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I has a sad.
Actually, you DID give her just desserts. Chapters ago.
So... we cool? We cool, right?
Diamond Tiara did get her just desserts, though. Now, we see things start mending.
A heart-warming chapter, to be sure.
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butt y
I think diamond had enough punishment and that forgiveness goes a long way and is way more profound than any punishment can ever do. This chapter is freaking golden, and damn it thunderlane for being a silly colt again and doing something stupid again.
I almost, almost called Silver Spoon's father Coke Spoon.
im not at all mad about the diamond tiara situation, as an author you have every right to torture each and every character in their own unique ways wether they see it as torture or not
Um...
She got swarmed by bees...
I think that's enough
Eh, DT got her "just deserts" when Dinky summoned a horde of bees to sting her, in my opinion. it's nice to see a story where her character flaws are explored a little.
Thunderlane is gonna get his head smashed in one of these days. He's not the brightest bulb in the box, is he?
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Thunderlane needs some desserts. But just dessert. No dinner.
Edit. Nuts! I'm tired, and it shows. Damn you sleep deprivation!
I'd say Diamond Tiara got her just deserts. And now she's found an oasis. Of friendship.
(I know what you meant, but I got a chance for a sappy metaphor and took it for all it was worth. I too regret nothing.)
I do like Berry's plan, though it's clearly not going to go quite as well as she hopes. Here's hoping it stays pretty close to that, though.
Looking forward to more. And given your ludicrous update rate, I'll be getting it quite soon.
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But her plan is perfect. In involves ponies and sexy times in a bathtub. And one of those ponies has a cutie mark just for bubble baths, so imagine what she can do in a tub full of bubbles! Destiny!
What do you mean she didn't get her just desserts?
She was almost stung to death.
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I dunno, seemed like a lot of people expected or wanted something bad to happen when Dinky visited the hospital.
4345332 I've seen some stories where he's called Sterling Silver, which I think is a decent name. Also THE FEELS.
If only people were like this
Also.. THE FEEEEELLLSS
Diamond t is a terrible pony who earned her punishment...... but there comes a time when punishment gives way to healing and forgiveness. She needs a chance to do better. Hopefully she will be a better pony now.
One thousand wats. A near-death experience, horrible mutilation and sheer agony is overkill for mere verbal bullying. What more does she deserve?
Just...wow. You handled everything perfectly. Another excellent chapter in the books!
So Silver Spoon's mother is another idiot? And she's moving?
Good, Ponyville will do better without them.
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Well... a hug i would guess, given that
a) she now learned her lesson and
b) it would not cause her pain to be touched right now.
Also I'm still wondering how Diamand Tiara and Silver Spoon actually survived the stings. They must have had an anaphylactic shock, if the swellings are that bad.
Great chapter, it was very emotional. That being said, Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon got their just desserts and then some. I'm very happy DT looks to be on her way to an emotional recovery, but really she very nearly died so I'm gonna go ahead and say this was a needed outcome. The fact that SS isn't even being given the chance to speak with Dinky is itself a crime in my opinion. I think it's fair to say she might not react in the same fashion that DT did, but she still ought to have had the opportunity.
As it stands now, not only is she gravely injured but she undoubtedly came to some similar conclusions that DT did, which is no one except her teacher cared enough to try to comfort her after she suffered a horrific accident. We have to remember, these are children and they don't deserve to sustain life threatening injuries just because they are bullies. Generally speaking, bullies are emotionally or physically damaged themselves from a poor upbringing. So yes, this was a great chapter, but I think you need to cut your own characters a bit of slack!
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Regarding Silver Spoon.
Yes, she may have reacted in a similar fashion to Diamond Tiara, but we will never know. I chose to resolve the situation the way I did to really drive home the point of nature and nurture being a factor here.
It is five AM, so bear with me.
Silver Spoon might have gone the right way and made a recovery both emotional and physical. But she wasn't given that option by her parents. Her parents made that choice for her, and have chosen to nurture their daughter's more destructive social habits. It is a sad lesson and a terrible bit of social commentary on my part, and I agonised over how to resolve everything... The original idea was to have Silver Spoon and Diamond Tiara sharing a room and having everything all heart felt and sappy...
And then I realised that Silver Spoon and Diamond Tiara would have still had one another, and the profound loneliness they needed to change just wouldn't be there. They'd still be reinforcing one anothers behaviours, either indirectly or directly.
So, I concluded they had to go at it alone. That was the first major revision.
And then, as I worked through the ripple effects of the changes in my head, I realised that having both of them redeemed just felt wrong somehow. I couldn't put my finger on it. I put a lot of work into building up Filthy Rich as a character, so you can see his involvement, and you can sort of understand that greater forces were at work for Diamond Tiara.
