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Derp! Why you no more dangly bits. I have the feelz for Bottom. And Silver got a good feelz for Bottom's bottom.
Well the ironic bit is that Silver was already taking him quite eagerly, and probably would have warmed to him more after that. Having broken his inhibition with nopony being mad and no ill effects, the inhibition would likely have gotten weaker.
As much as colt-cuddling is a problem Silver still prefers to run away from, this time I feel it is Bottom who ran away from it for him.
...I'm sorry, I can't keep quiet anymore. Silver makes me want to vomit. Harsh words, you might say, and you would be completely right. However, I really had that physical reaction to reading such an outrageous thing. I mean, sexist Celestia was one of those things that were disgusting, but this? Well, I think he reaches a new low.
Let me try to deconstruct my thoughts a bit. You have taken a character that was a sex slave on a pirate ship. A gay stallion. You have him so messed up that he cannot think of himself others than in terms of value to others. I think we can safely agree that this is a character that is in dire need of psychological help. No, you can't go the 'he's trying to make Bottom happy' way either. He's not mentally sound! And a sex change, for FUCK'S SAKE! A sex change is a very, VERY serious matter, something that should only be done after a competent psychological evaluation. Not only are there people that kill themselves over not feeling the wrong gender, but some of the people that DO get the operation and change REGRET IT! Do you get what I'm saying here? You had your character go through an unwanted sex change because of a sexist immortal's prejudices. You're now having a gay character become female so he can be more attractive to one stallion. It's... You're making me speechless in how much of a disgusting idea that is. In essence, this is you taking a terrible mental issue that requires deep introspective, evaluations and a harduous process that can still leave people prejudiced against today, and reducing to a "seduce your man" thing?
...Every show I have ever seen that had this kind of scenario went with "don't fundamentally change yourself for the sake of a lover", and you know, that's a moral that works! Don't tell me Silver is emotionally a moron, he was a freaking middle-aged man before this whole debacles started. He cannot not be even aware of that issue! But hey, apparently his own experience with it meant really jack shit, because he was happy to be having lesbian and straight female experiences? This coming from the guy that was all 'I'm not going to accept a gay stallion in my herd' some time ago?
And now we get to your treatment of gay characters. I swear, you're making me sound like a SJW and I resent that, deeply. But hey, when it's true... Look, either give it some more thoughts in how despicable it's making you look, or just don't! You don't need to have your world obsessed with giving him gay experiences when Silver doesn't look to be bisexual. Everything goes to shit whenever you add those conflicts, because the implications are very unfortunate.
...And, maybe not on Silver as a whole, but... what is up with this series obsession with sex? I swear, the longer it goes, the more shamelessly it devolves into a self-indulgent fantasy about this ultra male having sex with every female he comes across. It's like it was written by a horny fifteen years old teenaged boy. No really, he has what? A herd, a number of mares to 'stud' for, his servants, and his indentured criminals? Give me a freaking break. Even a clopfic isn't that shameless. It's amazing, because this story's summary was giving me the impression that this was meant to be a worldbuilding fic, about the world at large and the complexity of diplomatic relations between countries. All introduced through a novice but well-meaning pov in the person of Silver. I'm not even going to happen the can of worms that are the trainwrecks on that side, I'm just... tired.
I liked the first two stories in this series. Damn it.
6179151 eh maybe he'll get his mind straight later. there is always re-sexing back. majick ponies, maaan.
currently it's called now-i-think-with-my-dick cursed balls ring
6179151 You're saying a lot of things like Silver is happy with the change and has done anything but be horrified. I'm not even sure we read the same chapter? What Bottom did was the act of a damaged and desperate person, and not a single person in the cast agrees with it... which makes this whole argument feel... awkward? Who are you yelling at?
6179179 Honestly, it's because I'm really not one to buy into his uncontrollable urges things. Because when he asked, I expected Silver to stop. When he realized, I didn't expect him to continue. When the damaged pony asked if he looks good, he gives him gratification. Because what he says and how he acts are not the same. Frankly, I just don't buy it. And your author's note is like a slap in the face at that point. I'm being uncharitable, but I've ran out of patience a while ago.
