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couldn't?
The entire last part from “Oh it is much worse than that, Twilight,” on is italicized for some reason.
You accidentally the italics
the cosmic pants guy is unworthy of his power. that is becoming more and more clear. for all his power he is little more than a mortal given far too uch power, and is making the mortal decision of simply destroying something rather than trying to fix it.
more so this shows his limit, if he must mentally torture celestia into obeying his will.
also gonna say the same with the fates too. both cosmic pants and the fates should not have hold over what they have power over. mortal minds are not capable of handling that power. and by the end of the day these immortals are simply mortal minds connected to cosmic forces.
5282209
Just like Celestia and Luna.
So...'God' is an asshole. What else is new?
*Takes cover*
half the chapters in italic... *shrug*
Clover the cheater, been expecting you.
I'm guessing next chapter's Derpy and Belisama.
Should be couldn't
Also, can we have bucky shove every single gun in the world without enchanted Gunpowder up Comsicorns ass and give it a (Insert Number Here) Gun Salute?
Also, hate those who desire perfection. Perfection is something COMPLETELY IMPOSSIBLE to obtain. Only a fool would try to obtain it, which Cosmicorn must be. And likely an much bigger fool since I bet it considers itself perfect.
Think that should be could not
Well... Derpy took that better than expected.
And this... thing... what would it do if they were all to stand against it at once?
I can't remember what chapter it is that platinum talked to Bucky...
Welp. Every justification I had about Cosmo-corn is founded unless he pops up with mind blowing information.
He's more of a dick than I thought. I've just went from disliking Celestia to purely pitying her and Cosmo-corn is at #1 disliked.
Fates get some credibility back after this.
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While True, if it wasn't for the power the Fates possess, the world would have likely been destroyed. It is safe to say that they are responsible for Cadence's Ascension, just like they are responsible for Twilight's. If it wasn't for Cadence being the Alicorn of love, the world would have probably been so bad it might already have been either destroyed or Bucky would have had no force at all holding back his Ascension to the Alicorn of War and then destroying everything.
That really raises the question of just how long he/she/it has harbored the intention of wiping the slate clean. Did he see sunset as the final straw? Did she lose faith when Luna fell? Had it already given up before that?
I mean, it is entirely possible that Bucky is right and dissolving celestial's confidence has been his strategy in an extremely long game plan. After all, what is time to The Powers That Be?
I really hope that Omnicorn's plan to sweep everything away is not 'torture Celestia with indecision and the silent treatment so every time i say anything she will become frantic to make sure it is done perfectly.' that kind of sucks. Celestia really needs hugs.
Still wondering about that thing the Fates mentioned before about Omnicorn seeking to undo Love so War will be unchecked. i wonder if that's referencing Cadance, Celestia, or the world in general.
The biggest thing I've noticed is that you seem to have a rather large section of the last few paragraphs in Italics.
As for the story itself... Yeah, Celestia's Parent is a rather emotionally abusive parent.
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i very much like this speech on the topic of perfection.
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i don't remember precisely but i think it was Discord that "broke" Creation. after that the cosmic forces needed handholding and rebalancing, but these measures were all just stopgap.
5282273
Christ, Captain Freakshow sounds like a fucking goober in the dub.
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Not Discord, the forces of Chaos. There are those worse than Discord.
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ah i knew it was chaotic something or other, i just went with Discord. Yeah, primal chaos is not very nice.
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well it's not like i could find a well subtitled video without a lot of effort, so yeah, silly English dub for point-making.
5282254 Cadance is Love so it is probably referencing her. His plan probably involves war and hatred becoming rampant around her depriving her of the love and happiness she needs to be powerful enough to resist Bucky in his fully ascended alicorn form. The more Comicorn promotes anger and violence the weaker Cadance is and the stronger Bucky becomes. The two's strength is inversely proportional.
5282241 A long time ago on an island far far away.....
5282356 I remember that much at least, exactly which. I vaguely remember the whole tale in order of events, but I've only read it once so I don't know for sure.
