After being attacked by a Nightmare creature Naruto awakens to find himself in the magical nation of Equestria. Making the best of his situation he befriends its citizens and make a new life there unaware of the role he will play in its future.
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You know just saying that is pointless. It helps out if you point out where they're needed. No I don't have an editor I used a program and fixed it up based on that.
You seem to jump form using hands to using hoofs. That needs to be addressed.
Aside from that i'm enjoying the story.
Keep up the good work.
Though the chapter was short, I enjoyed Naruto's flashback about how he met Fluttershy.
5212266 Sorry, I thought the program was better than this, butt I've never personally used it.
I'll pre-read if you need it.
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Okay, now that's helpful, thank you. Quite honestly the version of the program I used remove the grammar check function which sucks. I'll get on to repairing the chapter.
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Yeah okay I post the wrong version. I know half the errors you pointed out I had corrected in a document.
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You want to be my official beta? No matter what programs I use they seem to miss these errors and its annoying.
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Hooves still refer to the feet. Otherwise a result of missing the term from the result of the rewriter.
5216611 sure! I'm only human, so I will miss some.
5224742 do the have hands or hooves ?
There's so much addorableness in this chapter, I feel like I might faint lol. While the flashback between Naruto and Fluttershy is a little small compared to Rarity's, you have to realize that Naruto has not had much interaction with Fluttershy as much as he has with Rarity, which explains why it's short, which makes sense in the end. I didn't say it the other chapters, but it's good to see while Twilight's interaction with the other bearers isn't that much different from the actual shows verison, its different enough to make it it's own version.
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Hands, just an issue my betas seem to keep missing.
Question. Will Naruto have access to his chakra and jutsu or is he just a pony?
in the pic with Naruto and fluttershy. Naruto looks like a drug addict
Who does the art for this?
Nice description of Fluttershy, but seems like her attributes give her a lot of unwanted attention. She truly live up her namesake but its a good thing Naruto there to help her work through her issues but she perks right up in front of any cute animal especially one she hasn't see before. Another thing that's hardly changed is Naruto being reckless but at least he trying. I guess the animals could tell there was some different about him. Overall cute first meeting. And nice surprise ending
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bLOODYRILEY USED to.