job in setting the tone of the battles that were abundant in this crazy roller coaster of a ride these past couple of weeks have been. I may not have been blown away with Undertale as an innovative game, but I will say its soundtrack is probably the best of this year and its tracks work very well with this story. Hope to see even more tone setting music in the future given that game soundtracks aren't that appreciated in this day and age outside of few yearly releases.
The artwork was a nice preview and I can't wait until the final products are revealed. Definite props to your artiest for her commissions to the story so far.
Finally, the wedding itself was a nice way to cut the tension that the last bundle of chapter's had piled onto us readers. The banter between characters was great and the part itself had a ton of highlights hinting at maybe some future events. I was waiting for Chrssy to make her move and I hope we get some more interactions between the Queen and Naruto. I'm definitely okay with that pairing even if its just a one-sided affair for some comedy. It certainly flowed well into giving us one last NaruxTia moment to end the season. We're still waiting for that realization to occur, man!
Great job and I can't wait for season 3 whenever you decide to tackle that can of worms since I feel its most likely going to be original content given the actual canon season was so weak.
Naruto losing? What is this madness?!
+ What the guy below me said.
You know, if not for the author's note up top, I might not have seen that coming. As it is though, the note told me everything I needed to know.
In other words, I was expecting it as soon as I had read that note. :)
6721308 Indeed a fitting finale for Season 2. Hopefully we'll see a preview for next season. Truly fitting that Rarity caught the bouquet considering her wedding with Naruto is coming up. I also loved the last picture with Celestia and Naruto dancing with Pinkie in the sidelines with a knowing smirk. Foreshadowing!
6721471 Good point, removing that bit of the note.
Well lets see here we have a chapter with nearly 20,000 words to it's name and... well I loved it. The sound track's that you have really set the mood very well.
There is so much to this chapter and I... all I can say is that it was phenomenal great job.
I want to say that I was supersized that you had Nightmare redeemed...no that's not right. That Nightmare has a chance to be good now but what I really want to say is this. This story marks the second or it it third time that I have read a story where Nightmare becomes a good pony. well not well she still has a lot to answer for that's for sure and it is no doubt to be a long road for her. But maybe Nightmare getting a second chance is more common than I think and I'v just not come across any more than the 2-3 stories(Including this one) that have had this plot point.
Well such a great end to season 2 and I'm looking forward to season 3.
I'll read you later-BFBL
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So here we have a Nyx who used to be the very dark force that turned Luna and Rarity into their respective Nightmare selves (I'm sorry, but when I think of a pony named 'Radiance', a certain member of Spike's favorite team of comic book superheroines is the first thing that comes to mind), instead of the result of an incomplete resurrection spell, huh? That's an interesting take on her origins. And she'll have Naruto as a major influence in her life, to boot. Definitely going to be fun seeing what Sombra's return will be like now.
I love this story and I really hope something more happens between Chrysalis and Naruto. One thing I'd like to mention, though, is that the URL says this is chapter 199, not 200. I just thought I'd mention that.
I double checked, and there are definitely only 199 chapters posted. Could there have been a chapter you forgot to upload? Or could you have just miscounted? I'm just curious because I don't know.
I have a nagging suspicion that your version of King Sombra will be essentially a ponified version of this guy.
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Not that there would be anything wrong with that. In fact it would be legendary!
6723531 Everyone needs to stop bringing that up. The whole one steve limit trope is incredibly stupid because hundreds of people actually share a name in real life so everyone needs to stop making the shared name thing be bigger than it is. Hell in fanon their are secondary characters that share names in their names so I don't see why people keep bringing up the radiance name issue you know.
6724894 I don't know who that is.
6725116 Ummm. Arthas Menethil? The Lich King? One of the most evil people in Azeroth? No? Alright fine then Sombra will be a pony version of...... The Lord of the Rings, the Dark Lord of Mordor Sauron!
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Thou flesh will wither and thou soul lie naked before the Lidless Eye!