You also haven't adressed the rest. Some of it was directed at you, actually.
Also, more rapist Silver, really? (By that, I mean him jumping on Bright who ran and him contemplating running after her)6179217 I understand, truly I do. When the hulk starts smashing things and gets all sad about it afterwards, I don't believe him either. He really should just stop smashing things and stop talking about it, and then the problem would be solved.
As for a focus on sex, we've had many chapters without sex taking the foreground. We've had many chapters dealing with extremely heavy topics involving political intrigue, personal loss, and more, but who cares about that, Silver got into trouble with his cursed item and is an awful pony and deserves to be gutted for it. I mean, what an ass, he isn't even trying to be cured! Oh wait, he insisted on being cured this chapter? Well fuck him, rapist. He deserves everything bad that happens to him.
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Just read and caught up on things. While your points may be valid under certain circumstances, the underlying issue here is the magic bangle that has literally turned his dick into his horn, for the purposes of magic casting. While he is slowly getting used to the changes and redirecting his magic appropriately, he was a bit irresponsible and used magic way too much, perhaps because he was becoming too comfortable/lax with it, and the teleport at the end was the final straw that culminated in the 'must have sex now' in order to expel the stored magic that was built up. The bangle is cursed, and rightfully so, as it essentially robbed him of any true cognizant thought beyond 'must stick it in a hole and get relief.'
Couple this with what happened, and afterwards, well... Bottom, as damaged as he is, saw it as a chance to become always needed/wanted by Silver, which in Bottom's eyes, is all that matters. Nopony but Bottom is happy about what happened, and really, it shows that cursed objects are considered to be cursed for a reason. Roughly, anyways. The situation that happened sucked quite a lot for all but Bottom, who yes, should be considered incompetent as far as their own regards. Shit happens. It's more a matter of how they move on from this that is the bigger concern than anything else in my eyes.
6179229 ...Being perfectly honest, your sarcasm made me laugh, and not in a bad way. I suppose the Hulk comparison is fair, especially when the character tries to solve his problem. But please, do tell me if you would want Marvel to have the Hulk's catchphrase to be "Hulk SEXS" who does anything and everything to get some, even if it means raping people. That's a terrible image, but sort of funny in a black comedy way. Okay, but seriously, I just expect Banner to try to not put himself in situations that are at risk of him turning into the Hulk around vulnerable victims. Anger, magic, those are things that can be controlled, with effort, I admit. Dunno about you, but even then, I am still fairly unsympathetic when the character gets careless. It's less toward the character and more toward the author though. I mean, you had to have that kind of developpment? Why?
Sorry, that was an unfair accusation on my part. It's not as if you had no politics, but to me they all seemed pushed to the background in the hopes of including more sex. Things like the sisters' situation, where they'll be helped if they become Silver's sex servants, or the pirates and the sex amnesty. And yeah, I find the plotline about the curse item that makes him hornier to be a poor idea. It may not be the intention, but I can only read it as a way for you to shove as many sexual encounters as possible in the story.
I'm sorry. I do hope my tone is not taken mockingly or sarcastically right now. I'm trying not to, but numbers of the issues I mentioned earlier hit me raw, and the use you make of them really irks me the wrong way. I'm sorry, your writing just hit my buttons too many times in the past, so I just can't think too deep into it anymore.
6179244 Fair enough. I'm not one to be sympathetic to one that gets careless when the end result is THAT, but it is objectively true.
The nobody's happy though... I have to admit, I sort of read Celestia's disapproval only framed against Silver. Like, she's not angry he did it, she's angry he did it after protesting so much when she turned on him with the same spell before.
6179319 As Silver pointed out, he wants out of the bracelet. Ultimately, he's losing most of the lustre about being stud, or sex in general, but he has to do it, and it feels good enough while he's doing it, but it's empty, so empty. Like his meeting with the lunar pegasus, not even worth writing about.
