Every action taken is like dropping a pebble in a pond, creating ripples that extend ever outward. Every choice has consequences, good and bad... Putting on a Crown may have changed Sunset Shimmer's life...but it also Changed two worlds...
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Well they now know, they just can't get Twilight's official confirmation, and she's right Sunset is not going to be happy about this investigation.
Also small error in this quote that's been boldened.
Wonder if he'll believed she's a former ward of a foreign royal family. Under self imposed exiled due to guilt
So much so little time
Okay, 1) the weeb in me is loving the comparison between Sunset and benevolent kitsune mostly because i never realised how damn fitting it is.
2) i like how fond Sunset’s neighbours are of her and how friendly they are to Shining
3) i am far from qualified to analyse topics like almost getting raped but just from sibling moment prospective i like how Shining approaches Twilight about it and how he handled it
wonderful as always, police shining armor is quite interesting, and i cant help but picture sunset demanding a physical fight with shining and winning with not ease but not difficulty when he speaks to sunset, love that the neighborhood keeps an eye on sunset without her knowing
now i'm wondering about human sunset if she even exists and if she does where is she and/or what happened to her, i dont remember if you mentioned anything about that, and will sunset being a unicorn from another dimension be revealed in the next arc, and what about starlight glimmer pony or human, did pony sunset set up a paper trail or is it from human sunset
so many questions! from just one chapter, its great
Thanks for the chapter!
Oh light, Sunset's not going to be terribly pleased about this, but hopefully the fact that Shining did it out of concern for her safety will placate her rage a little. Sunset's neighbors, including the Starlight House staff speaking to her character was really heartwarming.
I think you did a great job with Shining's character. I agree that he could have gotten a bit more in the main show, but it is what it is. That said, I find Luna's little "you always inadvertently play a paladin" sounds about right.
Then we get two noodle incidents: The Brownie Incident, and the Couch Incident.
Also, yea, Sunset's last "lesson" to that gang was entirely deserved. I'm a firm believer that everyone has the sovereign right to their body, and if you violate the right's of another, you forfeit your right to yours. If those boys were responsible for raping those other two girls, they'd already earned final forfeiture, and no longer have any right to their own bodies. Meaning as far as I'm concerned, Sunset could have done worse, and they'd still have no recourse to complain because they'd already forfeited the sovereignty of their physical bodies.
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Glad you’re enjoying the story! Hopefully you will enjoy what is to come!
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Yup. On both counts, but especially the second. Sunset is going to be a bit grumpy.
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I guess you’ll have to wait and see if he believes that. Heheheh.
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I wrote the scene with Mrs. Yuki on a whim, but i always loved how it turned out, right down to the sometimes awkward grammar of someone for whom English is a second language.
The idea that Sunset’s neighbors like her really grew out of the idea that even as a total bitch, she played the part of upstanding youth to the adults in her sphere of existence, mostly to keep from drawing attention.
As for the approach Shining took in that conversation, theres...not really one “this is how you should do it” approach, but he was making every effort to be non-threatening and paid a great deal of attention to his sister’s nonverbal cues, something he is used to doing, given some of her issues.
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Thats a lot of questions, haha! Without giving anything away, I can say that all will be revealed in time.
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Yup. She gonna be a bit put out with him. Sunny values her privacy a great deal. And shaping Sunset’s relationship with her neighborhood was something I enjoyed—I drew on my memories of Hey Arnold! and my own neighborhood, where even though i didnt personally know all my neighbors, we had a good idea of whose house was who’s, which kid belonged to which adults, and which people were reasonably friendly...and the adults all knew who the kids were and who they belonged with.
And yes, I’m right there with you in regards to the punks from the beginning of the story. They got exactly what they deserved, no more, no less, and if it prevents further harm, then all the better. I wanted the attitude of the beat cop, someone who does see that kinda thing more than he ever wants to, to reflect the fact that sometimes cops feel powerless, because certain crimes, the ones that really cause a lot of hurt, are some of the ones with the lightest punishment, if the perp even gets punished at all. Seeing a little street justice enacted when the cops can’t guarantee the punks would get time made him feel good on a visceral level, in much the same way it seems to have made the audience feel pleased at their punishment.
