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should be so there
don't what?
6314874 Fixes applied.
6314917 There was another typo in that first one where it says let their princes remain as she is. Shouldn't that be princess? Or is Celestia secretly a stallion prince?
6314925 She is referring to herself as a princess? I see nothing wrong.
6314933
It is missing an S so instead of Princess singular it says Princes, the plural of Prince. Don't make me pull out the muffin button, I know how to use it.
6314959 Fixed
Delete the "s" in "decks."
With a "carefully-managed" smile.
6328575 Typos addressed.
6329269 This was a slower chapter, but it used that slower pace to its advantage as it addressed circumstances with several of the supporting cast members. This was a wise decision, as it helped to ground things; giving the audience a "this is where we are now" chapter after a series of major events helps to make things feel like they have impact, that the characters are growing and changing in response to what's been going on.
Despite my having said that, this chapter did sort of gloss over how things were with Celestia and Fiddah. In the former case, I can understand where she's coming from in deciding not to tell her subjects about her human origins/transformation. There's no real gain, and at least some potential loss to announcing that their almighty leader has undergone a fundamental change (and, in fact, has always been even more apart from them than they realized). That said, there is a principle argument to be made...though this interpretation of Celestia is pragmatic enough not to be swayed by that alone. That said, this could very well come back to bite her in the flank if the information gets out on its own. If somebody pisses her off so badly that she spontaneously transforms, it could lead to a panic.
With regard to Fiddah, I felt a bit more dissatisfied with how things went...but at the same time, I can't really see how they could have gone elsewhere. Both Silver and Fiddah are maintaining that they have a working relationship, and a physical relationship, but while they do like each other they are not in an emotionally-intimate relationship. Hence, it's hard to see how their interaction would be anything other than what it was; an employer checking in with his trusted secretary.
I suppose I feel slightly disgruntled that the story can't seem to think of much to do with her character if she's not having a love affair with Silver. In fact, I'm pretty sure that's the source of why I find her small presence here unsatisfying. Fiddah - more than any other character - represents the political aspects of this story, and like those aspects she's constantly fighting for screen-time. She, more than anyone, should have been concerned with the socio-political implications of what's going on, from Silver's sponsoring a hundred-fifty Anubians back to his homeland to his human transformation, she should be calculating what should be done about this and why, with regard to the general population.
Politics is outward-looking, concerned with managing not only what is happening, but what will happen. She shouldn't have just nodded her head and said "all is well." Fiddah should have been concerned with the potential ramifications and how the negative fallout could be avoided, and the positive effects maximized. This needn't be impersonal either, as the story could explore what it means to her that she's working in a position of greater responsibility than ever before, with less familiarity and framework than she's used to. But somehow, I doubt we'll see any of that...
Of course, Bottom essentially stole the chapter. We got to see some of her pathos over the idea that she may not get to be a mother, which was nicely understated, but otherwise it focused more on her reconfirming her love for Silver, which was very sweet. She's not just a loving mare, but also a devoted one; moreover, she's apparently growing enough that she's not making this love for him the sum total of her existence, whether it's learning magic (on a side-note: did Oman just leave without a word? This story is bad about having characters depart with no announcement or fanfare) or playing darts. That really makes her a romantic character, to my mind. It's nice to see her and Silver having such a good relationship.
Of course, the big announcement here was Silver's admitting that he was going to try having a relationship with Tumble! FINALLY! While I think that the way that came up in the conversation felt rather forced (by this time, I'm completely thinking of Bottom as female, so it felt odd that Silver apparently still views her as a stallion on some level), that was a major admission on Silver's part, and a very, very long-overdue one. He may not be comfortable taking it (yet), but other than that he's willing to at least give Tumble a fair chance, which is what the other stallion deserves. I really hope that they can make it work! Yay! (Though I'm not sure what was up with Bottom looking crafty and Silver assuring her that Tumble wasn't a threat. Seriously, what was that? Bottom knows that Silver is sleeping around with a large number of other mares, but one stallion makes her jealous?)
Finally, we come to Shei. I had slightly mixed feelings about her presentation here. The development she's having felt very spot-on with regard to her character; feeling helpless while her beloved sister (who still needs to be buried when they get back) makes her decision to go into healing magic feel very organic. The problem is that, at this point, we don't have much in the way of material to appreciate the practical ramifications of that decision, since we've seen so little of what Saddle Arabian magic is like. The story has done a surprisingly good job of explaining how Equestrian magic (particularly for alicorns) works, but there's been far less of that for the magic of Saddle Arabian ponies. There doesn't need to be a lot of exposition in this regard, but we need at least a little more to put Shei's development in this field into some sort of context.
That's for later though. For now, let's take one last stroll through Anugypt, shall we?
6332293 I'm not entirely sure how to approach much of this. Could Fiddah speak out on the political nature of everything she sees? Sure? I suppose? It's not really her job to, nor have her and Silver grown that familiar with each other, which takes time, to offer unsolicited advice on this matter which has nothing to do with romance and wives, which is what whe is there for.
We don't know much about Shei's magic? Neither does Silver. He looks forward to learning more, and so do we. He's doing a bangup job of expressing our feelings on the matter.
Silver was away for a while, living with the Anubians, why would that grumpy stallion stick around? He did his job. Bye.
6332351 I may be over-emphasizing Fiddah's political role in the story, but if I am it's only because I'm keenly aware of how that angle keeps being minimized, if not ignored. Notwithstanding Celestia, she's the only one would has any standing to look at things in that manner, even if that would be beyond her usual duties as a harem-manager.
Silver didn't need to be there for the story to at least put some emphasis on the departure of Oman's character. It could have come up in conversation, and subsequently in his thoughts, etc. Ignoring narrative aspects of the story isn't justified by saying that the main character wasn't there for it.
6314917
queue the other shoe for dropping.
I had this in my head for a few chapters. I think he should have made it rain over those hostile cats.