Bottom is just a plain tragedy, and Silver feels awful, because that was entirely his responsibility. He was supposed to guard and nurture Bottom, not be his tool to butcher himself, no matter how much he/she insists she's better for it.
The situation's jacked, and the protag is aware of it, so let's cut him the barest inch of slack and see how he handles things?
6179319 I do notice you keep trying to throw it into my court, but I don't write that way, nor ever have. I let characters run wild in my mind. I didn't even know the Bottom thing was happening until Silver staggered around on the deck and Bottom approached, then I knew what would happen, because I focus on what the characters would do. Bottom is broke, and smart despite it. He saw an opportunity, and he jumped all over it. He used Silver.
Does this make Silver feel any better? Heck no. Does it make me, as an author, feel bad? Why the hell should it. I came here to be loyal to the characters, and the rating's high enough, so they're going to do what they want to do. Even I don't know what the hell is going on for the next chapter.
PS: I have no idea what the second half of Silver's bracelet is, save that it exists, and Oman knows of it.
just to funny. Silver outmaneuvered by Bottom in the end and bottom defiantly picked the perfect time to offer his self to Silver, well it all came out in the end.
ok that was bade even for me.
yep the crew defiantly needs to find the other 1/2 of that dam bracelet.
Wow, Everypony just take a chill pill. Love and Tolerate.
I think first that the author can do whatever one wishes with there story and making personal attacks are never warranted this is fiction after all.
Second, I can see how some might think that if "I" write in a structured and planned way than others must do so as well. However, some individuals simply follow their muse and what happens, happens.
Also, the genre and rating change is a little irksome but is to be expected as the character grows and matures. This story to me is less of a traditional adventure and more of a journal of Silver's life including all of the ups, downs, and all that is in between. No one can ignore adult parts of themselves forever; throw in a cursed object that would make Slaanesh happy and you have the makings for a mature story with hints of tragedy as Silver has to cope and except the reprehensible things that he has done. I look forward to seeing Silver finally give Luna and Celestia what they want.
Also, It would be nice if we got your version on the origin of Luna and Celestia as it would deepen the characters.
6180025 I had assumed they were born that way, or so says the closest canonical bit of lore we could find. One alicorn pair to get the ball rolling, whee! Until Hasbro execs demanded more alicorns be made.
Well ok, minus the Hasbro execs.
6179151 You...really expect anything "normal" or "humane" from this? Really? If you had read the earlier stories, you should know that this story ain't gonna be anything that can be considered normal, and by normal I meant what you expected it to be.
I have already seen signs that show this series ain't gonna be what would be expected from normal stories with normal moral standpoint. And moral itself is subjective to begin with.
What I want to say is you didn't see the signs? You really expect this story to be some goody two shoes story that the moral guardians would approve off?
Seriously, man.
As for the chapter.
Welp. Shit happend. And the situation become more complicate...
And it will get more complicate.
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Well I still think it could be funny if Silver thinks they are lets so between 1-2 thousand and they are actually like 5 thousand and he makes a you are how old comment. Never ask a mare her age and all that. Regardless, how old do you think they are?
Well, it could have been worse, Bottom might not have appeared and a whole other set of issues arisen, but we suppose he did his best to take advantage of the situation and try to create a win-win result, even if it's not actually.
Keep going! ;)
Well didn't see that coming but with all the magic silver was using it was bound to catch up with him. Shit happens...pick up the pieces and be ready for collateral damage. The bangle is messing with silver's head and that is the curse. A good chapter that shows that there is a big problem that has been put off by the group when it should not have been.
On a plus note Bottom is happy and and we won't just have sheI's kid be the only lunar unie with Saddle blood. Could be some lanky kids running around Fort de la Friendship or what ever Twi's castle is called.
There are two spaces between "deck" and "before."
Such "judgments."
her timely "orders" cut off "further" questions.
This isn't an error, per se, but where did Bright Eyes hear that name? I don't recall anypony telling it to her nor saying it within earshot of her.
6181470 Typos fixed, and found an extra as a bonus. Not every word that every character ever speaks is shared. The comment implies that she heard it, which was the intention.
