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It was Derpy who noticed that he was not with them, and,?
I could see myself loving her just
Putting off those letters seems like a bad idea that is going to come back and bite them in the ass.
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Thanks, fixed.
And no, there will be no ass biting for the time being.
first of all, that picture is d'aww, second of all we need more dirty jokes, third we just need more, fourth I'm going to elaborate on everything in my mind while gulping down soda, have a nice day.
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This chapter, yet again, gives me the feels. The supreme feels. The ones you get when you realize that you aren't always having it the worst or gain new perspective on things. This chapter opens some serious discussion, I happen to love this serious discussion a ton.
"when he teach school" -> no single obvious replacement
And thanks for brightening my day for a few minutes. :)
It's ironic that the really wordy chapters seem to be in the most hectic setting of the story. It might be a good idea to spread out the heartfelt outpourings so it doesn't overwhelm the casual reader: just my opinion mind you, but I hope it helps.
Let's see, if I were to summarize this story in one sentence:
"Life is really hard, but you can hug it out."
Warm, wordy fuzzies all around, with a few interesting plot points buried in there. Especially Piña's sixth sense. Looks like she's a natural cultivator, which is likely something the Isles will need even after banishing the wolves. Of course, given her sensitivity, she'll likely not want to stay. But if she were to come back a little older and a little tougher... (Not harder, mind you. Just better able to handle the hardship.)
Also, very nice development for Ripple. She's a staggeringly clever little filly.
Looking forward to more.
Please stop with the long winded, Saturday morning special, family moments. I get it. They all love each other bunches and bunches. If you press it any more it's going to start sounding insincere.
'Dinky consumed so much of my life. I gave everything I had to look after her. I never thought of it this way,” Derpy confessed. “I need to talk with Thistle tomorrow.”'
You may want to change something here. Try changing, 'I never thought of it this way.' to, 'I never thought of it THAT way.' You may find it flows a little better. Just a friendly suggestion. Oh, and I called it early on, Thistle is a lesbian, she just got pregnant out of a feeling of obligation.
4701926 Yep, same here.
I absolutely love this story and it's characters... but in the more recent chapters, I feel as if you've been using dialogue to replace the things that could've been shown, for example the time when you spent an entire chapter without dialogue just to get the point across.
We’ll share some of this stuff with the foals when he teach school
And here is the weird, it almost sounds like parenting or something
1. When he teach school? Did you mean when he starts teaching in school?
2. I think you meant; and here is the weird part.
Thanks for the info concerning Bucky's decision. Granted I don't entirely understand it of course but I feel like I understand him better. And no, I didn't read the profiles. Yet.
Lots of bonding moments that people don't seem to like, heheheh eue
HUGS! HUGS ARE THE BEST FUCKING MEDICINE!
nicely done!
I, Boulder, the box of tissues destroyer (AGAIN)!
Chapter 80
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This is like a caustic poison to me....and I love it.
This one came at just the right time in the story.
I was just starting to think about how selfish this herd was, keeping all of their good fortune to themselves.
Way to go Dinky, for pulling the Guilt Trip on the rest of them, right when it was needed.