Every action taken is like dropping a pebble in a pond, creating ripples that extend ever outward. Every choice has consequences, good and bad... Putting on a Crown may have changed Sunset Shimmer's life...but it also Changed two worlds...
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I'm always eager for my weekly dose of SunLight with a side of angst~
Now we got to see Twilight's thoughts on Sunset. It's good she's acting the the cool/rational one to a still very much emotionally vulnerable/unstable Sunset.
Also this
was just too adorable for words.
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Twilights thoughts and perspective are important not just for the story, but for the relationship as a whole. Especially with a partner like Sunset, who has a particularly dominant and assertive personality when she isnt feeling her teen angst.
Also, in my headcanon, sunset defaults to horsey sounds subconsciously. Its hard wired into her brain because they are more an instinctive thing and less a learned behavior. Also because it makes me and my editor chuckle.
So is this written before or after Celestia's auditorium announcement? Because if after, they're all stupid.
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Technically Twilight’s introspection comes after all that, but the italics sections are flashbacks. For example, the bit with sunset telling her about the prank with the blood and guts happened the same day as luna and celestia learning about the locker graffiti.
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im guessing Sunset didn't tell anyone else about that 'prank' frankly Twilight shouldscold the PE teacher for punishing Sunset. Actually, she should got to Canterlot and give them a peace of her mind.. and after what Celestia said, the students will be more scared stiff seeing an Angry Twilight.
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Actually, she did end up telling Principal Celestia about it in “Chapter Twenty One: Tipping Point.” She wasnt going to, but Celestia’s response coaxed her into talking about the more physical bullying, like Garble shutting her in a locker and Gilda dumping offal on her.
Though there will one day in the story be a case of an angry Sparky. I look forward to that chapter.
It makes perfect sense to me that Sunset would subconsciously make pony sounds, even in a regular story, let alone one like yours that so explicitly keeps her pony identity as an integral part of her.
This was a wonderful little interlude, and a very important perspective balancing in the main pillar of the story, Sunset and Twilight's relationship.
I think you did a good job showing that in the story, between the actual details of the story you included, and Twilight's resulting ruminations. At the least, I got that from the story itself, so there's that.
That was very sweet and heartwarming. Twi really has become Sunny's safe space. Hopefully, it doesn't become problematic and Sunny develops dependency. Because I could see that becoming the case if they're both not careful.
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That's a good point. Sunset's normal personality is a really low risk for that, but she's at such a low bottom right now that they're probably near the boundaries for that already. Hopefully Twilight's research finds that possibility so she can watch for that too.
Of course now I'm curious what song she played. I'm sure you had a specific one in mind. Sunset needs to be careful with those half truths. While I don't think Twi would get severely upset about it she will still be confrontational about it. Especially given the level of intimacy they are currently sharing.
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Its actually interesting because in the actual EqG movies/specials, If you pay attention, Sunset shares some fairly unique body language tells with princess twilight (and starlight in her one trip through) particularly when shes agitated and upset, and they seem to be deliberate since only ponies turned human do them. I kinda used that as my basis and I went back and brushed up on equine body language and communication, and I try to replicate some of the responses when Sunny is caught off guard. Like how she tends to jerk her head back when startled, or snort when shes irritated. These are little things that are instinctive, and while she has trained herself to mostly use human cues on purpose in public, when shes vulnerable or relaxed, she defaults to what’s natural. The noises tie into that.
And yes, showcasing the relationship and giving the audience Twilight’s perspective is something that I feel is important to not get a skewed view of what is going on, especially with the tale mostly being in third person limited perspective. This factor will become more and more important as the relationship develops.
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The concept of co-dependency is something that will be addressed by both characters and also in conversations with others. However, co-dependency is something I see overused as a term, because it refers to some specific and often lopsided unhealthy relationships. There is, in my experience, a way to have a healthy relationship in which both parties are a support structure for each other, providing both safety/comfort in times of duress, and using complementary personality traits to make the pair stronger. Its just a fairly fine line to walk, and a lot of people do it poorly.
As for Sunset’s personality, while co-dependency is unlikely, she is a creature if fire and heat and passion and hunger. What she’s at risk for is fixation and obsession and possession, which can be even worse than co-dependency if its not managed, checked, or becomes one sided.
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I try not to title drop songs because I personally find it jarring in a story, you are correct in that i had one in my head in particular, because the whole song has always had a somewhat eerie nature to it, given that people often argue about what it symbolizes. (No one ever seems to get upset at the awesome instrumental guitar solo in the last like minute and a half though). And when the lyrics are heard by someone who lacks a lot of the cultural or era knowledge of the song’s origins, it becomes even more like something esoteric and emotional...especially for a terrified pony girl who finds herself trapped in a nightmare world where nothing makes sense.
*sips pink champagne*
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That's fair. Though I wasn't thinking co-dependence in the common misapplication of the word. I was thinking more along the lines of Sunset becoming dependent on Twilight as an emotional center and for stability. Twilight was one of the first people in ever to really treat her well, provide her with true, genuine affection and camaraderie, and give her a safe space where her walls could come down, especially post demonic transformation. Sunset has been starved of that kind of emotional intimacy and warmth for a very long time, so having it could make her dependent on Twi in an unhealthy way.
Thankfully, I have a feeling that Celestia, Luna and the Rainboom's intervention will probably give Sunset the emotional support she needs to not go down that rabbit hole.
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Okay, I'm assuming "pink champagne" is a reference to the song but all searching on Google gives me are songs that couldn't possibly be correct and trying to search by "songs with pink champagne in the lyrics" gives me, like, 500+ songs to sort through.
Given how the song's described, it sounds like something I'd like and it's drivin' me up the wall the I can't find the fuckin' thing even with your clues.
If you could tell us what it was it would make my OCD-riddled brain very happy.
Also: You said you "try not to title drop songs because you find it jarring in a story". I agree. I've seen plenty of fics that just drop the song's title in bold font right in the middle of the page, completely taking me out of the story.
What you could do instead (and what I've seen other authors do here) is to hyperlink the song to a specific word (or set of words) in the relevant paragraph.
eg:
The bolded word could be where you put the link. Just a suggestion if ya really don't wanna drop the title in the Author's Note.
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hotel California
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=N8mhDy73OH4
Hey makes sense she would keep the pony part a secret, that would be a long conversation.