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I am happy to see a new chapter and yes you are a busy boy. Keep up the good work.
Dragonfox
6612620 How'd you like it?
6612623
I am enjoying the story very much. I do like how silver is handling himself with Luna and that noble mare. What Noble Mare did was so wrong at so many level. If She had try this on Prince Armor or Princess Celestia She wood be in trouble. She must be after something more then a fling. She is lucky that Silver is so forgiving or she mite have fond herself in prison.
Dragonfox
6612688 She needed a kind word and genuine care. We could all use some of that.
Making copies...
Haha, Silver sends Twilight tumbling out of expectations! We think she'll come around pretty quick though...
Keep going! ;)
this chapter gives us all some things to think about.
will Twilight grant Silver her wish?
will Silver ever become a mother? (carry the chilled in her own body and give birth her self)
will Silvers plan work, Will even Luna have enough magic power to quicken the utters of a alicorn?
will Twilight see the error of her ways with Discord?
Will ponyville accept Discords apology?
and many more.
will David Silver ever have a bade chapter? buck no.
Harts Fire
I do loves me some discord cameos. Possible episode tie-in, check (Discord's not-evil reason for encouraging the others not invite Twilight for their weekend outing). There might be one teensy little typo to point out....
Silver Stars could not possibly have seen that eppisode, because he was in Canterlot when Tyrek attacked.
Sorry. Just trying to be helpful.
6613425 You forget, and I forgive you, this series is darn long, but Silver appeared in the 'past'. When he first showed up in Manehatten, he was shocked and worried to see Rarity doing her 'Generosity!' song. He knew 'the future' all the way up to Tirek's attack, which is where his knowledge ended.
6613433 You're right. I'm double sorry. Bad enough to throw cannon at the author, worse to be wrong about it. Now that you mention it I remember it coming up when he noticed Season 5 eppisode stuff happening around him and realized time had caught up to him. I'm an idiot?
ones
Capitalize the title. The "Stud of the Land."
Put a hyphen in "cat-sized."
Don't capitalize the "m" in "Magic."
She seemed "middle-aged" and portly.
A "cosmically-tied" alicorn.
A bit of a filler chapter, this one seems to bounce around several minor points before dinner.
I'm not sure I understood the point of Silver egging Luna's guards on like that. No matter how I read it, that really seems like she was toying with them, and for the life of me I can't figure out what her motivation for doing so was, nor what she was trying to accomplish. It honestly did seem like she was trying to seduce them at first, but beyond that...what? Was she trying to send them as a "present" to Luna? Was she just messing with them? Was she hoping to, in a roundabout way, get some "punishment" from Luna if those two failed? The entire exchange left me confused.
The bit with Discord was nice, but brief. So Discord still feels a bit guilty about helping Tirek...isn't that kind of over and done with already? At this point I'd have thought it had more to do with his whole "have fun with all of the Mane Six except Twilight" scheme than with Tirek, since the latter incident seems like it's reaching back a little (especially for this fic). I have similar feelings about Silver's encounter with that one-off mare that tried to seduce him a long, long time ago. It was nice to see that loose end get wrapped up, but she was such a minor character that I'm amazed she warranted a second appearance.
Finally, what's up with Twilight suddenly acting so dominant/possessive? She's really keeping close to Silver lately, and there's no clear motivation for it that I can tell. Presumably it's residual nervousness about all Silver's been through recently (e.g. dying, and all that), but it still seems notable for how overbearing she's suddenly become. It was amusing to see her immediately presume that Silver meant breeding Luna with Celestia, though. Talk about putting your sister to the test...
6922653 I don't think Twilight is off base for being cautious, all things considered. She's being defensive in a rather odd time of things.
You're thinking way too deeply into Silver's part in this. I think it'll clear up as you go though!
6922664 Overthinking? Me? Surely you jest!
6922693 I know, I know! It's kind of far fetched...
here (or was that a another Freudian?)
He does not only cause typos, but he is a typo! A living one. I mean you can discard character prototypes as typos only so long until their total mass will start gravitate typos to the pile and when you discord the next one... Ah, and here he is!