I wonder if it'll help his case any if he makes clear right off the bat that he didn't and isn't going to open any of her sealed documents, and isn't going to tell anyone else about any of it either. His concern for Twilight's safety in her presence will help a little, since she feels a lot of the same, but only a little. She's going to be upset, but if he makes it clear that he didn't and won't dig into any of the sealed documents, and won't be sharing it with anyone else, that might defuse the fear based portion of her anger response somewhat.
Although, if any of those sealed records he and Advocate dug up are related to the human Sunset, that might actually upset her more knowing that yes she does exist and signs of her have been found. I can't remember if anything about human Sunset's possible existence has come up yet in this fic, too many different ones knocking around in my head right now. May just have to reread, hehehe.
Loved this, all of this. And I really wanna know about the brownie incident!
This was a great interlude and I really appreciate a character like Shinning. That eternal do gooder who just wants to do right by everyone especially his sister. It was a surprise at how much 'good' Sunset did around her neighborhood and how many stand up for her considering her school behavior. One might consider it her just looking after her 'little kingdom.'. Though the level of roadblocks on her background check really surprised me. Looking forward to where that leads.
One of the best chapters yet. The sunset and twilight parts were always my favorite. Can’t wait to see what happens when there relationship finally comes out.
*sighs in happiness* You have no idea how much that means, Twily.
New account here who's been reading your story for a few months now.
First of all, well done. I am very excited to see where you're taking it, especially how you handle Friendship Games. It seems likely that Twilight will discover Sunset's heritage; her reaction will be very intriguing if this prediction is true.
You've also done some foreshadowing of other interesting events: Sunset's special eyes, the impact of Starlight's time travelling, Princess Celestia getting a talking to, and a cast of villains who have been changed from EQG canon.
But it's more than just the plot. You've taken the story slow, but you justify it with every little detail you put into it. Your writing displays a masterful understand of the reader's mind, pacing things and manipulating tone so that they deliver the right feelings. The time you've spent working on this shows.
About how long will the hiatus last? You posted in your December blog post that you got ~20K words that month. In that same post, you mentioned the second arc consisted of 26 already written chapters, plus 20-30 unwritten chapters. The average length of a chapter in this story is ~4K words, which produces an estimated writing speed of 5 chapters per month. Using that estimation, the hiatus will be roughly 4-6 months. Do you believe this to be accurate, or do you think you will be ready later or sooner?
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Both of things will probably go a long way to mollify her, yes. As for the records of a human Sunset...anything is possible, but I would point out one tiny detail: Sunset mentioned that Princess Celestia named her, not her biological parents. She has no clue what name she might have been given at birth. What that means for the human world....well...I'll leave that to you to figure out.
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The Brownie Incident will be part of the College Years sidestory, which is loosely mapped out. Before then, I want to get to the end of Arc 2, and I have two other sidestories that have to go up first: Supernova, and Cassandra's Cry.
Shining is another one of those "minor characters who really get shafted by canon." He has some great potential, and its really wasted because of things like plot contrivance or just lack of presence. I kinda picture him as having a superhero's mindset--he does the right thing as much as possible, not for reward, or fame or anything like that, but because he's driven to do it by his own nature and because its the right thing to do. He wants to make the world a better place, he wants to help people, and he wants to protect those he loves. That's why he wears the badge, that's why he went looking into Sunset, thats why he'll be doing things he does later in the story.
As for Sunset's..."good deeds"...Your comment about her "kingdom" isn't terribly far off. It was really two fold--she put on a respectful, polite front for adults, because it kept them out of her business...and the gang of delinquents...Honestly, that was more of her same tactics as she used at the school, just different tools and execution. By making them afraid of her and asserting her strength, they didn't get in her way. For the most part, the altruism was accidental.
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What will happen? Things.
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That was a paragraph I was pretty proud of. Even managed to incorporate a nod to the one bit of dialogue from Spring Breakdown that had me going "OH COME ON! There is NO WAY they are JUST FRIENDS! No one says something like that to someone who is JUST A FRIEND! AAAARRRRGH!"
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Oh! Hi! Its wonderful to meet you! :} Especially because you've given us such lovely compliments! Thank you so much, and I'm glad you're loving the story!
