Every action taken is like dropping a pebble in a pond, creating ripples that extend ever outward. Every choice has consequences, good and bad... Putting on a Crown may have changed Sunset Shimmer's life...but it also Changed two worlds...
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Uuuuuuh, girls? Might want to rethink the conversation real quick, Glamour just sort of told Twilight's parents that you're dating.
This was an excellent chapter to go out on. It's sad, it's infuriating, it's touching, but best of all it is INSPIRING. It is so easy in our world of constant bombardment of media good and bad that we become overwhelmed with the world and just want to shut everyone out. Velvet and Night are inspirational characters written to a beautiful flawed perfection. They did not let their money or ties or status poison them and they have tried to be good parents, instill good values in their children and just be GOOD in general. I wish I was half as good as them even if they are fictional. Life goals.
Sunset's revelation is so heartwarming. Reflection on what has happened and who has been there for her and to stop and consider that maybe, just MAYBE Princess Celestia was not perfect and they both made mistakes. And of course, the cherry on top. That maybe, being human is not so bad as long as you are surrounded by the right kind of people.
Have a great holiday season and a happy new year.
So, are you going to atleast write a part where Glamour's dad get what he deserves?
One of my favorite D&D 3rd ed settings was Scarred Lands (created by White Wolf before they had their fangs ripped out and they got skinned by their publisher), and of the cities there, Hollowfaust was my favorite. It was a city of Lawful Neutral necromancers, and was ironically one of the safest, cleanest, most peaceful cities in the entire setting.
One law that the Hollowfausters had was "Every person's body is their sovereign property. Deprive another of that sovereignty, and you forfeit your own." And said final forfeiture took the shape of being handed over to one of the necromancers to do with you as they saw fit. While they weren't evil, they were still necromancers, and could be very "creative" in their disposal of their new property, i.e. - your living body. They couldn't touch your mind or soul, but your shell? Fair game.
I'll leave it to your imagination why I'm bringing that up regarding this chapter.
The Sparkle household stepping up is never not going to give me the warm and fuzziness tbh.
Also, the more and more this world space goes one, the more I realise I wouldn't ever be a pony in this world space. Or at least I wouldn't have an Equestrian pony counterpart.
My answers to a large number of issues seen in this series are innately confrontational with no qualms about steering things in the direction of letting the aggressors get just pissed enough to give me an excuse of self defense once they swing.
It's actually been a treat to see how much worldbuilding you guys do here too, but it's really put an emphasis on the above statement. When reading stories, part of what helps me immerse myself is to draw parallels between the characters actions and how I would respond, as well as how I've seen people respond, to said situations, and this stories done such a good job of making the world feel real and grounded. It's also why I can't get into many horror films too. Are you telling me not one person is gonna knee jerk punch the horror villain in the face when he pops up randomly? Come one.
Anyhow, I hope you enjoy the holidays and your birthday. I'll be spending my December casting Steel hollowpoint 12 gauge slugs, sprinkled with iron shaving, dipped in holy water, getting them blessed by a shaman, then filling the hollow point in with high grade wax with salt, garlic and a few other herb and spice shavings tucked in said wax. Gotta prepare for a certain sidhe once the story continues, no?
Like I said. Not a pony. Maybe a gryphon, or a particularly amicable dragon. Or just a very well disciplined diamond dog.
As above, so below...
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I got an idea for that.
Sunset finally realized some big things. Two of them come to mind:
1. She's not the only creature in two words who is fallible.
2. The love she's been getting from friends and family alike is real.
And some people wonder why she's so steadfast in her loyalty to her friends in the canon show.
Edit: Mr. Cheap Shot needs to take a cheap shot to the face.
I have a feeling Sunset realization is going to be a big turning point. Very much looking forward to it!
Thank you for feeding us. Have a wonderful holiday and birthday!
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Eh, I think that was more like a flashback. Not the word for word story as Glamour and Wildsong were telling it. If they had actually said that I'm sure we would have had a reaction from Twilight at least.
Yeesh, Glamour's parents are something else...
Definitely Canterlot noble material in Equestria. her dad seems like the worse of the two, but who's to say her mom's being all saccharine and nice just to get Glamour to do what she wants later?
Sunny's realizing she cementing herself more an more into the human world that it feels more like home than Equestria. The body may be forever foreign to her, but the world will not be.
Have a good break!
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That's a very good guess.
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I was actually thinking Cassandra's cry first. And maybe Harmony.
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It would give up a rather mixed European genetic code, with a few heritages in stronger amounts than the others. The portal fashions bodies for those who cross over the very first time (in either direction) based on the closest compatible soul/counterpart. Its why Princess Twilight came through roughly similar to Sparky, but taller, without eyesight issues, and a few years older. In Sunset's case, its a bit more convoluted, but the worlds did the best they could.
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Yes, Baree is correct. The audience is privy to what happened as a flashback, as that was more interesting than you folks having to read through Glamour stammering and stuttering and sniffling through exposition. Velvet and Night had to listen through the crying, shorthand version.
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This was such a nice comment to get, Revel. I'm so glad you enjoyed the chapter, and it means a lot that you love the stuff with Velvet and Night so much. :}
I hope your holidays are merry and fun.
