Every action taken is like dropping a pebble in a pond, creating ripples that extend ever outward. Every choice has consequences, good and bad... Putting on a Crown may have changed Sunset Shimmer's life...but it also Changed two worlds...
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This was beautifully written. This chapter and story all together is something really special.
Twilight and Sunset reaching not only to a new level in their relationship but also something within themselves was really touching.
I really admire your work. And thanks for telling such an amazing story in a heartfelt way.
Well, that's certainly one way to use magic
I mean, there's no lack of that on this site or in pony fandom in general, so they could easily go off into find that if that's what they're wanting.
Overall, though, wonderful chapter and I fully believe this was something that's been waiting in the wings for some time now. I'm fully expecting some level of 'Oh wow... we're that far' coming in tomorrow for the girls, when the two realize just how in love with each other they are and how far they've now gone. For all of Sunset's thoughts here, she's now gotta face the fact that she really does have to tell Twilight everything.... and that's going to be a bumpy road no matter what, especially with the Friendship games and potential Midnight Sparkle around the corner.
Also, I've got 20 bits on Rarity being able to sense something changed with Sunset after this and being like 'Darling... you're glowing so much I can see the magic'.
So it's unicorn mating season, is it?
Articulate intimacy worthy of two incredibly smart individuals. It was slow, it was affectionate, it concluded in a BANG that was worthy of Dave saying, "My God, it's full of Stars!"
Writing gratuitous smut is not terribly difficult. I've done it. Writing lovemaking. That is the mark of an artist. Yes, worth the wait and build-up and serendipitous to fall so close to V-Day. Sometimes life is fun like that. We can all use more fun in our lives.
Now. The line has been crossed. They both acknowledge to their own minds they are in LOVE. Now comes the hard part. Understanding what comes with that word. In another, just as important word. HONESTY.
Let's see how it goes.
Perfect
The goods news is that we know the 'unicorns are only attracted to virgins' thing is a flubb in this world cause bruh, that would be a hit. "Yo good times, very card's punched, dueces"
Regardless phenomenal chapter, and likely the new book mark to trigger a reread, as I tend to do that at major points. It's how I keep finding little details and nuances in places.
This chapter though. I had no doubt that one of the two would get ahead of themselves and push things this way before they had a full sit down to discuss I like they did on 'safe touches'. Still, both consenting, both hungry for more, and both not just using this as a reason to get their rocks off, but also as a further exploration of the depths of their mental, physical and emotional depths of their relationship was phenomenal.
I'll have to wait til next chapter to see if more 'magic shenanigans while asleep' happen that have that 'what if tied to Luna' side theory hold anymore weight.
this was written in a way i’ve never really seen encapsulated quite so well from a piece of literature surrounding anything to do with sex. it captures the emotional side of being intimate in a way i haven’t read before, let alone in any sort of fan-fiction, you’ve developed sunsets character so well in anticipation for this part that it feels personal. well done
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Mom’s doing great—her dr. Is extremely pleased with how she’s healing, even if she is being a bit childish about not being allowed to put weight on it for another month.
Yeah, there might’ve been layers to the symbolism. Its this thing I like doing, because it means there’s always more to discover on a reread. Surface layers, slightly hidden layers, deeply hidden layers, meta level symbolism, foreshadowing, wordplay, use of etymology, cultural references, psychological roadmaps, pop culture jokes, its all there. Im a nerd with free time. It should be expected, haha.
The shirts…. Well the “Proud Unicorn” one is, though Sunset is using it as a more literal thing than its normal connotation. The other one, i just needed something that went with the unicorn thing, and I swiped something my friend has said before about “how beyoooooond gay” he is.
And yes, i know. Bit of a double entendre there about the bumper cars. Heh.
“Music is magic…
Music makes you whole.
Music is magic!
It wraps itself around you, filling up your soul!” — Jem and the Holograms, circa 1985.
The connection between magic and music is a pretty solid staple in the story, as is how Sunset has been using one to manipulate the other for about a hundred chapters. Was she intending for it to do that this time? Hard to say without her perspective. Twilight seems quite enchanted though, soooooo…
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Really? Theres actually a lot of myths and legends about creatures who lure unsuspecting mortals to them with singing or music or an enchanting voice, only to cause their death/doom in some fashion. Sometimes by making them do stupid stuff, but just as often because they consume the flesh amd/or soul of the victim. Japanese folklore is full of monsters like this, as an off the top example, but even western culture has its fair share. Hell, even the modern vampire myth has a bit of this: enchanting voice amd charismatic presence, the concept of “the Kiss” being pleasure incarnate…all so the vampire cam feed.
Its really a lot more common as a myth feature than just sirens.
As for Sunny’s ancestry—which is the actual question youve been gnawing on i think, I’ll suggest this clue: look at traits that go back to her earliest ages. Things that shes mentioned or have been detailed in the narrative as having been a thing when she was young. Those are where the clues lie for that, separate from the changes wrought after the formal and her transformation.
I will say now, I think only one person in the comments has gotten it, bit as it was buried in a mountain of other guesses, I’m not sure it counts. Hehe.
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I found the movies had their good points, and ive used them for research, but the plan has always been that the two main points of divergence are first her meeting Twilight the night of the formal, and second, the climax of Rainbow Rocks. Something important happened there that has yet to play out fully. The further we get, the less events will resemble the movies. Some of them will not happen at all, or will only be the same in that things happen at the setting.
I must say, your various theories are fascinating. A few of them are scarily on the money, some are completely off, and at least two are going in the right direction but not for the reasons you think. ;)
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Im so glad you enjoyed the chapter—we really wanted the focus on the emotions and characters’ growth, and it sounds like we managed to hit the narrative sweet spot.
