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In the end they cause the turkies to declare war on Equestria and when Twilight hears about it things go even worse as the yaks do the same.
Bottom softly "bit" at one.
It was a "counterattack" against a spell he had no business casting.
6212521 Fixed! Thankee.
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It just occurred to me, but wouldn't that be "gelding" rather than "eunuch"?
6212800 Fixed!
6212811 Oh Fiddah, Silver may not be falling for you, but I certainly am.
Seriously though, her character is such a breath of fresh air! She's motivated by her head, rather than her heart (or her loins), and is insistent to putting her knowledge to good use on Silver's behalf. I can already tell that she's going to be good for him, and I suspect that I know why: by now Fiddah has figured out that not only is Silver unused to dealing with servants, he doesn't have any aside from his concubines. That's important, because it means that he doesn't have anypony that's managing his general affairs (no pun intended).
To put it another way, Fiddah has likely realized that Silver needs a chamberlain (or perhaps a seneschal), and that she's the only one who can step in and fulfill that role. As such, she's stepping up. For the moment, she's doing what she knows best and managing his harem girls - and doing a bang-up job of it too, considering how they left without a word when she dismissed them - but it's not hard to see her being promoted fairly rapidly (though never at the cost of her putting out on command). The very fact that she's cognizant of "time management" speaks volumes towards her abilities. I have very, very high hopes for what she can accomplish as the brains to Silver's heart.
In fact, everyone doing well was a theme here; it was so nice to see Bottom so happy. While she's always been forward, the fact that she was showing real initiative here was very promising, and suggests that her spirit was never broken by everything she went through, but just buried. It's rather ironic that Silver will get his wish - that Bottom grow in confidence enough to make her own decisions - simply by being around her and giving her the respect and affection that she wants. And of course, that will probably mean that Bottom is happiest with things being just the way they are now. It could go the other way; they could get back to Equestria and Bottom could melt for Big Mac (though Cheerilee might have something to say about that), but for right now she's doing fine.
Shei also seems to have rallied, but I'm a bit nervous about her decision to try and learn magic from Oman. I'm sure he has the knowledge, but he strikes me as a Very Serious Pony; that is, someone who takes everything with excessive gravity, and will probably treat a request to be tutored in magic with the same seriousness that we would treat someone wanting to work in law enforcement. That is, he'll want all sorts of tests, not just of aptitude, but of personal (emotional) stability, of moral character, and of their intentions in using it. That is, he'll likely continue to be an insufferable ass about it (with the understanding that he'll probably need to have his pride as an elder massaged as well).
And a miscast spell would be just the thing to blow the visit with the turkeys, anyway.
I believe this is a grammar error. This sentence is ambiguous. The verb lacks an object. What did Silver notice about his wings?
6212871 They were largely as they started. Unchanged.
6212857 Backtracking a bit! It probably wouldn't have been a diplomatic explosion if Silver had turned Wajdi's gift back, due to their warm relations, but that's the kind of thing that can explode, which is part of the reason they put their hooves down. It's a lesson that needed to be learned. If you don't like a gift, you never tell the royal person that gave it to you. It was for his good.
And more good, as she's gone right to work, and is being firm with Silver without being rude or inconsiderate. They're getting along well, all of them, and that's good.
Will Oman be a font of knowledge or continue being a huge pain in the flank? The betting odds aren't looking so good on this one...
6212874 yes but Largely is an adverb and not a noun. Largely what? you cannot notice a modifier to your noticing there needs to be an adjective or a noun.
6212929 Largely the same.
You can't keep saying largely what when it says it right there. largely... the same.
largely... red.
Largely tattered and ruined.
Largely the same.
If you have a suggestion for alternative phrasing, go fer it.
A nice breather chapter.
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Sorry I am not trying to be a grammar Nazi. I have read most of your other works and this is the first time I am lost as to your meaning. I just do not know what you are trying to say with this sentence. In your reply you could add Largely the same, or filthy, or what have you, but something cannot be just largely. It could be large but not largely as you are using an adverb which has to modify the verb; where as the noun, wings, could be described as large, an adjective.
Also, the wings started what and then spread them for a silent reminder of what? What did his wings start? What are they silently reminding him about?
6213781 http://www.ldoceonline.com/dictionary/largely
They were largely the same. They were mostly unchanged. They hadn't changed much. He spread them to behold their being exactly the same as before. Really not a lot happened except he got cleaner. The bathing process was enjoyable though.
6213736 Some new patterns got put into place, and the characters feel a lot better about their lots in life.
6213781 lol how did we get involved in this?
Sounds like the chapter title could have been "A Place for Everyone and Everyone in Their Place".
Is Fiddah fitting in? (Says the rhetorical one.)
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my bad I miss-clicked.
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Your reference and usage in the comment is the correct usage. It is the original sentence that I have confusion over.
Okay, now that I know what I think you are saying. I would phrase it as follows:
"Silver noticed that his wings were largely the same as they started to clean them, and he spread them as a silent reminder to himself. "
Something like this or a variation of it is much more clear as to what is being conveyed. I am still a little fuzzy on what he is being reminded about but I believe this is what you meant.
6214370 Sentance rewritten for clarity.
6214612 I didn't think anyone would notice. A cookie for you!
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The version is much clearer now. Good Job. Sorry if I was a nag. I just wanted to understand what was happening to the character.
Keep up the good work!
6214641 I knew, but I didn't say anything because I thought it was obvious. I mean, she out-and-out says that's what her name means in the story!
1: I'm surprised at the lack of questions for Bottom about his former humanity, even if he was only a child when he came to Equestria. How did he get ponified? Did he ever talk to Text?
2: I imagine Bottom, and maybe Shei to a lesser extent, may end up unhappy with Fiddah. I mean, it makes sense that the two of them can't be allowed to get too close and mess with Silver's existing wives, but it interferes with their desire to be close to Silver. Bottom, in particular, relies on proximity to Silver for validation, and Fiddah directly gets in the way of that.
Even if it's what's best, emotions aren't necessarily rational.