6179151 Allow me to deconstruct your deconstruction. I'm going to quote and respond to what I feel are the most salient points of your rant:
Let's put this into a practical context, namely that there is no psychological help available. I don't just mean that he's on a royal vessel that's in the pony equivalent of the Middle East, but rather that there's a strong case to be made that psychology/psychiatry simply doesn't exist on Equestria the way it does on Earth. So right away, it feels like you're indicting the story for not having something that by all rights shouldn't be there to begin with.
You're treading a very, very thin line here. Saying that someone is in need of counseling is one thing, but you're coming dangerously close to saying that nothing Bottom says or does should be given the same level of consideration that someone else would receive, simply because he's "damaged." You can't repair someone's fractured sense of self if you keep treating them as being deficient with regards to what they say or do.
What you're saying here is that this story isn't treating that particular idea with the level of due consideration that you, personally, feel it deserves (leaving out the idea that local considerations within the context of the story may also mean that those considerations aren't valid from an in-character point of view). Okay, but I don't see why someone else's fiction needs to live up to your personal standards.
Yeah. That's because the author of a work of fiction is under no moral imperative to treat the issue as an opportunity to encourage positive social change in real-world society. This part of the story, like every part of the story, needs to do nothing except act in service to the narrative as the author decides.
Then I'd say that you need to watch more shows, if only because you don't seem to recognize that media can have purposes besides touting a moral lesson.
You do, in fact, sound like a Social Justice Warrior, and this sentence cements that, because you actually seem to be resentful toward the author for how you sound here...as though he's to blame for what you've written in response to his work. If you don't like how you sound here, then you should go back and examine what you're saying and why you're saying it. He's not "making" you sound like anything; you're choosing to sound like that.
One of the central aspects of a "SJW" - at least as I understand it - is that they purport that fiction "should" conduct itself under the same moral scrutiny as real actions done by real people in the real world, e.g. that we hold that an act of non-consentual sex in a story to be as immoral and worthy of social reprobation as we would one that actually happened in the real world...apparently under the idea that the mere depiction of such a thing is harmful to actual people (either in terms of traumatizing them, or of reinforcing harmful social norms).
Needless to say, I disagree with this, completely and utterly. The nature of fiction is that it's not real, and so cannot and should not be judged under the same methods that we judge things that happen in the real world. Even if some people find something so shocking and distasteful that they claim that reading/hearing/watching it "traumatized" them - whether because of how badly it offended them or because it caused some sort of flashback - that's still not a compelling enough reason to repudiate a given work's right to exist. Nor is the idea of "reinforcing pernicious values" an argument I find compelling, since it presumes that people are empty vessels waiting to be filled with whatever message is - apparently flawlessly - transmitted to them.
In short, if you don't like that you're coming across as an SJW, then turn your resentment where it deserves to be pointed: at yourself.
This is more of the same ranting, apparently under the presumption that the story is somehow giving you a look into the author's moral character, either in terms of his presumptions going into the story, or that he'd allow something this "immoral" into the public sphere. These "implications" are entirely yours, and not something that the story necessarily introduces (and that's leaving aside that conflicts are the basis of drama, which is usually a good thing for a work of fiction to have).
Yes, and somehow that doesn't seem to meet with your approval either. Okay, no particular work is going to be something that everyone enjoys, but for you to label the story "shameless" and "self-indulgent" seems to suggest that you think there's something inherently "wrong" with this kind of story. That's your problem, and not something inherently bad about the work itself.
If you want a break, stop reading it. The story doesn't owe you anything.
Yes, there's a lot of sex going on here, and yes, it's in terms of the main male character taking many, many females to bed. In other words, it's a heterosexual male fantasy - why is that bad? Seriously, you seem to dislike that a work of fantasy should actually cater to sexual fantasy - or at least that kind of sexual fantasy - in any regard. There's nothing shameful nor embarrassing about having such fantasies, so long as they're expressed in the proper venue, which is exactly what this story is.