5282377 All the communiques with Platinum and Sombra are within the Isles arc. Where in the arc I am unsure but the first one is after Bucky replaces his horn with the fulgurite
So, Celestia is a slave to her creator. Daddy's little girl is trying to show how perfect the world he created is. She's trying to fix things that go wrong, keep denying that she's flawed. Oh, god, this got really sad. It's like a child no longer liking a toy and the toy keeps trying and trying to prove how fun and relevant it is. The kid gets cranky and sabotages the toy's efforts and throws it into a path of self destruction. Then he'll just get a new toy and keep on with his life, not even bothering to look back. :( Celestia needs a good squeeze. Write it in that someone her size squeezes her. Do et. Get that mare some big girl hugs. Stat!
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Not really, there can be a rise in conflict at the same time as a rise in the abundance of love. An increase in the conflicts in Minos doesn't mean that the love in Equestria isn't growing. Bucky goes to War to protect those he Loves. Those domains are not mutually exclusive or polar opposites, they just don't tend to coexist on an individual basis. On a larger scale, some regions could become both more loving and more conflicted.
As a contrived math example, initially there are 100 units of global Love and 120 units of global War/Strife/Conflict. Herd lifestyle becoming prevalent in Equestria and the end of the hunter griffin oppression raise the total global love to 160 units of global Love, but at the same time, civil wars in Minos and other countries raise the overall levels of War/Strife/Conflict/Hatred to 200 units of global War. War is now stronger than Love by a wider margin, but Love did experience an increase.
5282461 True but in general conflict has increased in Equestria by a wide margin as well. There are bandits etc. in the wild and there's a lot of violence around the place. So while the war in Minos may have raised the war threshold to 200 units, the situation in Equestria probably increased it further to around 240-250 units. Any amount of war breeds in large quantities. Love grows slowly over long periods of time where as war just pops up. Love is at a disadvantage.
5282480
Firstly the math example was contrived and simplified to illustrate my point that love isn't necessarily weaker because of an increase in conflict, just comparitively weaker, as opposed to being inversely proportional where a change in one necessitates an opposite change in the other. I was not attempting to actually create a worldwide conflict vs love weather-map or score card.
Secondly, the wars we're currently seeing didn't just spring up out of nowhere either, they've also been brewing for a while. They were just being checked by the Noble houses of Equestria and the Council of Immortals for a long time. When those were weakened, the smoldering embers flared up and we're seeing the fallout as a sudden increase in War. Love is also springing up too, Ponyville has been a veritable font of altruism and Love, taking in and protecting refugee from the various conflicts. Just look at Bucky's herd, it's huge, and very loving. That all happened in less than what, a year? Two? Love can bloom in the worst of situations, like with our little homosexual griffin couple, or Lugus and Yew, or most recently, Belisama and how she will be integrating into the herd as a loved and loving member.
Lastly, I am not saying Love isn't at a disadvantage for trying to increase in the current world climate; i am just saying that Love can both catch up, and actually be a cause of War. (See Sombra, Bucky, and Twilight)
I have to say I'm a little mixed on this one.
On the one hand, this has removed my worries of Celestia delving a little too far unto OOC status. I mean, throughout the entire this story, she's been portrayed excellently as the character I imagined her from the show: an immortal ruler doing her best to juggle world wide concerns, planning for these problems centuries in advance, and still dealing with the fact that she still makes mistakes and is struggling to keep connected to her subjects even as they fade in an out around her existence. These last squabbles where she teleported away in a fit? She always struck me as a leader that after harming her subjects, even if that 'harm' was necessary for a greater good and couldn't take blame publically, she would be ready to face the consequences and let them take her to task in private. ESPECIALLY if it resulted from a miscalculation on her part as it did with Griffonholm. This teleporting away in the middle of a fight she disliked strikes me as a bit of a selfish streak and, while I would quickly agree with others that her problems leaves her entitled to a few moments of selfishness, it doesn't strike me as the type of action she would let herself indulge in. Now hearing this is a result from a manipulative third party who physiologically tortured her using her insecurities for millennia? That makes sense! Even if feels like it's ripping my heart out to see her go through it all.