And thank you so much for your kind words. Knowing that this story has affected readers in some personal way is the greatest reward for all the time we put in.
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It should come as no surprise that Sunset has a silver tongue.
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You say that, but I’ve gotten a handful of creepy pms and a few skeevy comments over the last four years. *shudders*
The fallout from their actions here will come in the next few chapters. If they can stop giggling and blushing at each other, that is. Or diving back into bed for another round or seven.
Sunset has to figure out how to move forward with her decision, now that she’s made it.
…as for Rarity…well. In due time, darling.
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Its apparently Sunset’s mating season, lol. Not that Twilight’s complaining.
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I’m going to quote Johnny Awesome from WoW here: “My horse is made of stars!”
Writing smut is easy. Any horny 13-year-old with a WoW Sub can do it…and they do. Fanfiction sites and mmos and chatrooms have been full of them since the internet became publicly available. Writing a compelling narrative with emotional weight is difficult, even more so when you are trying to balance that emotional impact against a backdrop of sexual relations, even if its lovemaking and not knocking boots. This chapter went through over a dozen iterations over two and a half years, but I like to think we achieved what we wanted with it.
The audience reaction has certainly been what we were hoping for.
The girls still have a way to go, but every step forward is a step forward.
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:)
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I’m sure theres some serious ribbing in Sunset’s future about unicorns and various unicorn myths. Especially that one. We do have a loose idea for a hilarious visit at some point in the future with Twilight’s aunt who is a New Age Spiritualist, and her making a comment about Sunset’s unicorn shirt and how “such wonderful creatures, so pure and innocent…” to the two teens who are trying to keep a straight face since they had somewhat…creative…relations the night before.
Layers, my friend. Layers upon layers. Hehe.
They were ready to go ahead, and it was this beautiful culmination of not just the chapter, but really every that happened in the story so far but also from the point Twilight woke up and they talked in bed that morning. Maybe their morning conversation was about Sunset’s baggage and their need to have time as a couple, but the bones of it was all there. In a way, they did have the discussion, and were emotionally ready for the choice they made to not stop this time, to let it play out.
It was time, and the girls knew it without needing to voice it in as many words.
As for..,shenanigans…well. You’ll see, I suppose.
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Youve hit upon one of my personal issues with sexual scenes in literature and media—as someone who very firmly falls under the label of demisexual/demiromantic, I don’t much care for sex scenes in most stories. It always feels…flat to me, with so little focus on emotion and internal narrative, or unrealistic because these characters just met three weeks ago how could they have reach “soul mate status” so quickly?
With this, we wanted the sex to be secondary to the relationship. Its a natural progression of that relationship, and of physical attraction too, but we’ve set from the beginning that Sunset’s physical desire for Twilight grew out of both an intellectual and emotional connection, rather than “oh wow, shes hot.” (Twilight is not hot. She is cute. Shes dorky. Shes sweet. And she gave Sunset unconditional friendship when she had never known such a thing. But she is not a bombshell.) Like everything else, physical intimacy for them was always going to be about Sunset’s struggles and desires for emotional connection, her long standing issues with abandonment, and this desperate search in her life for somewhere to belong…and on the flipside, its been about Twilight exploring her identity, her emotions, coming to grasp what she feels and how to label it, and how being with Sunset pushes her to “become her best self, the person that can walk beside Sunset as a partner and equal.”
Its about their growth. In a way, its tangled in the theme of “coming of age” that is such a staple of narratives involving teens and college age people. Its about self identity, about guilt and shame versus self love and acceptance, about growth and the capacity for people to change. Its about love. Its about friendship. Its about trust.
The sex was never the point of the chapter. It was merely the vehicle to express the point. Thats why its written like it is, an experiment and a narrative and culmination of over a hundred chapters of character building and hard work.
It was meant to be personal, because it was.
Personal for Sunset.
Personal for Twilight.
And personal for each and every reader who has been part of the journey with them, who has grown invested in their lives and feelings and growth and happiness.
I’m just glad it worked the way I wanted.
I really hope next chapter is Sunset going back to school with a bright smile on her face after the best night she had with Sparky and everyone (except for maybe Rainbow lol) are puzzled as to why she's so goddamn happy :)
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That’s me! I’ve noticed that sort of thing going on for the last...year or two? I can’t remember. I always thought it was my eyesight, but maybe it’s just a new development in my ADHD. Wow.
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Not to mention Lyra and Flash.
After all, there are 5 people in the school who now know about Sparky (the remaining 2 being Celestia and Luna if I'm not mistaken)
goddammit I finally caught up - anywho
Sweet number a hundred and fourteen that was a wild ride, and Twilight's brain finally shutting up? I did a spit take reading that.
This entire work was more than what I ever expected honestly. I came in expecting your average 'giant knockers, extremely disproportionate, unhealthy diet, ignorant parents, no account for mental health' to being smacked with (to name a few points):
Extraordinary word building and plot
Surprisingly accurate depiction of mental health (I've had/still have what Sparky and Sunny been through, being knocked off my throne as well albeit not smacked in the face with a massive pride flag)
Making note of diets and how they affect people
Cultural differences
And it's not even done!
As a demiaroace person myself (I use it to simplify saying demisexual and demiromantic) that sex scene was portrayed spectacularly, the timing was also on point. I see fanfiction pieces where they have sex on the first night of meeting (not as a hook up) and I just find it funny and not serious at all. This was one of the only pieces that I was actually not finding funny and more so as if it actually happened.
Anyways I'm going on a tangent, can't wait to see what else you have brewing.
omg it finally happened,,, i love this story i dont wanna let it gooooo