Now this is a critique that I can understand, and even sympathize with somewhat. If you're saying that the sex is crowding out the other aspects of the story, that's critique of what's actually here, rather than of it not meeting your personal standards, and so can be discussed in greater depth...though given that this is an offhanded point raised only at the end of your rant, that's something of a shame.
6181521 Things with Bottom come to a climax (pun intended) in this chapter, as Silver finally mounts the needy stallion, only to turn him into a her...at Bottom's request, no less! This is the sort of sex-and-drama that the story is clearly at its most comfortable at, and it showed here.
The major takeaway from this chapter is Bottom's sex change. In this case, the parallels between what happened here and Silver's own male-to-female transformation serve to highlight the differences, namely that this was not only something Bottom wanted, but that it was entirely his idea in the first place (though I suspect he never would have thought of it had Silver not gently inquired earlier). To be fair, Bottom's impetus here was that he wanted to find Silver's romantic acceptance, rather than having any issues with his sex not matching his gender identity, but given that that reason seems to work for him (now her), I don't really see this as being an issue. Bottom never seemed to have much attachment to the concept of "male" in any regard, largely taking it for granted, so I honestly don't foresee him having any issues with being female now.
There is also the uncomfortable fact that Bottom is used to taking unpleasantness for granted as being part of the status quo, but whether that means he was unhappy and didn't know it as a male, or will be unhappy and not know it as a female, or both, or neither, isn't really something anyone can determine. At the end of the day, Bottom made his own choice of his own initiative, and is the only one that can judge whether or not it was worthwhile. Given how happy he (now she) seems to be, there's really no reason to doubt the legitimacy of her satisfaction. That's particularly true for the fact that she's now getting what she wanted most, that being not Silver's friendship, but Silver's affection, both romantically and physically.
Of course, this is rather awkward for Silver, since it makes him feel like a hypocrite, but hopefully Bottom pointing out that this was both voluntary and done by invitation will have taken the wind of out Silver's self-flagellation before he starts in on himself. At the end of the day, I suspect that it'd be worse to reject the degree of agency that Bottom exercised with regards to making this change, at least insofar as building up her sense of initiative is concerned. That, and she'd be hurt terribly if Silver kept pushing her away now, since her ultimate goal was always to be with him. I don't agree with the idea that Bottom used Silver to "butcher" herself into her current form, however. She had a goal in mind, knew what would need to be sacrificed to try and reach it, and judged that that sacrifice was worthwhile. She did take advantage of Silver to help her reach that goal, but beyond that she knew exactly what she was doing, and I'm leery of writing her choices off due to her being "too damaged to be held responsible for her actions."
Moving on from that, I'm rather surprised to hear that there's a single, male "sultan" of Saddle Arabia. I thought that "Magic Duel" told us that the country had a king and a queen both. Has something changed since then?
Also, I have to admit I smirked when Silver's aggressive attempts to mount Bright sent her squealing and running off. Maybe that was a bit more of a scare than she deserved, but it was the first time since he initially impregnated her that Silver really put her in her place. A big heavy-hoofed, perhaps, but at least it's a step closer in "mastering" her, as shown by her worrying about him doing it again when they returned to the carpet.
6181571 Eeeeeeh, you're making good points there. Allow me.
Now, the practicality of getting him help is a strong way to start. Admittedly, that does damper the point I was trying to make. However....
Err, I disagree here. This is Equestria, the same place that has X-Rays, hospitals, helicopters, shamanic tooth growth, and Twilight putting Rainbow Dash on a bench to get her to speak of her feelings while taking notes in the typical psychologist pose. This may not prove that they have psychology on our level, but it's certainly not a foreign concept either.
That's taking the line out of context. I was saying that you cannot trust someone with that level of psychological issues to make a life-changing decision on a whim without proper counseling. Essentially, it's not a defense to say 'he'd be happier' if what you do end up aggravating the problems. However, this is less pertinent in the story itself, it seems. Context, practicality and magical influence, you know.
