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Happinesssssssss
after reading this chapter I have one thought.
Silver is back and in a vary good way.
this chapter is showing just how much Silver has grown, he has so much more wisdom, life has torn him down and rebuilt him and he is much better for it.
Silver is not longer afraid.
exultant work David Silver.
Harts Fire
Should be Fast Change
6462614 Fixed! What did you think?
Change
6462648 Fixed, take 2! What'd you think?
I saw this was updated twice and was like "oh it didn't end?" (Not that I'm complaining I have more of this to read...
6462854 The words cannot be stopped when they wish to emerge.
Ooh, Rough is certainly going to have a few tumbles with Nefertari...
Keep going! ;)
6462624
Well to be perfectly candid. I found this chapter to be rather non-sequitur. We were just reading about an adventure and now a sudden interlude with sex. Also, I think Twilight and Night are well overdo for some stallion time too. Also, I am curious about Luna's and Twilight's reactions to Silver's discovery about Celestia's origins. I guess it would be good if you could add how much time progressed between chapters. For example, I am unsure how long Silver has even been in Equestria, and how long each of the given stages of his life to this point took.
I don't really like the "you're either brave or stupid," line anymore it was fine the first hundred times i heard it. (yes i read that many fanfics... stfu I get bored) But it has become awkward whenever I hear it so now I try to ignore it.
pls don't hurt me it's just an opinion
That sentence is slightly ambiguous with regards to who "he" is. It's not a big deal, but I'd change it to "Silver took a step towards Rough, who shrank backwards."
Capitalize the first letter of the first word of the sentence.
Don't capitalize "Fifty."
Also, this is 95% altogether. I thought Night never went above 90%, with the last 10% always being "anything could happen."
"Afterimage" is a compound word.
All he "knew" how to do.
Both instances of "broke" should be "broken."
Same thing, here.
Don't capitalize "Destiny" there.
6474654 Typos banished to the moon.
6474665 Freakin' booyah! FINALLY, Rough Tumble is getting his due, without things going sideways!
In all honesty, I'm not sure that any future clop is all that necessary, because THIS is really the payout that Rumble, as a character, deserves. It's not so much about sex as it is open and honest, loving acknowledgment. Given that Silver has always had a very strong "primacy of love" angle to him, this chapter went right to the core of that. This was a very long time in coming, but it was done very well. Quite honestly, this could have been twice the length that it was and still been succinct in terms of showcasing Tumble's relief that he is, at long last, getting what he's wanted for so long. He and Silver deserve to have a nice long scene of the two of them figuring out what they mean to each other (and that's not a euphemism).
I have to add that his interaction with Nefertari was also incredibly well-done. While it could be seen as a repudiation of his training with Night Watch, since that amounted to nothing before Nefertari's power, I found that to be a very smart acknowledgment of the sheer difference in strength between them. My take on that is that Night Watch's training is more about providing a firm base, upon which further development can be built.
But that's all background - the real treat was that this further showcased Tumble's character in how maturely he handled such a stunning defeat. Given how angry he was at the perceived repudiation of Silver's declaring his worth, I expected him to do something stupid and lash out at Nefertari more. But instead, he took the high road and, as Night Watch said, beat the odds. To me, this makes total sense for his character, since Tumble has endured a horrific amount of discrimination and outright abuse, but it's never truly broken him. Hence why Nefertari's teasing wasn't enough to goad him into doing something stupid here - he's been through that particular wringer before, and it's never been enough to push him over the edge. In a way, he's even more of a rock than Night Watch is; while he hasn't weathered it quite as well as she has, he's been through so much more for so much longer, and yet he never gave up.
It was also smart of Twilight to remind Silver that he can't just throw away public perception simply because he doesn't agree with it. While Silver wasn't necessarily wrong, per se, to suggest that discrimination isn't a view that deserves his respect (e.g. his consideration), it's also important for him to pick and choose his battles. Twilight's advice was that he do this smart, rather than throw himself against the popular sentiment willy-nilly. It's the sort of opinion I can see her cautioning; that might seem to fly in the face of her role as the Princess of Friendship, but that's different from love (which makes me wonder what the popular opinion of colt cuddlers is in the Crystal Empire).
As for the end...oh Fast, you just had to barge in on their romantic moment, didn't you? Oh well, I doubt they're going to be complaining in a few minutes...
6478130 Rough totally deserved this, and he's grown, a lot. He is a pony quietly obeying his own arc, hidden in the shadows of Silver through the many stories. While Silver was busy lamenting big things, Rough was trying to just get his own things in order, and it was a terrific struggle. Rough Tumble, we salute you.
Never change, Fast Change... She was not going to sit this one out.
Last person to realise this story was back on and drop in to comment! Yay? Well there's more Silver Stars, so yeah, yay!
6490951 The story refused to stay dead!
Yeah story's back on and I'm way behind.
6509503 Welcome back!
*Face palms*
My reaction *pounds face*
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So the next piece of his bling is in outer space . . . This seems appropriate to leave here