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Damn. Talk about unexpected plot revelations.
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Yes, exactly that.
The spirits seem to be working against the text.
So perhaps Silver had to become the "God of War"(:P) to be able to hurt him somehow.
A highly amusing and unexpected plot twist
Now that was a plot twist but did I win my bet that the typos would prevail
I literally spit took the entire way back to work on my walk back from lunch.
Celestia got sniped too?!?!? Did not see that coming at all, we are extremely surprised. It makes us wonder the intent of the Spirits....
Keep going! ;)
thousands
I have to say that I did not see this twist coming in the story. I can't wait to see how Celestia and Luna going to handle this Revelation to there beginnings.
Keep up the good work.
PS I wonder how long has Text has been doing this? Its like Equestria is his personal Game.
Dragonfox
6282985 Done!
Yay Celestia won. Like a flying turtle from space she nailed it.
this chapter, well I just really do not know wheat to say it is shocking to say the lest text has ben around for a vary long time.
just how is silver going to tell celestia that she and Luna were both human at one time.
just wow.
6283062 'Their' not 'There'.
'Their' is possessive for...plural? Kinda like 'his', 'her' and 'its' but for a group.
I think that should be "shook the boat."
Capitalize "The Text" in that sentence.
There are two spaces between "sat" and "up."
There are two spaces between these sentences.
Don't capitalize "the" here.
6289534 The typos were just as shocked!
Sigh... I really want to throw my poor phone into a wall in a fit of rage right about now. I hate seeing Celestia get beaten like that by some noname antagonist... She moves the freeking SUN! Especially no mortal should be able to go on a romp around her soul/spirit like that. And that plot device with her being human... cheap trick to add more drama that is unecessary imho. Well, that's my rant done. I feel better and nontheless will wait for next chapter.
6290129 Celestia won, and fairly decisively at that. I'm not sure what a villain had to do to earn the title of 'named' however. Is she even bad, or does she just do things we do not like?
6290561 Well, Celestia won physicaly but lost something far more precious - an established sense of self. Ergo, she lost the fight. Now the anubian, with one act she dragged forward something forgotten in a forecfull maner, without consideration or concern for Celestia, without care for consequences. Just fueled by her sense of superiority of her beliefes. That rather nicely matches with the description of "bad".
I can see the irony of something like that happening to this particular Celestia, but... Sigh, I just kind of "disarmed" myself, didn't I? Oh well...
6289575 Wow...epic cat-fight for the win!
Reading over this chapter, there are several things that come to mind. The first is that I should probably amend my thoughts on this entire conflict from the previous chapters. I mentioned that I can see Celestia and Nefertari taking an immediate dislike to each other, simply because they're both "alpha" types that naturally clash when in proximity - those who have authority do not yield it to another easily, and that's more true the more authority you have.
What's less obvious is why this fight had to happen at all. I can see Nefertari pushing it, since combat is part of her way of life, but it strikes me as somewhat odd that Celestia would allow herself to be goaded into this level of conflict so easily. To be fair, she's no pacifist; we've seen her exercise time and again the common sense that allows her to intuit if a foe is the sort that can be reasoned with or not, but never without judging that the threat was both terrible and immediate enough that it warranted it. Nefertari may have been trying to push Celestia's buttons, but it really seems like Celestia let herself get pushed into a fight. Why?
Insofar as the fight itself went, it pretty well delivered! Well, mostly. The battle was sufficiently "high-octane" in terms of the amount of power being used by both combatants; magic was used plentifully and the scope of how severe and how rapidly the attacks were delivered did a fairly good job of making the fight seem impressive. Nefertari in particular seemed to have a particular "style" to how she fought; that is, her attack patterns utilized her talents in such a way as to give her tactics thematic similarity. She used her magic to give her physical abilities an edge, both by enhancing herself and manipulating the battlefield. She didn't use any energy blasts, illusions (darkening the field is, to my mind, more "controlling the terrain" rather than misdirection), summons (again, the spirits were more of an impediment, rather than additional combatants on the field), or anything like that. Rather, it was all about setting her up for being able to deliver punishing physical blows. I'd bet that she had some enhancements in there too (beyond her "war form").
Insofar as Celestia goes...I had more mixed feelings, because there's a disconnect between how I'd expect her to fight based on what we've seen of her in the source material, versus what we've seen of her in this fic. In the source material, the few times we've seen Celestia fight haven't been physical altercations, in terms of trading blows with her hooves, biting, etc. Notwithstanding a single instance of locking horns with Queen Chrysalis, Celestia has always relied on the (rather unicorn) style of blasting her enemies from range (either with her own magic or the Elements of Harmony), whether it's Chrysalis, Nightmare Moon, Discord, King Sombra, etc. - we've all seen them get hit by blasts of magic, not a hoof to the face.
Conversely, we know that, as an alicorn, Celestia has the speed/maneuverability of a pegasus, and the strength/durability of an earth pony. So by that logic it's not that unusual that she'd have fought by lashing out with hooves, or crushing someone under her body, etc. But leaving aside that this doesn't fit her preferred method of attacking (as seen in the show), it also doesn't have have much in the way of tactical themes, which is something I see highly-magical characters having. To be fair, that's something of a minor point here, as when we see Celestia overly using magic, it's fairly light-based...it's just that she doesn't seem too interesting in using magic here. So Celestia's method of approaching the fight was something of a mixed bag for me.
Of course, that leads us to the big reveal of the chapter, if not the entire story so far: that Celestia (and Luna) were once human, and were brought to Equestria and made into ponies by The Text! Dun dun duuun! Reading this over, I found myself liking this particular revelation, which surprised me. On paper, this seems like the sort of idea that I'd hate, since it makes everything revolve around Silver's circumstances more...but the thing is, this series has worked to make this not be the case. The story has showcased enough of a wider world, and limited its main character enough, that this new twist honestly feels more like narrative cohesion than any sort of main-character-pandering. There's a degree to which you want to showcase the wider world, yes, but there's also a degree where you want the plot to tie things together, instead of just being a random bunch of stuff that happens.
In this case, we now know that the circumstances of Celestia's birth (in this world) were largely the same as Silver's, and that brings them closer together, or at least it should. Like him, she was human, and wanted to escape from her world. Like him, she became a pony due to that mysterious entity. And like him, she can re-access that form, now.
My more pressing question is why Nefertari wanted this. She had a very clear and specific reason for wanting to see if Silver had this side to him, and that turned out to be very germane to what was happening. She'd had a prophecy that he'd save and reforge her people, and this fit very cleverly into the medium of "war is coming, but those who want to abandon their old lifestyle can flee it and start anew elsewhere." In order to make sure that Silver was the one to do that, she had to see if he had a "war form" - that is, a human form - and she went about confirming that. But why do the same with Celestia? Is she trying to attack her sense of self? Is she hoping they can bond over this commonality? Is it something else entirely? Nefertari had a very clear, and very clever, reason for doing that with Silver. I hope she has the same level of acumen in doing the same to Celestia.
6301882 Something clearly got to Celestia, but what? Some things become clearer in the next chapter, but not all. Apologies, typing on a touch screen. I was at Bronycon, selling and working. There are many possible reasons for Nefer to move, starting with knowing who she is outranked by, and if they are worthy of the position.
Celestia was once human? Damn. This really is getting ridiculous.
6522401 You haven't said if anything made sense along the way, or if they were good or bad, just bombastic, which is neither. Which is it?
Eh, not happy with this revelation.
Something tells me The Text populated this entire Equestria with humans. I mean ALL of it. -_-