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I hope this doesn't turn into an escort quest oO
You said you wanted a fanfare, well here it is.
6167248 You and me both, pal.
So that's were the old man with the Hellraiser cube was hanging out!
He'd be "irredeemably" corrupt.
That latter part should be "but he hoped."
ok this just turned it to a hole new story. a second part to that dam bangle, at lest there is a little hope.
What will Tia think of this new pony? And bottom finally got his game.
silver you find some of the stranger ponies.
6168037 The games saleshorse seemed entirely legit. We should hang out with him more often.
6168049 agreed and maybe pick up another one.
would he happen to have risk or wasteland?
One more typo:
There's no need to capitalize "Jail."
And so a new pony joins the party. This chapter was dedicated entirely to Oman the Elder, and I have to say, it's been quite a while since I found a character as unlikeable as he is. Seriously, everything in this exchange irritated me, to the point where after just one chapter I've come to loathe this guy quite thoroughly.
The reason for that lies with how Oman treated Silver and Bottom here; or rather, it lies with the overwhelming arrogance that fueled how he treated them. The sheer audacity of his presumptuousness, the complete and utter gall that he had to ensorcel and interrogate the two of them, was utterly beyond belief. Who the fuck does this guy think he is, calling Silver out just for being different, using magic to force him and Bottom to answer his battery of questions, and then just appoint himself as accompanying them?!
This is exactly the kind of self-righteous arrogance that made Celestia so unpleasant during her first few encounters with Silver, multiplied by a hundred. This guy has appointed himself the inquisitor of anything that happens to look like a pony but isn't and the arbiter of what makes someone a good person or not, and he's using those reasons to justify using invasive magic to compel people to answer his questions (not to mention endure his company until he apparently sees fit to let them go about unaccompanied).
I can't even begin to describe just how irritating I find that. Silver has worked very hard for a very long time - and suffered a great deal - to get where he is. We, the readers, have watched him earn his current place via his trials and tribulations, making mistakes and bad decisions and learning from them as he tried to figure out what the right thing was and then do it. He's been on, in other words, a hero's journey. But this guy...this guy basically steps in, bitch-slaps Silver around, and says "I think you're a fuck-up, but you seem to be doing suspiciously well, so I'm gonna hang around long enough to make sure you live up to my standards."
There's also the fact that this entire encounter was brought about by happenstance, which strains disbelief, and in doing so strains the narrative altogether. Silver just so happens to go out into the market and stumble across an old sage who knows all about the cursed bangle Silver is wearing? Coincidence that convenient comes across as contrived.
The worst part about all of this is that both problems could have been solved at the same time if this encounter had been framed differently. If the king and queen of Saddle Arabia had told Silver to go consult an cantankerous old sage that knew about all sorts of arcana, for example, then it would have made sense for Oman to be introduced into the story. Moreover, had Silver been warned that Oman was an irascible old sage that had mysterious magic, it would have been more acceptable for him to interrogate and judge Silver like that, since Silver's knowing what he's like and going there voluntarily would have been an implicit acceptance of that treatment, rather than Silver getting utterly owned outright by it.
So yeah...not a fan of this particular twist.
I'm rather surprised and perhaps a little pleased at how well Silver kept his cool while being... pony-handled(?) like that. Certainly it seems he's learning priorities, but still very accepting of the weirdness of our little Archmage.
Hopefully this rude dick will prove worthwhile, his claims of familiarity to the artifact throw a lot of red flags up in the air, considering its apparent age.
Keep going! ;)
6168632 I didn't know where to start, so I wrote a chapter instead. I feel annoyed that the guy apparently took -all- consideration away from everything else. The rest is explained in the next chapter, I hope.
6169121 O man it's Oman the Elder, hooray another OC. Hang on a minute O...man...old...man....MAN!!! The plot thickens.
6168632 Think you're being a little harsh on the old geezer. If you saw the only Alicorn prince in this world walk past & saw what was an alien aura in him wouldn't you want to step in mess with it a bit. I'm getting the whole Yoda vibe off this guy so leave him be, reckon he'll get interesting yet.
6167741 A"hole" new story...really? did you just say that?
I felt something off about this chapter and had to come back after mulling it over.
This shows a lot more self-awareness than I think most anyone could muster, much less a timid stallion with a lifetime of abuse. It shows that Bottom knows exactly what sort of changes Silver is trying to make. It also shows that Bottom knows he's not changing to be the pony Silver wants, and that Bottom likely has some idea why he hasn't changed yet, despite his master's desires. To me, this flies in the face of Bottom's overwhelming desire to be whatever he thinks his current master wants him to be, if only to spare himself further pain.
I would have expected confusion (perhaps subconsciously-inflicted): "He keeps pushing me in ways no pony else ever has, so I don't know what he really wants from me!"
Or maybe complete disbelief: "He keeps saying things, but they can't be right! They've never been right before!"
Or even more likely, a combination of the two.
And with this, in his desire to be whatever Silver wants he'll try, and he'll honestly try very hard, but a lifetime of knowing nothing other than what he's been, should mean he'll likely be trying in entirely wrong directions. Bottom's done such a good job of degrading himself to survive, that it should take a lot more than a few days of words to convince him, much less his subconscious, that there's anything more to himself. So I feel this statement was premature. And maybe a bit unrealistic, given its content.
This laughter from bronymonster44 was the same laugh I just made.
6:01
Hey!