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This looks like a good next arc of the story and is precisely where I would have gone next. Keep up the good work.
I am happy that you have continued the story. I do hope to see more soon. don't get me wrong, I am enjoying waves of change and hope to see more of it but this story is the one that got me started on your story's, so keep up the good work you are doing.
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6459621 Aw, thanks for the kind words.
I think it should be are instead of is... BUT if it isn't dont hurt me I don't mean to be a dumbass. It just happens!
potato LOL
Planet, or artificial satelite? Who would stash an artifact like that there anyway?
Seems like Silver is being led again....
Keep going! ;)
6460001 Gaze, for we are beneath a silver sky.
6459850 The typos, they grow! I found another while I was in there.
I am wondering. is this the new ark? or just a teaser to a new story?
there is still 2 more parts of the set to find. ware will Silver and his wives do?
either way if this is truly a come back to this super story Harts Fire is extremely happy.
Harts Fire
Typo located! All editors commence firing!
6460140 !!!! Wow, totally didn't see that coming, pretty much forgot the title of the story, and this made us fall out of the chair!
6460702 Full salvo ready, firing!
6460773 Direct hit! Typo is down, I say again, typo is down!
There are two spaces between these two sentences.
Delete the period after "mare." It's not needed.
I'm pretty sure that Night should be the one gesturing, since Fast isn't there.
This isn't a typo, but this is the first time we're told that she's even there. It's very abrupt, and comes out of nowhere; some lead-in would have helped, even if the issue of her being there is then brought into question.
I'd say that there should be a comma after "softly."
6461345 All fixed! Welcome back to the story. Did you miss it?
6461377 It felt rather disappointing not to have a new chapter to look forward to each day, yes.
6461447 I'd better get writing today's chapter then.
6461460 That wasn't today's chapter? It has today's date.
*Looks at the time of the earliest comments*
Ah, it seems you posted this when it was still yesterday your time, but technically today my time.
6461485 Darn you timezones! To work! I look forward to your thoughts so far.
Sneaky, lying 'complete' tag. Just wanted to get me to lower my guard, eh?!?
Nice that Silver finally got some time with his foals, so cute!
6464222 The Text is devious. Welcome back!
6461493 Okay, I'm forcing myself out of a funk and trying to write something down with regards to how I feel about this chapter.
My impression of what's going on here is a positive one. While new readers won't know it (except to look at the date stamp) this chapter represents a return to this fic after an absence...what was presumed to be a permanent one, since this fic was marked "complete" before that. As such, I look at this chapter much in the same way I would a season premiere (or at least, a mid-season premiere), and in that regard it was well-composed. The reason for that is because this chapter knew to discard the extraneous materials and focus on the core concepts of what this story is about, and where this new arc is going.
In other words, this has Silver focusing on the most important things in his life (his wives and his children) along with a new adventure hook being dangled in front of him. That's exactly how things should be starting off. That's not to say that I don't want to see the other issues surrounding him get their due, but putting those on the back-burner was the right decision, at least for now.
Insofar as the children go, I'm of two minds about them. The problem with children is that they fly in the face of adventuring. Even if pony children are much more cognizant at a young age than humans are, it's not like they can be brought along on any sort of dangerous mission. Logistically, this isn't too big of a deal; as a prince, married to a princess (or rather, all of the princesses), finding suitable daycare will not be an issue. Rather, the issue is that these are a big change to Silver's life that simply can't be a part of any adventure that he goes on, which presents some awkwardness. There's a reason why most stories where the protagonist has a child tends to either end with their child's birth, begin after their child is already grown, or have a time-skip over the child's formative years.
Beyond that, I'm a bit surprised that Silver is going to another planet to find the remaining pieces of his set of artifacts. That's mostly because the cosmology of Equestria is such an open question, though I suppose for those more creatively-minded than I, that's a plus. Still, I'm a bit nervous about the story shifting so quickly to another exotic locale...we just had a "grand tour" multi-arc. Sitting down for some slice-of-life goodness would not be a bad idea right about now.
Insofar as the characters themselves go, Nefertari continues to rock the story with her sheer level of charisma. I honestly can't stop enjoying her self-confident "I do what I do, regardless of how others feel about it" attitude. Were she more arrogant, pushy, or otherwise forcing her nose into other ponies' business, she'd come off as irritating, but she never pushes it that far. Instead, she simply stays true to herself regardless of how anypony else feels about it, and it's such a great contrast with the rest of the cast.
Beyond that, I'm kind of hoping that we get some one-on-one time with the other girls. They're overdue for it, especially since it seemed like Silver left a lot of loose ends. How is Night Watch feeling about remaining in Ponyville now that she's given birth and is back to her usual "I want to make a difference" self? And of course, we need to have scenes of the rest of the newbies (e.g. Bottom, Shei, etc.) fitting in with everyone else.
Still, a strong start to the new arc.
6474614 Welcome back! I might prove to be a horrible tease in this, but I'm glad I hit the right note for getting things going.
I'm a bit of a tourist, as a writer, and sometimes things get derailed, perhaps too easily? I'll let you decide that!
As for the kids, yes, this is a very real problem, and is part of the story. Wanting to be a good parent and still being called on to be the heroes of the nation, repeatedly, both Silver and Twilight can feel that pressure. They have each other, at least? :)
Great to hear from you! The story isn't the same without your input.
6474647 Thanks for the kind words. That said, the notifications of responses to comments is being very intermittent with me all of a sudden, otherwise I'd have responded sooner.
Help out a new reader a bit, please? This feels like the point where I should turn back to "The Silver Stars", at least for a while? Or should I just read on and finish this story?
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I put author notes when proper.
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Thanks. The story to story relation can get a bit confusing with this series. Still, I'm enjoying it immensely ^^'
Haha I didn’t expect that!!
*face palms* clahaha
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Tahuha ha ha