True, but if it doesn't live up to my standards, how am I supposed to enjoy it? Why would I keep reading? At that point in my comment, you're more entering the realm of "why I don't like it". It's poorly phrased, I'll admit. I was rather emotional at the times.
I want to agree with that, but that's two or three people here that told me the author only writes what the characters want to do. He is only in for the ride, he says. At this point, I just want to know which posture is taken. Is he a pantser (writes as it goes in accordance to what feels right) or a planner (writes following a narrative he decided himself)?
That's actually rather debatable. Many schools of thoughts and authors believe that story-telling exists to tell of the real world, in shows of morality or immorality. That might actually lead into my next point. You were saying I find something inherently wrong in the idea that it's shameless and self-indulgent. That would be part of it. If the story can so easily be sidetracked from its serious sides to enter erotica realms, why would I take it seriously? Now, to be fair, it's not erotica itself that is the problem, it's the frequency. I may be exaggerating, but the many situations that always seem to return to Silver having to rut his way into, through or out of a problem really makes me cringe. It's just not interesting, and the longer it goes, the less credibility I give to the story. I'll freely admit that is a prudish attitude. However, it doesn't change the fact that it's gotten to the point when I'm supposed to be rooting for a protagonist cursed to have magic channeled through his genitals in a way that compels him to rape.
Okay, moving on from that digression, the SJW thing. Long story short, you're right. That first line was stupid and overly emotional, I'm the only one responsible of the substance and form of my arguments. Moving it onto the author was a way to shift the blame and plainly wrong. Thank you for the reminder.
Next, that thing about implications. That's everywhere. People will always read implications into a story and many schools of thoughts deny the author's voice on the matter. What is written within the story is all that matters, regardless of the author's wishes. Not going to use that to force my arguments, that's just to inform you (or remind you if you already knew).
Or... this is an argument in favor of pacing his narrative. Looking away from a story for a time and then coming back does not actually change anything I've read before. Him focusing on other matters or giving things a different tone does.
Hum, yes, that's more or less what I said, even if you disapproved just a little earlier. You said it was a matter of morals for me as opposed to this. Granted, the rest of my arguments rested on that, but that was placed at the end for a reason. I do think that the story has too much sex and yes, I think the male fantasy is a bad thing, because it distracts from the interesting parts of worldbuilding.
Again, you're right. However, I believe I owed it to the author to give him the reasons for my downvote. Even if some of the things I said are matters of opinions or biased, they're still reasons why some of his readership may leave (me alone, on this occasion). In the future, I will take better care not to let my personal issues influence the phrasing and sound entitled and self-righteous, but I stand by my decision to comment in the first place.
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Thank you for saying that. Moreover, props to you for keeping the conversation to civil and admitting where you went to far. A lot of people wouldn't be able to do that.
Except for that last one, most of that isn't relevant to the point of how advanced Equestria's mental healthcare is. While it's tempting to take all advancements - even within a given field - as being so interrelated that if some of them are there then the rest must be too, I don't agree with that. Having helicopters, for instance, doesn't mean that they necessarily have psychiatric medicine.
Now to be fair, you're right about that instance in "Lesson Zero" where Twilight acted as a mock-psychologist, and that's a possible point of circumstantial evidence right there. However, the show is so rich with non-diegetic "sight gags" and similar instances of inconsistencies that I'm still very reserved about that particular scene being necessarily indicative of anything. We've seen similar instances that are clearly not meant to be taken literally (e.g. Rarity covering her chest and groin when Discord yanked her dress off, despite going naked all of the time anyway), and other elements of inconsistency (e.g. Rarity carrying around "Tom," a multi-ton rock, albeit with some difficulty, whereas Pinkie Pie - an earth pony, which should make her stronger than Rarity as a generality - almost being crushed to death by a falling rock).
I'm not saying that that mental health as a formal school of medicine doesn't necessarily exist, but rather I'm asserting that there's a higher burden of proof insofar as asserting that it (or anything) could be presumed to exist, at least more than a single sight gag can deliver.