That leads me to the other concern. You are doing a magnificent job in weaving this story and pulling your audience along in this emotional rollercoaster you set up but I'm getting concerned about the direction this ride is going. Facing off against their creator while their ace in the whole, Celestia, is teetering on the brink of mental instability? Even as I pour over this story in suspense I can't help but be tortured by the thought "Oh no! Please don't pull a Joss Whedon and kill half the cast you made us fall in love with!!!"
The Creator needs to be destroyed and Bucky is the only one crazy enough to do it.
So...how did Q get mixed into this?
Game plan: get Celestia and Luna talking to the Fates. Go from there.
I never knew wha5made this story successful at first, at first I thought that it wad another OC insert going on here, but i realized that you, dear author used a very good stratagy, the character changes with the story, and evsnt actually happen unlike other stories where the main character sits and never changes.
Really, kudos to you, and im glad to be caught up with the story.(I also liked the fact that you slyly adressed some real life political concerns ^^)
5282249 were it not for miss cosmic pants though, they would have no reason to. without him twisting the destiny of all towards the end fate would have no reason to have fate ursurp destiny and prevent that from happening.
all this potential war spawning cannot be a coincidence. he has likely influenced these events to some degree, encouraged the violence just as he twists celestia's mind to his will.
ultimately the primary function they have now is deterring miss cosmic pants apocalyptic will.
5282794 the fates pretty much are Q.
Ah, The Chase: Come for the quirky romance, stay for the systemic abuse of families, emotions, and entire swathes of civilization.
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Dangit, redstar! Now you've given him the idea and he's going to kill off half the cast we've fallen in love with!
In chapters 250~260 Rising Star did stupid thing and got transformed and sucked to Tartarus. After been rescued from kingdom of fire and rotten eggs, Rising Star has been... brainwashed by Celestia?.. WTF?! I don't mind some darkness, and don't mind some clop. I can tolerate many things. But this... it's over the top. For greater fucking good? It's the way of thinking that created the greatest monsters in human history! Goal justifies the means, really? I don't think so. And I don't think I want to read any further.
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Mind some explanation? I don't think I understand...
5284627
Err, what exactly you didn't understand?
5284690
*shrug*
Why you no longer want to read any further.
5284691
Because my "bucket of shit" is full and starting to spill. When I start reading story, I have empty bucket. When I see some shit in text, I send it to this bucket so it don't bother me. OOC? To the bucket. Cupcakes-like gore? To the bucket. Berry Punch made sobbing sounds to manipulate foal, make poor one feel guilty, instead of talk and apply some logic and understanding? To the bucket. Stupidness to the point of mindless? To the bucket. Celestia brainwash young pony, who just suffered from his stupidity and got rescued from Tartarus? Bucket is full, I can't tolerate shit anymore, sorry. For greater good? Kiss my lower cheek!
5284706
hum, each of those has it's reasons, but I understand your perspective.
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And what, pray tell me, is that reasons?
5284712
Alright, I'll try.
OCs. Well a story can't be all Canon and background characters, they aren't the only characters on the planet.
Gore, would you prefer this story not have it? The Chase is kinda realistic, as realistic a story on cartoon equins be.
And the real world has gore.
Foals, or younger children need to know what they did was wrong sometimes, and be hurt from one way or another to remember that it's bad.
I was a dumb kid once, really dumb, and bad. I now know my parents used psychology to teach me a lesson that hurt every now and then. I thank them for it now.
My memory sucks, so if I remember incorrectly then sorry.
Celestia modified Rising's memory so he won't remember that he practically got raped and had children.
And it probably was for the better, because if he did know then it's going to bother him a great deal, and due to the honesty rule he'll eventually tell his family, if not instantly.
Just sayin' my thoughts, not arguing!
If this is going to be a flame-war thingy, then I raise the white flag.
5284706
Reaaaaally ? You read a story with a dark tag, reads a gore/dark scene, and, then, you go berserk ? You see that there is something wrong right there, right ?
You pretty much don´t have children and/or did not read the story. Before she did that she tried to talk with Piña and make her stop being such a brat by other means. That was her last try.
Although, when it comes to Berry, I´m pretty much sure there is no such thing as a last try, she would only keep getting cards from her sleeves over and over.
And as father i can say that I´m DYING to have the opportunity to use something like that with my younglings. Way more effective then shouting or the good old belt in the ass.