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To be determined...
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See, I like the sound of a city like that. Sounds like a lovely place to live.
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We work very hard on the worldbuilding, and I'm glad that it feels very real and grounded. To me, that is what "realism" feels like--its not about gritty, or grim-dark, or hopelessness. Its about making a setting feel like a real place, like a place that could actually exist, that you could visit. The people need to feel like real people, with hopes and dreams and fears and flaws.
As for you, friend...In Rubicon? I would suggest a minotaur. They value fortitude, strength, and self sufficiency of the individual, and a lot of their culture revolves around facing challenges head on. "Taking the bull by the horns" as it were. They have an association with elemental earth and stone, and are strong, immovable opponents who dig their hooves in and refuse to take shit.
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Indeed.
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There are a great many things at work here, she is moving towards something.
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Glamour's parents are a thing unto themselves, yes. Summer is the one I keep referencing as the huge gold digger.
Sunset is making a life for herself in the human world.
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It's things like Scarred Lands (the setting where Hollowfaust) and World of Darkness (old and new) that made me love White Wolf. Sadly, they're no more.
Darn! Now I'm going to be bored for a couple months. Last chapter swung upwards and this chapter was a valley emotionally. That sure was some realization however.
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I am a dual national Scottish American who spent a chunk of time in Texas, so honestly I won't lie, a lot of me takes the headstrong, hand on problem solving from being raised by the country morals of both locations.
So yeah, actually, I'll take minotaur, and appreciate it to boot. Made me go find some silly art... add a rattan cowboy hat and the orange fur with your imagination.
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"'Eard some fae spittin' shite. Up y'come lassie, we've a bitch tae burn."
Been moving over the weekend so I had to wait for my favorite update for two extra days. TWO EXTRA DAYS! But it was worth it. Loving the story as always. It's fine though. We just have to wait another thirty days for the next chapter. No problem at all.
But seriously, nice family dynamics going on here. Hopefully the girls all have a nice weekend after they recover a bit from all the craziness. If Nightlight and Shiny gets things flowing right then it should mellow out eventually.
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Things will be back to our normal schedule of playing with your emotions in January, promise!
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I watched the Beetlejuice cartoon as a kid, so I’m just having Monster-Across-the-Street flashbacks.
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Well, if you need a fix, you could always spend the month rereading the story, lol!
Just read and re-read the story over the past few weeks, and I have to say this story gets solidly added to the short list of those I wish I had found both sooner and later. So I could have been here to watch it develop, and so I don't have to wait as F-ing long to read more of it.
Also, curse you for going on your winter hiatus as soon as I begin reading, absolutely uncalled for.
On a more serious note, absolutely stellar story; I love your characterisations of everyone, as well as the absolutely delicious levels of drama lurking around every corner.
And finally, on the topic of this particular chapter: oh boy, sunny realising that effectively all her worldly attachments are to the human one. Makes me feel like the chance she tells sparky and her family about her past before it is revealed in some hilarious out of control manner has risen above 0%.
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Apologies about how late my reply is. I got busy with other things and I kept forgetting for a while.
When it comes to paragraph length, what I’ve read in my writing books (though I cannot remember which, that’s annoying) is that you should alternate between longer and shorter paragraphs, since a string of long ones can tire a reader, and a string of short ones can look like an essay. Everything else is my own inference and decisions based on my experience posting on the internet.
It’s funny, though. Around the same time you answered me, I ended up in a discussion with someone else on the same subject. I realize now that some of my own personal rules on paragraph length (not usually going beyond five lines in Word) are a quite arbitrary, and perhaps I need to tweak them a bit, as I can see some oddities in my own style I can work on. And, I will admit, part of the problem is that my eyesight isn’t exactly the best. I’m nearsighted.
But online posting is such an odd thing in and of itself. Margins will vary from site to site, so that big paragraphs can be rendered as only a few lines long. I use Word as my benchmark because it’s the most consistent one I can find, allowing me to see what the work would look like on the printed page. Plus, internet writing often uses single space, while printed books tend to use something above single space. Printed books don’t need to put blank lines between paragraphs because of that line spacing, while on the internet, it’s necessary for readability.
Maybe it’s also because when you put blank lines between paragraphs, the really, really big ones tend to stick out a lot more. I looked at some old books of my own, and I’ll agree with you, there were some really big paragraphs, but their size went unnoticed to me. And I have still seen fanfics online with paragraphs that were truly huge, and which could be broken up effectively to improve readability.
I also write basically everything with single space and blank lines between paragraphs, so I suppose looking out for this stuff is hardwired into my brain.
I don’t think I’ve ever written a chapter with thirteen scene breaks. Well, actually, in the last few months I posted a chapter with thirteen scenes, so, that’s twelve scene breaks. But in all fairness, most of those scenes were short, and that’s the only reason I’d ever do that sort of thing, so it balanced out length-wise.
I’m glad you liked my work. I presume you mean A Tale of Two Suns. I still need to transfer that fully to Scrivener and honestly, I still think there are parts of it that come off as clunky that I could polish. It’s a truly dreadful impulse I’ve been wrestling with since...day one. Pity me.