And yes, much foreshadowing, bruhahaha. I like to sprinkle hints of things in, even if they don't manifest for another 300K words. The slower pacing of the story has let me really dive into the details and flesh out so many things that it has turned out that people really like, so for once, me being a windbag with large, grandiose stories is working out! As for getting into the reader's heads and manipulating emotions with storytelling, oof. I wish I could say its a gift--its not. Its 20+ years of being a DM/GM/ST for long, complicated, involved plots for large groups of people. I learned how to play with emotions from RP, because you've gotta make it personal for players to get invested enough to do more than "stab all the things" of their own free will.
As for the hiatus, I'm honestly not sure. Part of the problem is that the chapters are turning out LOOOOOONG, and getting longer. 3-4k was the average, post edits, for much of arc 1. Arc 2? ....We're looking at 4.5-6k being the average...before editing, with several chapters sneaking into the 8k word range. Combine that with just the sheer density of the arc and what's going on, and its a lot more of an undertaking than the first arc was. I'm writing as quickly as life will allow, and I certainly hope it doesnt take six months, lol. I will try to post updates every few weeks, just so people don't think I've died.
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Aha, I had completely forgotten that not so insignificant fact. I was going purely based off the other side of the country fact as a teaser that it might be her. Sunset herself setting it up that way, or asking someone to do it that way for her, makes sense. Keeping everything as separate as possible makes it harder to dig into things.
A re-read is definitely in order then. Probably best to do it just before Arc 2 comes out, so it's fresh.
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Hmmm...
Princess Celestia adopted Sunset Shimmer because of necessity, due to Sunset's overwhelming magic. This event is unlikely to have happened on Earth.
Principal Celestia does seem to have her own history with children. In both hers and Luna's interludes, we see hints at this.
It's conceivable that both Princess Celestia and Principal Celestia would favor similar names, given the opportunity.
Although the circumstances that lead to Sunset's adoption are not present on Earth, Principal Celestia is not as important a figure and so is able to either have a child or adopt one with more freedom than Princess Celestia.
Whoever is present in Principal Celestia's past, they're not quite close enough to Sunset that her appearance at Canterlot made Principal Celestia suspicious.
If we assume that everyone has a mirror-doppelganger, and Sunset's doppelganger is a pony, than said doppelganger is likely to have been an orphan. It is unlikely that they were adopted by Principal Celestia. Their name is probably different from Sunset Shimmer. Going off of Sci-Twi and Princess Twi, they probably have a noticeably similar appearance and base personality but are different in key and noticeable ways based off of their own history.
Just some ruminations on the topic.
Well shit. I realized I hadn't caught up on the last three chapters so I went ahead and did that and this one made me tear up a lot. I don't even know what to say, it's almost one in the morning so my brain isn't working. But these last three were great and I absolutely enjoyed this chapter from Shining's POV. He's so analytical and silly and really the best BBBFF.
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*grins wickedly* I love watching yall theorize in the comments. Its a good time. :}
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I'm glad you liked it! *rubs paws together happily* And if you liked that interlude, hoo boy, is arc 2 going to go over well! :P
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I love the friendship chemistry between Rarity and Sunset. Its something that sort of grew on its own, but the more it happens, the more I grow to love it. (It doesn't hurt that I can do a pretty accurate Sunset Shimmer and my spouse has this amazing ability to channel Rarity that is hilarious). You can fully expect to see this persist as character interaction in the future.
Yeah, Sunset rocks pants way better than skirts, i concur, though the reasons for her leaning towards them is less about vanity and more about comfort levels here in social situations. Also its winter, and no one in their right goddamned mind wears short skirts in WINTER.
Yes, that was the implication with Rarity's thoughts. *waggles brows suggestively*
Okay, so funny part is, there were about a dozen iterations of the school girl joke and "bad girl biker dyke" stereotype conversation. We went over that one soooo many times, tweaking and changing it, but the result still makes me laugh. (Now if I can just find a place to put in the quip about how Sunset is basically a lesbian nerd's ultimate fantasy: a magical unicorn sorceress from another world who takes the form of a leather wearing bombshell riding a motorcycle.)
For more about Applejack in lacy nothings, please refer to "The Best Part of Makin' Up..."