I did nothing to build up Silver Spoons parents, or even Silver Spoon, never quite knowing which direction which to go with her, the situation never gaining clarity as I tried to approach it. She was there, but the muses had not spoken. She was a tragic figure for which the curtain would not open no matter what I did. For a time, I pondered actually having Silver Spoon die, but the muses gave no clear indicators on that either. They were silent, taunting me, waiting to see if I could puzzle this out on my own.
Until I went through another major revision and things began to feel right. One of them had to be the sacrificial lamb that drives home the point that bad parenting is just as bad as being a bad foal. Silver Spoon wouldn't be allowed redemption because her parents would rob it away from her, like they had obviously stolen everything else.
To be honest, it was a painful decision. While I do delight in torturing my characters sometimes, I took no pleasure in this decision, because for me, it hits too close to home. I suffered a few pangs of bad memories and some depression as I wrote through these bits, and felt very bad when I determined Silver Spoon's fate.
As a deeply personal note, when I was a little kid, I went running through a field where I was told not to go running. I was young, and stupid, and did things that young and stupid kids did regularly, and as I was running through the field, I stepped on an underground hornets nest.
My foot went straight down, breaking through the earth, and the inhabitants therein were quite irate about my intrusion. They swarmed me, stung me, and damn near killed me. I was hospitalised for a long time, with thousands of stings. I remain deathly allergic to stings and even one can kill me now.
It is a fate I would wish on no one, but it is a pain I understand. I was a profoundly different person after the experience. I changed, though many would argue not for the better.
Now i understand the last sentence, well Thunderlane had really do something wrong
It is a beautiful Chapter, its one of my favourite one, i think Bucky here was the strongest one at the Moment and i like that. I see it like that, Bucky watch at their mental beeing a bit, maybe later abouth all of them, Berry try to create or hold the bond that they had and help them to understand each other, and Derpy is the caring mother wich give all of them a strong shoulder and try to comfort them. It is my personal try to interpret that version of yours.
I know it is not exactly right, but thats a bit like i see it.
Did anyone know what Diamon Tiara is realla mention to to with her cutiemark? I think Silverspoon has kind of the right manners maybe, well in some things, and i prefer Silverspoon, but i start to like Diamon Tiara.
Did Silverspoon travell in another town with her family? it looks like she is going to move.
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And you know what? That's fine. It is a very well written chapter I think, very believable. In fact I think Silver Spoon's parents reaction is both tragic and actually the more realistic outcome of what would logically happen here. Even if a real world analogue of this situation were to have occurred in some fashion, with no legal repercussions pending against Dinky, no child or parent would probably want to see the one indirectly responsible for their plight.
I think I just kinda wanted to say that it sounded like you sought some karmic retribution against Diamond and Silver, and you got it! This was no half measure, and it was keenly felt by all. And I'm kind of a softy at heart anyway, so when everything is said and done I always prefer happy endings for all. It's not a realistic expectation, and I'm often disappointed for it, but there it is. Anyway, I'm looking forward to seeing what happens next sir.
Edit: Also, bees hurt! I think most people can sympathize with Diamond, Silver, and yourself as a kid that even one sting hurts a lot... much less a hive. I've never been stung by an actual bee, but as a young child I was fooled by an older boy in my grand parents old neighborhood to run under an early stage hornet nest in the middle of summer- to grab a football he threw against the awning it was developing on. Bad times haha. Could've been worse though, I got out with only 7 stings on my head and hands.
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Mental WHAT now?! is that a typo or a pun?
Quite honestly, i thank you for this chapter. THis was a turnout i was really hoping for (Mostly because i love Diamond Tiara and hope she learns and becomes a better filly). I really hoped for Silver Spoon's point of view but at least you gave a reason why its not presented. Thanks for that.
YOU REGRET EVERYTHING YOU LYING SACK OF POOP
Thunderlane...just stop playing spy/recon for the flock...just stop. You're not good at it, and it just results in Rainbow Dash beating you up.
4350708 they were attacked by Dinky's summoned bee horde hence beeing
Chuck Lorre Productions #432
I've been told that the act of forgiveness frees the person doing the forgiving from harboring dark, and ultimately self- destructive, emotions. While there is no guarantee that the transgressor will be relieved of shame and guilt, the forgiver will always feel better. In other words, forgiveness is, first and foremost, self-serving. Now I am all about self-serving, so for the last few years I have been practicing a sort of forgiveness mantra. Upon awakening and before retiring, I visualize those who have harmed me and imagine myself flowing love and compassion toward them. Additionally, I wish for them to have everything they could possibly want. I'm happy to report that it's working. Slowly, over time, anger has become resentment has become indifference has become amusement has become affection. And now I'm free and my heart is full.
