Every action taken is like dropping a pebble in a pond, creating ripples that extend ever outward. Every choice has consequences, good and bad... Putting on a Crown may have changed Sunset Shimmer's life...but it also Changed two worlds...
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Ah, so we're finally entering Rainbow Rocks territory. I'm really curious how the butterflies so far will affect the plot (not really expecting big changes yet but still).
Also I've noticed you gave Rarity a horn during her transformation, unlike in canon EqG. Interesting.
I would! I'm always fascinated by world-building.
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Yes. We're finally starting to tread into Rainbow Rocks, or close to it. As I mentioned prior, it will be fairly close to the actual script, though I do take the liberty of adjusting the timeline and adding in a number of scenes from Sunset's perspective, as well as continuing the third person limited view that gives us everything from Sunny's PoV. I freely admit I do make the Sirens...more nasty and horrible than they were in a PG rated movie made to sell toys. Emotiphages are not traditionally nice creatures, no matter what kind they are or what emotions they devour.
The choice to give the unicorn transformations horns really came down to the fact that in the novelizations of the Equestria Girls stuff, they are depicted with horns, implying that the lack of them in the movies may have been for visual aethetic and not for in character/in world reasons. To me, it makes more sense to have Sunset and Rarity and Twilight have horns, because that's the super obvious trait that makes a unicorn...well, a unicorn. Its in the name, after all. “Unicorn. Old french, unicorne. Latin ūnicornis. Literally one horned. Unus one and cornu a horn. A fabulous animal resembling a horse with one horn!" as the Butterfly says.
And I'm flattered that you would put up with me Tolkien-ing out that kind of world building exposition, but as someone who cant read works like the lord of the rings because "by all the gods would this windbag get to the blasted point! No one cares this much about a f**king tree!" I try to find that good balance between world-building exposition that fits the current dialogue or situation and getting my point across with the right words rather than a LOT of words. Maybe at some point later I'll blather on in a blog post on this account about the world building I did.
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I'm gonna be honest with you, Sir-and-or-Madam. I'm not going to shy away from the intimacies in relationships, but this story will be focusing on the emotional and psychological facets of them more than anything, and any physical intimacy depicted will be for the purposes of a greater story, not as the need to include cheap smut for the sake of having smut. This is not, nor will it ever be, that kind of tale. As such, I would appreciate it greatly if you didn't make comments like this in the future, because if I'm totally honest, it comes off as kinda creepy, and missing the greater point of the tale. Thank you very much for your understanding.
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Very well. i deleted it.
Now then i be perfectly HONEST with you. I never meant to be some cheap smut, but a touching funny scene.
But apparently for some reason you choose to see it that way.
Be may as how i requested I suppose ti came out that way, so with that in mind i do apologize.
Anon a miss will not happen which is great.. But at the same time. Forgotten Friendship is still a posibility. Wallflower and the memory stone.
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Oh, I have delicious plans in store for the Memory Stone. Evil, wicked, and delightful plans. Bruhahahah.
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I'm currently doing my own version of "filling in the blanks" for a story I'm planning, and I'd appreciate seeing other people's takes.
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... NOoo.. you suck.
I like the way you handled this, especially the dimensionally apropos aside regarding Rainbow's wings, and the callback to Rarity and AJ not being as subtle as they think they are.
Ha, there are probably a lot more readers than you'd think who would love a good world building session, though I don't know how many of us read this story. Though like you mention in your comment, it might be better for the other readers, and for the story itself, if you isolate it to a blog post.
Mental asides like you're doing are a lovely compromise.
Lots of great foreshadowing in this one.
Personally, I like that while Dash isn't exactly book smart, she's observant. Its all too easy to make her a "dumb jock," but canonically, she is smart, just not academic smart.
And I'm sure those spikes on Twi's instruments will have no potential future consequences. Especially since Sunset's told Twi all about magic… oh wait, she hasn't. Yup, this can only end well.