6725116 There's actually a massive fanfic on this site that features him. Arthas that is. It's called Rebirth of the Damned, by Borsuq.
6724894 Sombra and The Lich King are scarily similar.
6725197 Nice to see another fan.
6725199 I know right? But let's keep the fan talk to a minimal, don't want to spoil it for anyone unfamiliar with the characters or their prospective series.
6725200 Heh, its a good story. Never really played WoW, so most of my knowledge of The Lich King and Warcraft in general comes from that story.
Its actually the same with Legend Of Zelda,(Equestrian Windmage) Spider-man, (Spiders and Magic), and Metroid,(Metroid Equis).
Man... fanfics really can teach you things.
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6725213 Did you read the official Novel, Arthas Rise of the Lich King? It's free and on the internet these days. It tells you everything you ever wanted to know about Arthas. Also check out Nobbel87 Lore videos on YouTube which features loads of Lore and stories about the world of warcraft.
6725230
Well. I know what happened, I did finish WarCraft 3. It was a while ago though... Might do me good to replay it.
6725242 Such a great game. When will Warcraft IV come?
6725291 Do you mean IV?
6725293 Ooops. That was a typo. Anyways.... Who is your favorite character from Warcraft? Gul'dan for me personally.
6725299
Shrugs
I dunno. I like the Arthas/Matthias from Rebirth of the Damned.
6725115 probably because everyone's so used to calling Rarity's Nightmare self, "Nightmare Rarity".
6725779 Which isn't really all that inspired.
6727458 True, but still…
Edit: And 'Nightmarity' just sounds childish.
Someone really likes their Undertale.
6727829 The Hypest!
JESUS CRIST!! THE FEELS!!!!!!
p.s. this is one of the longest stories I have EVER read
Why is the Font so much Bigger in this Chapter?
Always Good to End on A High Note, Like with some Naruto X Celestia.
YAY FOR NYX
Man where to start with this one. It's great their all happy too see Spike again but they've got to catch up later since they've got a fight to finish. So that's what Twilight looks like in her armor and using her full power, she certainly looks powerful. They were really going at it, this seem like a fight between demi goddesses with how nearly everything they did they almost completely changed to landscape around them whenever they clashed but Twilight seem a little better and she held her own till the other finally caught up with her and she surprised but happy to see her little brother again but they have to focus on defeating the enemy in front of them first. So that where the gems have been going and why they been gathering to her: all to give her their power. Wonderful teamwork between the elements and Spike but that was just round one and nearly every good villain always has some kind of fall back and this was a pretty good backup. The first villain not to make a grand speech and just try to kill the heroes the first chance she had. But even with all that they manage to not only survive, the got her to panic. If the element are sentient enough to choose they welders and response to their call then just like empathy the other would be able to talk to their welders. So Midnight's complete Backstory and a camo of Sunset Shimmer. It's sad that it was a innocence misunderstanding than drove her to the Nightmare. This definitely hits way too close to home for Twilight. Eclipse nearly won in trying to break Twilight's spirit but then she remember all the wonderful memories with her herd, her family and what she's fighting to protect. Twilight was just amazing, three on one and she beat them all with the others fighting with her in spirit. And they would always answer her call. I say as long as their together there nothing they can't do. So it became the nightmare by trying to help others but from how it treated Midnight it didn't completely lose it's goodness. Well this is the start of a new, better beginning for Midnight as Luna's student and Nightmare or rather Nyx as Twilight's daughter. Twilight's really grown up. And finally the actual Wedding. Well that was a interesting way for Chrysalis to say good bye. Hope we'll see her again in the future. And Celestia asking Naruto for a dance was a great way to end things. Overall this was a incredible chapter.
Couldn't help but think of the fight with asriel from undertale
rlly more undertale stuff
I ship it
add Celestia and Chrysalis to Narutos Herd/Harem.
Wow....... what a plot twist lmao I was NOT expecting that by any stretch. Now I'm really curious as to how this goes haha