After being attacked by a Nightmare creature Naruto awakens to find himself in the magical nation of Equestria. Making the best of his situation he befriends its citizens and make a new life there unaware of the role he will play in its future.
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That megaton punch was badass. Enough said.
I vote bonding chapter.
6338100 I have a feeling that Flutters may be the one to end her in some way. Either intentionally or unintentionally.
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I know, this was one of those it really needed to be hashed out. I can tell you hands down I've read just about every decent or worth reading harem story on this site and I can vouch none of them has ever done anything like this. XD.
Now comes the planning for the wedding and all the things that come with it. I can already see the pre-wedding chaos that may be popping up before the big day. If I could make a suggestion seeing as Twilight will be planning the wedding would having Amethyst be her assistant be a good idea and possibly help Naruto bond with the teen? The two have basically been on pins and needles around each other and seeing as Slice of Life made her out as being a great organizer outside of Twilight it could be a good source of material.
I found the interactions between Naruto and Rarity to be very well done and none of their dialogue seemed awkward. I've very much enjoyed how well their relationship has progress since the start of the story. I do like Naruto's indecision on where they will be living once thy tie the knot. It definitely brought to mind just where their permanent residence will be seeing as the castle is a ways away from popping up (if that castle makes it into this fic that is).
Kind of worried to see such grumblings within the ranks of the royal guard. If its one thing that Equestria doesn't need its dissension within its ranks as the enemy continues to grow stronger. The lack of organization shown by Heavy Back's unit could spell some defeats for Equestria if a major skirmish appears in the future.
I would definitely be interested in maybe 1 or 2 bonding chapters that featured the CMC to some degree. I feel that they may need some fluff before things get dark and what better way then by the puppy dog eyes of the CMC? Also if you need a break then feel free to do so. I think all of the readers here will agree that you churn out more content weekly then most authors do in a month's time. A short holiday will probably help recharge your creativity for FiM: Equestrian Heroes.
6338214 And that usually kills it for me outside of purely comedy harem stories.
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Here's what kills it for me.
Stories that don't describe the characters looks/clothing/features at all. Too lazy to bother to do it. If this is your story make the characters you're own, giving them detailed features.
I also hate stories that don't even attempt to show you the world or describe the events that happen. I know people don't like purple prose, but gods sake a little every once and awhile can enrich the story.
OOC. Pyscho obsessed with experiment Twilight, Bitchy Rarity or Rainbow, or crazy Fluttershy shows the writer isn't that intelligent or just wants to use the universe for views without any understanding or respect for the show, setting, or creators of gen 4. Its annoying and disgusting really.
Just like how I hate no consequence seventh element fics. Their added dialogue is space filler that doesn't change anything until they're the super special awesome guy that defeats the villain and downplays everyone else.
My only other problem with these harem fics is if they make the characters too easy/slutty or really slutty despite nothing these characters are inexperienced. Nothing ruins a story for me when the female characters just take the abuse or if the male character just overly focuses on the sex stuff without any emotions or development put into it.
Sadly a good deal of this community is immature and eats that stuff up. Its why 2/10 out of the featured stories is usually garbage and 4/10 of it is the newest badly written smut garbage that appeals to fetishes without any decent story to it.
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I think I'm just going to take a break and not worry about writing Saturday. Luckily I got tomorrow off as well. But everyone wants bonding, so guess I'm done bonding chapters tomorrow. XD.
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We can't have everything going alright in the Equestrian Guard. XD. As I noted before their be dissent.
6338320 This! So much this!
I've recently found it hard to actually find a new fic to read because you have to slog through the garbage that usually tops the charts here. It seems like the last two months have especially been bad since a good chunk of my favorite stories are taking awhile to update. It's actually how I found this fic in the first place when I decided to go through the crossover list hoping to find something to kill a few minutes reading. You'll find yourself in some dark times when you have to search through the latest updated stories filter.
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Ppft I put a tracking on all my incompleted stories and those I might want to read and just be done with it. I pretty much use other stories as a measuring stick on, yeah I want to avoid doing this because its retarded. You've be surprised just how much this story has improved because I see the terrible decisions in harem stories and just write the opposite of what I read. XD
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Well I wanted a balance. Playful, light-hearted and a bringer of joy. She could also be a tease and sexy without making her a complete whore like some fics too. She can get depressed and experience sadness without it being one of many worthless dark fics trying to be overly edgy. Basically taking the basis of everything that is Pinkie and making her into a fully well rounded character.
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Dude try finding a story like that and without her being slutty. I've only seen a few of them myself. But yeah Final Mix Version will at long last have that legendary prologue scene that showed the first battle between Naruto and Shadowfright. Still haven't wrote that up after all this time. XD
6338460 Really when it comes down to it the only fics I've found that give the reader a good Tia for the most part are some of the CelestiaxTwilight fics where they are lovers or where Tia acts like a mother to Twilight.
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And the fluff ones with Luna. Honestly oneshots I wouldn't count. The best one that comes to mind isn't even really Celestia.
You know the one, the one with Alternia right? If you don't, hold out on reading it til I finish season 2 of the fic so you'll have something good to read when I'm on hiatus. XD
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Even as far as back then I had things planned out. But yeah just a little subversion of evil is sexy on my part. I'm not a fan of leather pantsing. Fanfics are an exception if you AU it or give a detailed or reasonable backstory.
As usual I hate Protagonist Centered Morality. One of the worst tropes of all times and you're a failure of a writer if you rely on that or sociopathic protagonists and portray them as heroes. If you want to go that route then correctly portray them as villainous protagonists or anti-heroes, not what they are not.
And I know, I really hated the easy out the writers did for the show. If you're going to have certain elements for your show don't just back out, continue with it. Its just lazy writing to disregard continuity. I'm not a fan of negative continuity because its just an excuse to be lazy when it comes to a show.
That reaction. I don't even know what to do for that.
I love this Story
6352659 Yeah thats right, thats the most prominent story with the idea and where I got the idea from.
6354174 Yeah I do.