That credit for that entire bit of dialogue from Rarity goes to my spouse. Still, yeah, super sweet and heartwarming, and I know, people would ship if they could.
I'm aware why the show did it--ratings and all--but I actually make it work in terms of stuff in Rubicon. There's an extensive reason to why the portal works the way it does, and why Sunset came through the way she did in "Mirrors on the Ceiling."
Yeah, the leather conundrum took me a while, because leather is such a useful and unique material. Its extremely hard to find or make a suitable substitute that has the same kind of durability, flexibility, versatility, and reaction to environmental factors. Then I saw the episode with Applejack dealing with the pigs, and it made me go "huh."
I actually have character profiles for all seven girls plus Princess Twilight, containing all manner of miscellaneous data from height an weight to build and muscle tone, bust size, hair and eye color, sexuality, family relations, socio-economic status, a write up on their powers, likes and dislikes, etc. I even have their school schedules written down. It comes in handy in keeping consistency.
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Yes, its Philomena. Adge's comic first introduced me to the concept, but the more my creative team and I sat around and crafted the backstory with Sunset and Princess Celestia, the more I ended up talking about Philomena as Sunset's pet, until we got this. And I certainly hope filly Sunset is adorable. She's supposed to be--she didn't start out a bitch. (I think you'll probably really enjoy the Supernova sidestory when I get to it after arc 2.)
Do not question too deeply on the nature of the Pink One, for that road leads to naught but madness and things man was not meant to know. Pinkamena ah syha'h ng mgkadishtu. Ahmgr'luh nafl mgehye'lloig, gof'n.
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Flash...well. You'll see more of him, but I think you'll like what I have planned. I repeatedly joke to the team about how the friendship that I want to develop between him and Sunset is "the kind of friendship that only a straight man and a lesbian can have."
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Yeah, it's crazy to realize we still don't have a good enough substitute for leather (I mean there's pleather and plastics but none are quite as versatile as leather) and a lot of the drop in usage is from the stuff it was used in just not being that relevant anymore (ie anything horse-related).
To quote another story:
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All of the adorableness. All of the "Daaaaaawwwwww." The girls are so precious together, and honestly, writing their relationship stuff is one of the things I look forward to doing in the story.
....And...yes. Maybe there's a reason for the parallels.
*cackles* I already have the reveal scene pretty scripted. I think you'll die laughing.
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Big Gatherings suck.
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Yes, yes she did. I've watched Twilight Sparkle carefully. One of her definite triggers is protecting the ponies (or people) she holds dear. Its one of the few things that actually seems to incur her ire. And in this case, Sparky was protecting someone who is more than a friend. Yup.
....Summer Breeze is...
Well. There are things about Summer that will be learned later.
Why yes, there might be something related to that. Or maybe its something else. I guess you'll have to wait and seeeee... >:}
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*chuckles* to be fair, there's foreshadowing EVERYWHERE in Rubicon, for a bunch of stuff. Some of it is obvious, some not. I love using it.
Glamour is...Glamour has turned into a fun NPC to use. She was originally just a throw away line, but has become so much more than that. Blame my editor. She got her claws into Glamour.
Hmmm...I hadn't compared it to Entrapta's line, but yeah. There's a bit of similarity to that, though it was unintentional, and is meant to reflect Glamour's real, inner self. She sees the beauty in others, even if they don't see it in themselves, and she wants to help bring it out, so that everyone else can see what she sees. Sometimes that beauty is a physical thing, sometimes its not, but whatever it is, Glamour has an eye for it...just like she has an eye for knowing the people who are nasty, twisted souls. She's a surprisingly good judge of character.
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*grins* I'm so glad--I know that I get a lot more views on the prologue, and then there's a sharp decline in views on other chapters, and I figure there's a lot of people who get bored because "Oh, this is just what happens in the movie" and dont give it a chance. But I needed it because there are unique things I do there that matter later on. I need that internal shot of Sunset's mind during her transformation because it matters to the story I'm telling. So to hear that it grabs a reader makes me feel good about it, like maybe i did do a good job.
Wait didn’t Sunset tell Twilight that she has no memories of her parents in an earlier chapter? If Twilight finds out, she might be very unhappy with Sunset
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She told her a number of things. ;) guess we’ll have to see what comes of it hmm?
