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First to not care about typos
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Where would they gain matter and mass to replicate themselves?
This concerns me.
Typical officer. Overtinking everything and stressing over the little things. Sentinel is a rough character to flesh out without ending up having to backpedal, or so it seems. Officers-especially of a lower rank- tend to seclude themselves and think about some things way to much, especially when they're in charge of mostly type A personalities ( the ones who are a hammer and every problem is a nail.)
Oh gawds, Peekaboo is like my niece when she was young, with the whole eggs and whatnot....anytime I made anything, if it had green, it was poisonous and must be flung into the floor or across the room. The dog ate well during those times, however...
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Peekaboo you mean. Harper had the runny oatmeal.
I like sentinel as a character very much, But I think that he should learn to loosen up. It would make him a great deal more enjoyable.
I would suggest starting with a lunar Pegasus style pounce and then move into other forms of physical affection like tickling.
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That's coming. Soon. From the most unlikely source.
5117998 Whups....That's what I get for typing while distracted...
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I believe reproducing is secondary to the primary hilarity of noisy airship humping.
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Take it, take you dirty slut, take it right in the bag!
Unf!
Aye, Captain, we're gonna need more grease when this is over.
RAMMING SPEED!
what i really look forward to is seeing just what will happen with diamond tiara. she is in a deep crisis about her live and with all right since she got her cutie mark while she was acting like a horrible pony. the mark itself doesn't give her much clues about what her future might hold and from what i have seen she seems to have a bit of an empathy problem and still has a habit of placing her own priorities first. i can only really see her picking up the same profession as her dad, entrepreneur. however that is, at best, gonna go nowhere before she gets her head on straight. absolutely worst case scenario is that she gives up on sentinel, just dedicates herself to learning business to drown the hole that leaves and eventually falls back into her unemphatic habits and becomes the most ruthless business mare of this time.
so yeah... i hope she gets her mind sorted out so that she can realize that yes, she really does like sentinel and yes, she wants to fall in love with him.
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The big reveal about Diamond Tiara hasn't even happened yet. That will come later. Maybe a hundred thousand words or so from now.
Ah, Sentinel... heroes be not measured in stature nor status.
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Are you still on about this? Can we stop the airshipping before it gets out of control?
5118048 good, that means that it's coming in about 2 weeks
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Right after the Griffon Diplomacy Arc and around the first few days of school once Sentinel has returned.
On the one hand I do think Sentinel is improving at a very rapid pace. Considering that the past several chapters have shown barely a week time. It's kind of odd considering the amount of chapters that have passed should be sufficient to show such change, but the slow time frame makes hard to stretch into a reasonable amount of time. I'd say since the return arc, everyone has grown by at least several months to a year, but in actual time its been a month maybe two.
When she was done wiping her face, she went to work on Harpers, even though it was a futile effort and Harper would only make her face dirty again.
Harper's
I think I'm gonna go royal anal typo spotting from here on out.
Lack of comma before the second "and".
Edited: I see a lot of repeated use of "and" with no comma in a single sentence. Kudzu, do you need to work a bit on sentence structure and possibly a bit of refining in choice of words?
Best foals
1 An OC from somewhere else.
2 Pina.
3 Peekaboo & Harper.
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Sure there should be a comma there? Feels funny.
5118317 Hmm, troubling that I just noticed this now. Guess I was too wrapped up in the awesomeness of the story to notice.
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Changed the sentence completely due to neurosis.
5118323 But how much is this spread throughout the previous chapters? Oh my...what have I stumbled upon?
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5118333 Pinkamena Diane Pie, you must number them and then systematically slaughter them. Rip em apart so until there is no more left.
Harper's
This is disturbing, I didn't think I'd see Harry Pothead crap in here. Giant spiders, pfft, you might as well just put constellation creatures in this, make it more of a fantasy than real life.
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Like the Ursa Major?
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If you recall, Derpy was almost eaten by a mailpony eating spider early in the story when delivering mail to Zecora.
5118370 Lolz, now you get it. Moar constellation critters, kinda like the stuff from Past Sins. Ursa Majors, Lupus Minors, etc. That big sea dragon gets a bit cranky and ripple goes and beats some sense into him.
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Giant spiders are a real problem in this universe.
5118380 Bad spiders! No more spiders! Frogs, giant frogs are good. They snap out their tongue and grab fillies with their sticky tongue, getting pulled into the maw of acids and a very nasty death. (Frogs have weak acid in their tummies.)
But than a giant tentacle monster comes out of nowhere and pulls them out of their doom and turns into some weird Japanese sex monster.
Where's Bucky in all this? No-where! Celestia not a clever pony and sent him away, while his foals get violated in a dozen different ways.
i thought Pegasi got temporarily very strong when in danger. why was this spider even able to hold on for two seconds?
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???
5118425 Three fries short of a happy meal.
Well if you think Sentinel is getting difficult to express accurately, there is always the path of epiphany inspiring a transition to make changes in one's life. Sentinel could find an understanding about when to stop being so serious or gain a new perspective on what it means to devote to a cause while still being lighthearted.
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Spiders are even stronger.
I'm not a native speaker, but wouldn't that be ' was nursed'?
Or do ponies talk like that?
Well, with Spitfire's statement that she wants to bring the Wonderbolts back to their old military glory, Ripple might have a future training ground there.
5118655 I'd say that the way Kudz has it is right. If a baby is still drinking milk from the mother it is still referred to as them nursing.
Of all the monsters you could choose........ Any of the mighty beasts of Greek legend....... Of all the things you could have had them fight..... YOU CHOSE A GIANT SPIDER. PLEASE, THINK OF ALL YOUR ARACHNOPHOBIC READERS!!!!
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Ah, ok, didn't know that. Thanks for correcting me.
Hehe, the niceties of language.
Aw... But I like spiders...
But still giant-pony-eating-spiders should be killed.
Sentinel thinks too much.
I do not believe that you are "applying the screws" too much to Sentinel. He is facing the changes of growing up, the duties of being a squire, the pressure of being a writer in the public eye, the unknown future of his relationship with Moonbow, and a lot more. For an introvert pony, that is a lot of pressure to meet the demands of the others around him. He just needs a way to let out some the pressure that is constructive that gets him away from the others for a bit.
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Considering Bucky can already work with matter on a molecular scale even apparently with his telekinesis? The fusion and whatnot -
A number of options depending on how magic works in the Chaseverse:
Alchemy-style, with the conversion of other matter into the appropriate materials by way of reorganizing atomic structure.
Conjuration-substitution, essentially breaking down the matter for its equivalent energy and using that energy to create an equal amount of the material you actually need.
Pure creation, the matrices holding the spells in place congeal a sort of gestalt pool of raw magical energy to be used during the process, using the pure energy to create objects.
However an actual Duplication spell works, which we know exist but Twilight was incapable of casting as a normal unicorn.
And more! There are lots of ways to swing it. Personally, I think it'd be a neat idea. Plus, it'd be hilarious to see Bucky go a little crazy with plans for the enchantment once he realized how useful it was on the airships, despite how taxing it'd be to cast.
I have read up to this point and it seems quite likely that it will not happen, so I must point out a large oversight (though it is also possible you had no way to fit it in. Pinkie would not have let the family return home without a "Welhomecoming" party. It goes against her very nature.