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I wonder are you simply trying to kill Silver again; just in a more palatable way? Crazy zealots. Also what of the other humans and post-humans in this universe? Are they in danger of torture and assassination as well?
6618798 I thought Silver handled herself quite elegantly. Didn't like it?
6618828 No, I did like it. I was not wondering about the character of Silver. I was wondering about your machinations in unleashing this cult of zealots on her.
6618828 Well, she handled herself better than before but not quite the level of battle harden alicorn princess that these traitors should fear and worship.
6619116 But would that be Silver?
6619142 Yes. Yes in fact it is, I believe. Is it a side of Silver the the prince is comfortable with, obviously not. But Silver is a monster capable of cursing entire nations and bending entire governments to suit his sex life. Silver is in every way the Rasputin of Equestria (with real-assed dark sorcery that would give even the most mythical human Rasputin pause).
Hmm, the infiltration is more deeply seated than we thought.
Keep going! ;)
really attacking silver with cold when her first spell was fire.
come one even I know better then that.
after a quick check to be sure.
this story is now your longest on site.
good work DS
Typo Alert!
Should be 'blocking'?
blacking ring - blocking ring
her conscious - her conscience
I must be a fan, I've started typo hunting!
conscience
Is she even there? Capitalization and probably is Carrot Plate instead.
"Wide-stanced" and available.
There are two spaces between "of" and "her."
There are two spaces between these sentences.
Her deadly "bubble."
Another attack unfolds in this chapter, and it seems like we might be on the verge of having some questions answered.
Most of this chapter was good, but the initial sequence - where some unicorn stallion kidnaps Twilight and Silver - was constructed poorly. I found that part of the story to over-rely on pronouns (specifically "she") which made it difficult to parse which of them was being described. I had to read that particular sequence over several times to be able to adequately follow the action. Moreover, some of the lines simply made no sense. Some unknown, unnamed unicorn stallion barrels into Twilight, and Silver's reaction is to stand there and lecture "don't bully Twilight. She's saved you enough times"? Er, that's a rather subdued reaction. Also, what did she mean by "she's saved you enough times"? I was scratching my head at that line, thinking that this was some sort of reference to Twilight having saved that pony personally; it took a while for it to become clear that Silver meant that Twilight had saved that pony in general, along with all other ponies, during her adventures.
So yeah, the beginning of this story left me cold (pun intended).
Things got much better as the chapter went on. This new enemy (or enemies, since she was working with a stallion) seems exceptionally cruel, torturing Carrot Plate in order to make her act as Silver's torturer. Apparently this cryokinetic pony doesn't realize that extremism in defense of something tends to erode any claim of moral justification you'd care to make. Still, Silver's ability to channel magic in ways other than her horn certainly came in handy here. The fight scene between herself and that mare was done in a much easier-to-read manner. That said, the unknown mare's line about having read about Silver makes me wonder if that's all it was; exactly how much of Silver's exploits have made the newspapers that she'd know about something like the kill-on-contact shield? Still, the idea that all of her knowledge regarding Silver's fighting tactics are gained second-hoof does fit with her not realizing that a horn-blocker would be insufficient.
Hopefully Carrot Plate will pull through. She was an awful pony, but this is far worse than she deserved.
6928533 Typos fixed! I don't think much of her exploits were definitively labeled as unicorn magic or not, so why would anyone, looking in from outside, think she was not using unicorn tricks? Maybe you remember something I don't. I enjoyed writing the chapter though, chilly start or not.
A cruel and violent pony? Celestia should force them to be a mare to blunt their destructive impulses and mellow them out.
Oh, wait...
And Silver? You see what you've done? I'm taking pot shots at Celestia now! My favorite character; the one character who can do no wrong...! I hope you're happy with yourself.
7796996 I am.