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I'd forgotten to comment on this when I read it, as I did so in my phone and typing there is a Pita, but that's some very interesting implications for Sunset's human counterpart...
Also for some reason I'm not getting any alerts When you respond to my comments.
I'm so, so thrilled to see your take on Friendship Games. You got me hooked up the moment you mentioned a focus on Sunset being a unicorn in the human body, the moment I've read you got whole psychological portraits thing in the story, the moment I saw the words "mapped" and "things planned", it all makes me squeal in an utter delight. I myself like big damn Sunset stories, yet at the same time find them infuriating in more than one way. They make Sunset so human, it makes me nauseous.
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*cackles* funny how much ppl are now speculating about a human Sunset.
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Ahhhh irony.
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“One more thing, Jackie...”
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Im so glad you enjoyed what ive got so far! Stuff is in the works, and i think people will really like what we’re working on! In the meantime, feel free to check out the sidestories on the account. Theyre all part of Rubicon’s universe.
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So I fell out of the show around season 6. And i always felt the "sudden inclusion of Scootaloo's family" was fairly shoehorned in as a counter to the "little crippled orphan" thing. They were all--even the aunts--completely absent, even during important moments of Scoot's life, including her getting her cutie mark. (Which, considering it looks like the whole town turns out for that celebration is telling.) So in terms of human scoots, she is in the foster system, for reasons unknown, but likely because the human system doesn't take kindly to human parents casually abandoning kids to go off and do career things. The Starlight House is the local group home as part of the foster system.
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How is progress going? just curious
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Theres a lot in your comment to unpack, but I think the simplest thing I need to address is simply that nothing in this says that the voice in question is referring to Twilight being an alicorn, and thus, a princess. The fact is, in this case, her status as an alicorn takes a complete backseat to her being the Bearer of the Element of Magic, and she is that not because of some weird preordained destiny, so much as who she is as an individual and how her traits meshed with what Magic seeks to bond with.
At the heart, the voice is telling Sunset “you are Sunset Shimmer, not Twilight Sparkle, stop comparing yourself to her, or anyone else.” Its just that mystical voices from distinctly non-mortal, non-organic sources dont think, talk, or perceive things the way a living mortal does...and maybe, just maybe, there was a lesson in there that sunset wasn’t really ready to understand just yet.
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Blog post about progress will be coming probably this week or next! The short hand is “we’re steadily writing hust about every day!”
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Thanks for responding and keep up with the great job
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So, straight up, this was such a nice comment to wake up to! You have no idea how flattering it was to have you compare my little slice of storytelling to something like Long Road, because thats one hell of a bar, lol. Not to mention the fact that you love it enough to reread so many times! Im really glad that this little work has brought you many feelings and provided you with something enjoyable to return to. :)
It also makes me excited to eventually get Arc 2 up for yall because arc 2 is even better than arc 1!
How are you coming along with the story? It's been a while since we've heard from you.
Looking over your blogs, I can see that you've not only been working on Rubicon, but some nice side stories to go along with it. In no specific order, I spy:
Pinkie Pie's pinkienessthe Mane 5, focusing specifically on their more numinous aspects. It will be updated during Arc 2 of Rubicon, ending during Arc 2's climax.I wish you luck in your lives and your writing.
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Hey!
Doing good. So...still chugging away at things--we reached 500K words and counting, and have enough chapters that I'm starting to edit some of them. My hope is to work up a bit of a buffer long enough to have at least 4-6 months worth of chapters for posting.
The side stories are also WIPs and are being worked on in the meantime. huzzah. I'm not as fast as I want to be, because htis arc is just so much more plot dense than arc 1.
But! Still here, still alive, still working. (Just finished a 6K word chapter today, actually, and I'm working on the next one.) Sorry that its taking so long. I just want it to be up to the standards of the first half, and this arc is sooooo crucial to the story as a whole. I'll probably do a blog soon.
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I really don't mean this to try and rush you, but do you have an idea of when you'll start posting arc 2? I'm not going to have much internet access in the coming months and would like to know if I can look forward to it before that starts, or resign myself to waiting until I get back.
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Well, that is technically true, so...
Sunset's gonna have the best in-laws she could ask for.