Fair enough, but that seems like a misrepresentation of what we see in this chapter. It's not a matter of "trusting" Bottom to make that decision; Silver is essentially tricked into granting Bottom's wish in a moment of personal weakness. By the time Silver's brain caught up to what he was doing, it had already been done. Moreover, there's no impetus for saying that this is "aggravating the problem," since we haven't seen the fallout (if any) of this decision yet.
In response to the questions you posed here, the answers are "you're not," and "you wouldn't." That may sound harsh, but it's not meant to - rather, it's meant to point out that there's no presumption of enjoyment when you go into a story. You might expect to enjoy it, but that's always a guess (albeit one that can be based around "I liked these similar materials/works from the same author," but still just a guess nonetheless).
There's nothing wrong with having personal opinions about things, nor with sharing those opinions. What I was objecting to was when the line was crossed from "here's what I think about this, and why I think that," to "this work is immoral, and that means that you, the author, are either immoral or ignorant for making it like that (and anyone who enjoys it as it is can thus be called either immoral or ignorant, as well)."
I doubt that's what you intended to write, but at least a portion of your rant came across that way, at least to me and apparently several others as well. It's one thing to say why you didn't like something; it's quite something else to blame the work and its author for being (objectively) "bad."
I think you're drawing an artificial distinction between the two. "The narrative" is not the same thing as "a plot outline, usually predetermined by the author." Rather, it simply means "the sequence of events in the story," regardless of whether those events are plotted out ahead of time or made up by the author as each chapter is written.
I don't mean to sound like I'm picking on you here, but saying "many schools of thought," without saying which schools specifically or including any citations to said schools, is an instance of weasel words.
That said, I strongly disagree with those schools of thought. Maybe there's an argument to be made that storytelling originated for that purpose, or that all stories can be dissected to find some moral component present somewhere (though I'd be leery of that), but saying that storytelling is only useful insofar as telling us morality lessons about the real-world strikes me as self-evidently false.
Why so serious? There are more forms of enjoyment than how seriously a story presents itself. That's leaving aside the fact that erotica can be serious business, in terms of character drama.
I disagree, but only slightly, in that I don't think the political drama and the bedroom antics necessarily have to come at the expense of each other. That said, that is how they've been presented in the story thus far - even so, however, I suspect that you'll influence future chapters far more easily with constructive criticism with regards to how this gap could be bridged, rather than destructive criticism about how one of the story's central aspects is ruining the entire thing.
Weasel words, again.
I feel like you're moving the goalposts here. Your original rant wasn't with regards to future chapters, but with regards to this one, and the ones that have come before. That's why I prefer to couch my feedback in terms of how what has happened in a chapter could affect things down the line, as well as how I hope it does.
I'm not sure that you need to "stand by" your decision to comment in the first place, since I'm not sure that anyone is saying you shouldn't have done that, or at least, I'm certainly not. That said, I'm sure the author knows why some of this readership may leave, since everything you said boils down to the truism that you can't please everyone all of the time. That's to be expected, and it's perfectly fine so long as those who don't like something don't turn around and attack it.
Yup. Called it. Though I probably should have predicted that other thing too.
6456550 Are my stories so predictable?
6456903 well, after six or seven of them, there are certain tropes that observant readers will pick up on. It took me a while, but i think you have a thing against typos.
6777518 You are quite correct. It has been a while since he wrote these but I, editor-pony, still send him reports of typos and, amazingly, he actually fixes them. It is good knowing my prey are defeated.
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I see all the arguing and can't help but wonder how far the bangle's influence actually extends. All the information on it so far has been hearsay. One of the previously-stated legends even said something along the lines of "the first guy to wear it turned into a sex-crazed loony and that's what ruined his life."
How much volition did Silver truly have once the bangle was allowed such strong hooks into his head?
What're the chances that this ancient, highly magical bangle, which is known for its sexually-based properties, is capable of turning anyone being fucked into a "proper receptacle," especially when provided a suitably strong power source?
Does anyone want to run some trials to see what this thing can truly do?
I'm guessing not. It's too dangerous a thing to volunteer for.
Thought of this video.
https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=FUW0YDMWfRQ