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A grate chapter! keep up the good work you are doing.
Dragonfox
Twilight truly wishes to do the deed.
Gods help her, and may the universe be kind in her eventual annihilation either it be immediate as a price to pay for her transgressions, and not be long term as it removes her like a pestilence that threatens to undo what has been set in stone for eons.
The soul has never been made to come and go as much as it has. I wouldn't be surprised if her punishment would be as cruel as Silver not remembering them and possibly being altered in a way to shame them for what they had just done.
Missed an r and the end of Silver in the third paragraph.
The typos have risen!
On another note, nice work so far. This story is pretty impressive in how long you've dedicated yourself to it.
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6526688 Fixed, and thanks for sticking with the story. At least gauging from the negative votes, some are still very put off by Silver's unfortunate event.
There are two spaces between "mare" and "for."
There are two spaces between "phrasing" and "had."
There are two spaces between "felt" and "understanding."
Should this be in the present tense? "Choose" and not "chose"?
"Bugbear" is one word.
An "abruptly-present" hole.
There are two spaces between "Night" and "turned."
6527320 At least the words are right, if so much else is wrong.
Well at least he's fighting back now. Strength from within, and strength from without!
Keep going! ;)
I wonder if Silver could come back as an Alicorn stallion of the day instead of the night.
6527869 Not outside the realm of possibility, but should he? I somehow doubt the ponies involved think about 'should' much right now.
The plot thickens!
I'd be a hella interesting if Silver went back to life and the universe - in its anger - sends many enemies after him. Also, ponies form groups to destroy 'the one who crashed the universe'...
Heheheh...
6527331 This time around, we see how things are going for Silver over on the other side. This part caught me slightly off-guard, because it left me feeling slightly uncertain how much of the activity regarding the presumably-forthcoming resurrection is taking place on Silver's end versus those of the girls.
The idea of a character engaging in a spiritual "battle for their life" when between life and death is a classic trope, of course, but up until this point (minus a hint from the last chapter) the onus of actuating the return to life has been entirely on the girls' end. The idea that Silver would need to do anything on his/her part in order to make the spell work wasn't there, that I saw, previously. I suspect that this is my prejudice as a tabletop gamer coming through; when somebody wants to use resurrection magic, then (after whatever they have to do to make it work) the target person is resurrected. At most, they can choose not to come back, but the idea that they have to "do their part" to return to life doesn't usually factor into it.
Leaving that aside, the depiction of Silver's struggle to return to life was well-done. Having Silver examine the different bodies that he'd occupied would normally have felt rather odd, since despite his myriad forms Silver has always been Silver, but the story wisely used them as shorthand for the question of identity, with the underlying premise that the difference between life and death is that the former requires identity (that is, a sense of self) whereas the latter is the end of consciousness (and thus, individuality). To have Silver examine and reflect on the bodies he's had as different aspects of himself was cogently crafted to get that message across.
That said, this mixed in with a few other things that didn't quite fit the message so clearly, mostly in terms of how many other individuals popped up. For these, the implications were less clear. I can see Luna being there, since her blood went into the spell that is being used to call Silver back; under that circumstance, her appearance is understandable. Even Twilight's appearance is understandable as she's doing the actual casting. But having individuals such as Spike show up...what's the impetus for that? The presumption here is that these are memories, or perhaps wishes, but that doesn't seem to be the case since information that Silver didn't know was there also, specifically in the form of Applejack and Rainbow Dash's conversation about whether or not Silver was a suitable mate (a conversation that Silver wasn't present for, when it happened).
I want to take a moment to say that I did appreciate that conversation being in there, even if I couldn't place its context. The entire idea of Applejack being anxious about Silver studding for them due to his differences, while Rainbow Dash thinking that those differences made him awesome (and thus perfect), pretty much summed things up. It was nice to get a more straightforward take on that again...and hey, maybe if Silver does come back, this will let him give that another try?
I was also very disturbed when Fast Change said "they're" waiting for Silver, rather than "we're." Is her leaving them so total? Or is that a reflection of Silver knowing her so well? Or something else? Either way, I suspect that the next arc after this will be to find Fast and bring her back to them. Despite whatever her grief may tell her, the herd isn't complete without her.
Meanwhile, Twilight and the others are just now realizing that they never nailed down the most important aspect of this entire ritual, which is what to resurrect him as. Kind of a blunder there, Twilight. Better make up your mind fast.
6529980 It was mentioned that they gathered dreams from ponies that knew Silver, which apparently included Spike. The silver motes tossed in there where filled with what other people thought of Silver, which meant some of the things he saw were people's thoughts pointed at him. Some of them were their skewed visions of him. Some were close enough to give rise to his fragments. His humanity, his femininity, his confusion, his determination. None of the people showed were 'there' in real time. They were just snatches of thoughts gathered and thrown in with him, designed to mass as a whole to give Silver a mental base to work with, and this is how it appeared to Silver.
It was a big rowdy mess, but it worked. Silver stopped being background noise and woke up, in a sense.
The only being that was 'there', besides Silver, was The Text.
I hope it makes more sense now.
6529999 Okay, that does put things into better perspective. I wondered if I had overlooked a crucial detail!
Also, I forgot to mention the most important detail finally revealed in that chapter (which we, the audience, have suspected for a while): that The Text is Silver! What the practical ramifications of this are remain to be seen.
Hey look! The story is "incomplete" again!