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Aliens invade, will there be a probe ? Probish hijinks are almost expected in this universe .
Ah, so the "text" is really an alien invader.
I have to say a nice start to a action seen. It well be fun to see how this plays out. Keep up the good work you are doing.
Dragonfox
6505517 You're the first person to reply to that, yay!
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Perhaps Twilight and the aliens can compare probes?
I think I'm seeing double with this chapter name.
not really sure ware this came from but wow it's a dozy. and a super good chapter 100.
it sounds like the action is going to be in ponyville now.
Harts Fire
He glanced down to see "that" several of the fires looked under control.
There are two spaces between "platform" and "and."
6505718 All fixed!
6505731 ...and then the aliens attacked. Seriously.
So this development came entirely out of left field (notwithstanding Twilight's foreshadowing earlier that the next piece of Silver's regalia was on another planet). I'm honestly not sure what to make of this, save for my initial impression that this follows a lot of pulp era-style alien invasions, with saucers that rain death rays and release a secondary air force to shoot down local resistance. The big question, at this point, is what these aliens are and what their motivation is. Presumably they have some goal besides setting tall buildings on fire.
This also brings the question of scope into the equation. An invasion, like anything that occurs at the macro level, has a political dimension. Are these guys confining their attack to Ponyville? Or is all of Equestria being invaded? Questions like this matter, because it affects the scope of the response. If Canterlot has its own problems to deal with, then there's probably not going to be much help incoming; if only Ponyville is under siege, then I'm going to be surprised if we don't see a swift (and terrible) response from Celestia and Luna. The question of "where are the power-players?" is going to need to be addressed at some point, though not necessarily immediately.
That said, the fight scene was written quite well, though I found it a bit too truncated due to the author's self-imposed two thousand word-limit. This fic is written in a style that places the vast majority of its focus on what's physically happening, and while I feel that has more weaknesses than advantages, a fight scene is where that kind of descriptive style is at its strongest. I did frown a little at the description of the particular attacks the ponies themselves use, but I freely admit that this was me bringing my own biases to the table - the source material is light on combat to adventure to begin with, and that's especially true for combat. Within the parameters this fic has set for itself, everything fit; I just wonder if it "really" would work like that (as ridiculous as that is).
Also, it seems like that last scene has them flying down a shaft with a ladder, but the description right before that makes it sound like they went up into the flying saucer (or whatever it was), presumably from beneath. That part was a bit confusing.
Ah well, let's see if there are little green ponies ahead!
6505843 I'm not sure how much more foreshadowing I could do, with that ominious line about 'it not forgetting them'. It was on the way, and the story never forgot about that.
I'm not sure why you felt the need to snipe at my not screaming people's emotions loudly enough when several emotions were touched upon, and not terribly subtly.
You, like most others, have pointed and cried 'Alien invasion!' though we haven't seen any evidence of an invasion beside it being something beyond their ken. To say 'the big players better show up soon!' feels disengenious to the source. Celestia was attending a wedding in the town as the Bug bear attacked and lifted not one hoof to help. If Twilight can handle it, she has a proven track record of leaving it to Twilight. So far, Twilight and some friends are handling it. The heat rays have stopped.
Is it happening elsewhere? Dunno. So far, only one big silver object was ever spotted.
I'm not sure where 'up into the ship' was ever mentioned besides 'up towards the ship' and then 'platform opened on its side', nor was it ever assured it was one big straight line. Silver wasn't that helpful, losing all track of where he's going, poor guy.
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My "sniping" was with regards to this story overall, not just this chapter.
To be fair, my take on that particular incident was that Celestia didn't arrive until just when the fight against the Bugbear was concluding; hence why we don't see her until the actual ceremony, when it's been defeated. It's also worth remembering that she did try and help every single other time there was a huge attack, unless she was deliberately waylaid or had already determined that she was powerless to help (the issue with Nightmare Moon remains uncertain).
Heck, even when the ice-cloud was crashing down on the Equestria Games, she was one of the ponies in the background that was flying in to help.
I was honestly not expecting this... Not bad, but total surprise.
Well that happened sooner than expected. How the blazes is he going to wear a spaceship?!?
Keep going! ;)
I'm almost certain you meant LIVED
6690872 Behold the difference of one letter! Fixed, thanks!
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6942955 So many typos, destroyed!
She's going to kill herself with such attitude.