Every action taken is like dropping a pebble in a pond, creating ripples that extend ever outward. Every choice has consequences, good and bad... Putting on a Crown may have changed Sunset Shimmer's life...but it also Changed two worlds...
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So on one hand that was deeply unsettling. On the other, the Sparkle family is (I hope) about to close circle and help Sunset and Twilight through this experience.
This is so haunting shudders. Poor Sunny...it's one thing after another. Curious to see how Twilight and family handle this.
So the darkness has found a new victim to haunt. Is this a premonition, or is it the darkness that she drove off Twilight latching onto her instead?
Yea, I have a feeling things are going to get worse before they get better.
foreshadowing Midnight Sparkle eh? Sunny just straight tell her the full truth. Even bring pony Twilight for 'proof' and let Pony Twilight handle showing her how to safely study magic without endaring anyone.. or risk Midnight.
Hmm, I don't think she banished those shadow spawn so much as she drew them into herself. Just have to hope that she has a better chance of fighting them off rather than merely being a richer target for them to feed on. Though at least her Pride Demon is on her side this time- to a degree at least.
facing her inner demon! who's trying in her own way to be helpful, yay! (go demon shimmer, your plan was terrible, your flaws ruled you, but your aesthetic was on point) hopefully she'll have more chances to be helpful soon (assuming she wasn't just a dreamscape hallucination)
facing down dark-magic extra-corrupted midnight in the dreamscape? ohhhhhh dear
and stabbing a unicorn with their own horn is something we don't remember the usual effects for (other than painful death) but we know for a fact it is very very bad!
poor sunset
Ahh even Sunsets evil insane doppleganger loves Sparky.
It's like a dark magic poison. She helped draw it out of Twilight and it is now attacking her mind.
That is a terrifying situation to be in when a person is trapped in their own head. Had a friend in college who had terrible nightmares sometimes and would even sleep walk/run sometimes.
That was quite disturbing and darn you for making me run out of chapters on this chapter. Solid 9.1/10 Excellent story and it's interesting how even Demonset was trying to help in her own sarcastic way.
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*grins* Oh good. Then the chapter had the exact affect on people I wanted it to. It was meant to be skin-crawling and unsettling. I'm not a fan of Tim Burton and the season of Halloween for no reason afterall. *laughs in Cryptkeeper* I'm rather pleased, though, really. I worked super hard on this chapter annd getting the imagery and tone and emotions just right.
Still, our unicorn has people who care, so I'm sure it'll turn out okay.
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Could be a lot of things...but yes, darkness is insidious like that, and its not the first time Sunny has been shown to be sensitive to it.
And trust me, this arc is *just* getting started. Its full speed ahead for the next like....70 chapters.
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Sunset has some difficult choices ahead of her, doesn't she?
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An interesting theory....I suppose time will tell, won't it?
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To quote a very good show: "Everyone has their demons. Mine tends the bar." *grins* There's plenty of mileage to be had with ye ol' "Sunset Satan", even if its just emotional baggage, and I plan on getting some use out of that trauma. >:} And her aesthetic had its perks. Its why the version in this nightmare got a bit of an upgrade. Because yeah.
Dark magic bad. Nightmares bad. A demonic, twisted version of her cute and adorkable nerd? Terrifying.
There...might have been more than a little symbolism in the whole 'horn stabbing' thing. Maybe.
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Even the darkest parts of a person can still be emotionally attached.
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Yeah, both my brothers suffered horrible night terrors as children, and they would sleepwalk/seek out others in a half asleep state, made pretty much of fear and distress. I always feel bad for people who have chronic nightmares.
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It was featured? Holy shit. I thought that honor only went to porn and popular stories on this site.
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*plays with your feelings the way a kitten plays with a ball of yarn.* I'm not sorry. Making you have feelings about the characters is about 75% of the writing process for this story. I do keep boxes of tissues and stress balls handy though.
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Heh. I suggest you buckle up, because we're just getting this party started.