You believe me?
Do I believe me?
I can just see Thunderlane being swatted with every word spoken to him at the end... Just like...
“Thunderlane,*swatt* you’re*swatt* a*swatt* chowderhead *swatt* for *swatt* telling*swatt* her*swatt* that*swatt* her*swatt* foal*swatt* was*swatt* taken*swatt* to *swatt*the*swatt* hospital,*swatt* you*swatt* never*swatt* tell*swatt* a*swatt* mother*swatt* something*swatt* like *swatt*that,*swatt* not*swatt* in*swatt* that*swatt* context*swatt* you*swatt* big*swatt* dummy.”*swatt**swatt**swatt*
4346388 Bronies harbor some very...enthusiastic believers in beating somepony when they're down. Most unfortunate.
Personally, I like where this is going.
Going back to the reference to those who might want more bad things to happen to Diamond...imagine a kid hit by a car and having both arms and legs broken, only to have people outside her window demanding she get an infection while in the hospital, leading to amputation.
Yeah, no.
I love healing. Please, more healing!
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I find this relevant.
That was awesome.
Dinky choosing to take the path of forgiveness instead of hate,
allowing Diamond Tiara a chance for redemption.
This story is officially off the chain.
Thunderlane: Now the officially sanctioned punching bag of Ponyville's Pegasus flock, and this story.
You made her ears look like potatoes from all the stings, stings that happened DAYS ago.
She got punished dude. Dunno about horses but people typically heal from bee stings pretty quickly.
Now magical hornets on the other hand, no idea bout those. Maybe you are a bastard.
But I think you doled out just enough punishment to be fitting for the character we all thing DA to be.
5409223 Nothing wrong with Potatoes is there?
I actually find it admirable.
The only issue I have (not a major issue mind) is Silver Spoon's portrayal. In the show, she seems, to me at least, that she bullies with Diamond Tiara to avoid being bullied herself. Or at the very least, just a standard bully's lacky. Silver Spoon never once instigated aggression towards the CMC, if my memory hasn't failed me. If I'm reading things right, Silver Spoon is at the same level of bully as Diamond Tiara.
Started reading this thing a couple days ago; was going to wait until I got a bit closer to the current chapter to make a comment, but I feel like saying that it's nice to see moments like this in fics. It's a nice change of pace and adds a good bit of depth to a character who sorely needs some.
I don't know who said that, but I imagine being said in a brooklyn accent.
Like
Nice chapter well done!
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Great chapter! Got right to the emotional goods, gave some hope for redemption for Diamond Tiara, and continued to build the little herd closer together.
Didn't get her-.... are you kidding me? Being put into the hospital after a near death experience, likely to be heavily scarred afterwards..... I'd say that's pretty far above her 'just desserts' after simple bullying and a few kicks. This is a situation where I could support DT before finding out about her mother/stepmother.
If Thunderlane couldn't fly I'd swear he was a Dodo!
ah another hint at the future greatness
not only did you manage to build character depth off of an antagonist
put you really pull in emotion, setting the atmosphere of pain and hope in a perfect way
I think I'll thank my brother for making me restart it really is nostalgic to see all of this and know where it goes
DT had her just desserts in a previous chapter, and now she had more just desserts, exactly what she needed. That scene made me cry. Kidzuhaiku, you're awesome.
4346906 I think this is good too, because of Story Reasons. Silver Spoon has never had any real Depth. Most of her lines are just parroting Diamond Tiara. She's just a lackey and not even one with any real personality of her own. I mean sure Harley Quinn was a lackey, but she had PERSONALITY she was MEMORABLE and LOVED. The only thing Silver Spoon EVER did to set her apart, was the ONE time she stood up to Diamond Tiara for Plot reasons.
You totally made the right choice. Furthermore, it's even BETTER with showing the difference that Nurture can make. About the power and influence that parents can wield over their children, much to their detriment. This is the opposite of the earlier lesson we were given, about when Children wield power over their Parents, much to the loss of the Parents.
In terms of DT getting her Just Rewards, she did. TWICE.
#1 She got stung bad enough to get sent the hospital. She's STILL messed up DAYS later. Enough where she is COMPLETELY bed ridden.
#2 NOPONY visited her in the hospital for DAYS, except Cherilee. Even then it was NOT a social visit. She was NOT there to make her feel better.
You did great work here.
Do you know how much pain Diamond would be in?! Karma's already dished out her punishment. So no hiding! Silly Kudzuhaiku.