BUT THEY ARE STUPID !!!! They are all deep fawled characters that make mistake after mistake !!!! That´s we love then all so much, cause, like uus, they can´t take two steps without messing things !!! Crap, I´m pretty sure I can´t wake up every morning without messing things at least 3 times before even reaching the bathroom door.
Remember what i said ? Messing things all the time, all of then ! Specially Celestia !!! And who says that the brainwash is permanent. It wasn´t for Bucky (although Bucky is a special case). Maybe things WILL come back later to bite Rising´s ass in the worst possible way.
But, again, you have all the right to have your opinion. I just don´t think you need to say "kiss my lower cheek" to adress this. One thing is disliking a story, another thing is offending the author.
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Not OCs (Original Characters), but OOC (Out Of Character) - when canon character acts not like himself.
I can tolerate gore as long as it necessary to plot or atmosphere. But some scenes here is just Tarantino-level gore without any meaning. Gore just for more gore. Sculls to the throne of sculls, all heil Khorn!
Yeah, but what about TALK with them? Like I talk with you right now, with words, through mouth? I'm not trying to manipulate you, I'm just explaining my point of view. Maybe if you understand me, you change your mind. Maybe not. But anyway, it's fair. Manipulation is NOT fair, it reduce subject of manipulation to the level of trained animal. If parents do it to child - they reduce that child's mind potential, they butcher that child's future. I don't know how many potential geniuses were lost because of this practice. But I suspect that number is enormous. If more parents stop doing this shit and start explaining, what kid did wrong, and why exactly it's wrong, Earth will become better place.
I didn't read to the explanation what exactly Celestia edited in Rising Star's mind. But anyway, it was without consent, so it was mind-rape. No better than that pyro-dryad did. And about "for the better" - firstly, Celly violated family. It wasn't her family to decide, and she's not their family therapist. It was Rising Star's mistake, and HE must think and solve it to mature and be a better pony, and them together to be a better family. Celly broke honesty in this family. She didn't even ask. She didn't give them a chance to overcome this problem themselves, together, as a loving family, and become more adult. She just mind-raped so he will be mindlessly happy, and others with him. La-la-la, Orwell approves.
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I don't mind some gore as long as it's necessary for story. But overdose is bad thing.
She didn't tried to talk. She shouted and tried to dominate, when it didn't work - manipulated. No talking was there.
And excuse me, but if you really want to do such thing - you may be a very bad father. Yes, it's better than shouting and/or belt, but not much better. Belt is torture - applying pain to get result. Prisoners hate torturers, and children grows to hate parents that tortured them. I can tell it from personal experience. And home become prison, because children can't flee anywhere - even if they try, they'd be caught and returned to their torturers. Also, shouting is psychological torture, not much better than belt. But manipulation... it's poison. And it poisons both victim and manipulator, but in different ways. For manipulator it become addiction. For victim it's... argh, read my answer to G_Haze, I think I explained it there pretty good.
Normal stupidness and being flawed character is one thing, but when there's no brain behind eyes - it's unreadable. Really.
Typo: Giving should be given?
5284851 I don't think you know how children work. I think you have a very false view of how parenting should work considering you aren't a parent. I've learned something from mine that you haven't apparently, and that's that you can't really say anything about how people treat or handle their kids until you've lived it. You can only truly learn how to care for a child from experience. A book or blog won't tell you what kind of condition or personality your kid might deal with. To bring a child up healthily, you have to find the gray area in right and wrong. I promise you not a damn person raises their child the 'right' way, because that shit is objective to the ninth degree. Every other point you made are opinions that don't really bother me. They seem kind of dull. Ew, too much blood. XD
Just, please refrain from acting like your opinion is fact. [Said the hypocrite lecturing you. XD]
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I have good memory, and I still remember what is it to be a child. When you just don't know what's right and what's wrong, and why this is right and that is wrong. But instead of giving you needed information everyone just scolding you, or manipulating you, or do other illogical, stupid, useless and painful things. I have good memory.
5284973 Memory doesn't mean much if you don't have the full story. :/
Edit: Not to mention everyone has different stories. So what does your memory tell other people? Nothing, because you don't know what they've learned or how they've learned it.... no offense.