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Still not sorry...but! Updates are weekly, so check back next Thursday/Friday and there will be a whole new shiny chapter waiting for you to read! (I have a buffer of like 30-40 chapters, so updates will continue regularly for a while whilst I finish writing the arc!) I'm also so glad to hear that you enjoyed reading the story thus far, and I hope you share it with your friends!
And thank you for the compliments and comments! They're always a pleasure to read! :}
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to be fair I can't say anything about the feelings. I made myself cry rewriting chapter 0 of book 0 of one of my three fics with fully written out outlines just not much actual writing work done on them. The rewrite left Celestia emotionally and mentally devastated after an already trying day for her with Sunset vanishing and Twilight hatching Spike.
Ah heck. I’m pretty sure you showed me this before (either that or im having serious deja vu) and it still made me extremely unsettled. Loved it. The grotesque, horrifying descriptions mix really well with your writing style and effectively paint a picture of a distorted Canterlot City. The dream sequence itself raises some questions (my biggest one being that the second other being that Sunset saw seemed to resemble Midnight Sparkle if I read right, so how would she know?) but having those questions go unanswered just really helps.
As for the post dream sequence, that’s some horrifying stuff. Being unable to wake up from a nightmare is probably a nightmare in and of itself. I can’t even imagine how either of them feel. Sunset being stuck in her terror and Twilight helplessly watching her girlfriend go through it. I also just want to bring up this quote really quick:
That description is deeply unsettling. Comparing Sunset’s scream to a dying animal’s is probably the best thing you could have written, given who Sunset is and what she was dreaming of. Still gave me chills when I went back to find the quote.
I do wonder how no one in the house heard all this commotion, though it could just be that not enough time had passed for someone to have come. All I know is that my parents would have been there in no time lol.
Compared with that last cute chapter we got of them two, this gives major whiplash which I enjoy very much. You really packed a punch here. I can’t wait to see what kind of conversation this brings up
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Yes, the first draft for the nightmare was something I ran by you back in like march when I wrote it, because I wanted to make sure it had the vibe I wanted. Its gone through a bit of editing since then, but it is the same rough block of text under it, so you aren't crazy. You did read it before. :P The whole nightmare is meant to make your skin crawl, and I went full in on all of the knowledge I gained from years of running a haunted house, film and stage techniques to create atmosphere, and more than a smattering of studies on famous suspense and gothic horror literature and WHY stuff frightens us. (October holds my favorite holiday for a reason, lol.) I wanted people unsettled, disturbed, and a little freaked out by the nightmare.
As for the thing she saw resembling Midnight....why yes, it did look something like Midnight. Isn't that...interesting, all things considered? Maybe there's a reason for that.
And Twilight's view point, of Sunset being caught in this terrible nightmare, of being awake but not awake, that was just as much part of the terror of the nightmare as the actual nightmare.
The sentences you lit on there are probably some of my favorite imagery from the story, right after the quote from a the chapter "Pandora's Box" where I make the comparison that 'Sunset Shimmer looked at Twilight like she'd hung the stars.' Every once in a while I'll get something that comes out of nowhere that is like "Yes. This quote is fucking amazing."
Give it time. Next week is an Interlude from a parental perspective, lol.
The emotional whiplash is part of the arc. We're just getting started. :P
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well you definitely did the spooky justice. and if you mean Halloween, that’s my favourite holiday too! i can’t wait for next week, and if this is just getting started then hoo wee am I excited for more >:) I cant wait to see what all this means
Wow
And looks looks like what I theorized is a two-way street, and now the darkness is trying to drown out the light.
It is interesting (and somewhat satisfying) that Sunset's dark side is (in someway) trying to help her.
Twi needs to get Shining to hold Sunny down, lest she do any mor damage.
incalculable amounts of barely restrained fury. I am already patiently waiting for the chapter when I can spam crab emojis and celebrate the death of the wicked witch.
this just seems obnoxious more than anything else honestly.