Love the chapter. Great world building. I'd the rainbow rocks arc coming next chapter or is that going to be a few more chaptets? I hope this doesn't affect Sunset and Twilight's relationship too much
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True, too many stories go the dumb jock route. I've always seen her not as lacking intelligence, just lacking motivation, or maybe patience. She's too focused on sports and her hobbies to go the extra mile for school.
Leave it to Rainbow to be both insightful and sensitive, and to completely stick her foot in her mouth in the same chapter.
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The Rarijack being this “worst kept secret” is actually the entire premise behind an eventual side story in the same universe, that pretty much opens by presenting their relationship as “the secret everyone knows but never talks about.” When i was in high school, there were a couple of things like that—secrets the kids all knew about but never talked about, things you never had to be told, you just...kinda learned by osmosis. Only reason ive not done the side stories yet is because i want to focus on the main tale first.
World building is something i adore doing—especially when it involves trying to make deeper sense of loose canon for a particular universe. (Theres a reason I wrote comprehensive roleplaying guides for my WoW guild years ago, lol). At this point, what Ive pieced together for MLP could easily fill a hundred pages. But i also recognize there’s a place for it. Vomiting it out as exposition in the middle of a story can disrupt the story if you do it wrong, and it can ruin the plot by giving the reader too much too early. I find it works better in the long run to feed it in a little at a time, where its appropriate: such as in this chapter with Sunset touching on magic and other things.
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Rainbow is easy to make a “dumb jock” but truthfully thats not her character. Shes impulsive and often short sighted, stubborn, and often times incredibly emotionally detached and emotionally shallow to anyone she isnt personally invested in, and shes not particularly book smart. However, she’s incredibly observant, and when she is emotionally invested in someone, can be not just Loyal beyond measure, but deeply sensitive to their moods and needs. A good example is pony Dash’s relationship with Fluttershy. I decided to simply take those traits and apply them. She’s twigged to the realization that Sunset has another friend, but is loyal enough to let it be Sunset’s secret to tell others. Rainbow may not be my favorite character, but she deserves solid characterization.
And yes, Sunny not telling her girl about the magic will...have consequences down the line...but thats the whole theme of the story after all. Choice and consequence, and the question of Destiny vs. Free Will.
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The Rainbow Rocks stuff is...upcoming. Got another chapter and a couple of interludes, before we dig into the meat of RR.
As for affects on the relationship....well. You’ll see.
*cackles wickedly and goes to work on the next chapter*
Yes! I completely agree that the unicorns should have horns! Ahem. Pet peeve, sorry. I do imagine the show design dropped the horns because they didn't look good on the toys (which are always made first). Regardless, I like where this is going and look forward to that bridge Sunny is going to have to cross when it comes to, "Oh, by the way, Twilight, you're dating a magical pony."
Jjjjj en muchas historias se lo dicen a sunset pero en esta se ven reflejados los sentimientos de sunset ya que en las otras su actitud es despreocupada.
Me encanta como estas haciendo a sunset 🥰
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Believe me, the “by the way, I’m a magical unicorn sorceress from another world who once turned into a demon because I have serious mommy issues...” conversation is going to be hilarious.
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Still glad to hear you are enjoying the story, friend. I try to make sure that I really consider the thoughts and feelings of the characters, especially Sunset, and I do my best to portray them realistically.
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Hmm...i hadnt realized so many songs involved a line about pink champagne. I only know of one. The song in question is Hotel California, by The Eagles. Its a rather iconic song, whose meaning is a matter of debate, but contains this slow dawning horror element as the point of view individual realizes that the “hotel” he has checked into is a nightmare, and when he tries to find a way out, he is still informed “you can check out any time you like, but you can never leave.” Regardless of whether you find it a metaphorical take on death, or a commentary on drugs and rehab, or the audio counterpart to Rocky Horror, or any of the other number of speculated meanings, its both a catchy and eerie song, and for a displaced unicorn girl who finds herself trapped in a world so different and filled with what to her are horrors, the allusions to finding that the door she came through offers her no exit...the parallels are distinct.
Its also known for the like 2 minute guitar solo at the end.
ahah! Casually dropping that Sunset's noticed Rarity/AJ are a couple
Love this story so far! Just so you know you said "Name If the band" instead "Of" the band