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a vary good chapter it shows true love between the vary happy wives and stallions.
exultant wording Silver.
Harts Fire
Wow now do twilight!!.
Oh yeah, they probably haven't experienced the effects of the first artifact, huh?
It's one thing to hear the story, quite another entirely to experience!
Keep going! ;)
6466156 Nothing wrong with opinions. The issue is that it's a trope because it's kind of true. Bravery is acting in spite of fear, so the appearance of bravery or simply the refusal to be scared when you should be, is hard to differentiate. How would you phrase it?
I don't think the comma is really needed there.
Change "Fast" to "Tumble" there.
Don't capitalize "He/She" there.
There are two spaces between "and" and "forcing."
That second "P" in "P-princess" should also be capitalized.
6478156 All fixed! Thanks for the typo executions.
6478171 For all the sexual escapades, this was a surprisingly sweet chapter. My only real complaint here was that this was more focused on the hot 'n' heavy side of things than on the romance. I had expected that Silver and Tumble's first time would be more emotionally profound, at least for Tumble. I'd have bet money that somepony would have thrown the L-word around at some point during their tryst. I blame Fast, what with her (or rather his) focusing on the lustful side of things. The little minx even found a way to get Silver to give it to her, as a mare no less, during all the shenanigans!
That said, I'm teasing more than anything else. The sex was still surprisingly heartfelt, and I have to admit that this was in large part due to Fast being there to help the other two walk through what was undoubtedly a very nerve-wracking first time for them both (albeit for different reasons). The big surprise was that Silver was willing to let himself be topped, something I hadn't expected him to let happen (certainly not the very first time out!). That really was a "come from behind" moment for him (sorry, I just couldn't help it! ), with his letting go of the last of his personal issues that were keeping him from the "free love" idea that he seems to have come to embody (or at least, to try to champion).
As it is, I do wish that we had more of a spotlight on how Tumble felt during all of this. This is his "emerging into the light at the end of the long, dark tunnel" moment, and I'm honestly expecting him to break down in tears of joy at some point, since he's finally been accepted by the one that he loves so much. Presumably, some sort of big emotional release is going to be had after Twilight gets hers and any other additional love-making is finally exhausted.
6484932 Rough Tumble is still owed one date, and Silver means to oblige!
I enjoyed how this story came together, overall, and it sounds like you did too, which is good! A pleasure to get your input on these things. I agree that it would be awkward if they didn't push ahead to an actual date after they finally got together like that. I blame Fast Change entirely for them skipping ahead to the 'good' stuff, but she did a very nice job of making it a pleasurable experience for everyone involved. The fear died as many fears do, when you realize the thing you were scared of most was the fear itself.
Reading this and listening to nebular spool... trippy
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Nebular spool?
8227646 Good artist
I use spotify but i found this on youtube, from the album Ruin
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I am educated!
This chapter isn’t as bad as I thought it was going to be. I thought I was going to be like...
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Could someone pass me a bottle of brainbleach, please?