Balanced Dawn an 'average' colt from Sires Hollow, one that wasn’t ever supposed to exist. At least according to his new memories.
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Not much, yeah. But I don't think that Tia is hotter than red steel.
Did you ever saw how a blacksmith installs a horseshoe?
Honestly I dislike how Luna and nightmare moon are different people, nightmare is Luna creating a darker personality when she had a physicotic break due to stress. They are both fundamentally Luna just different faces.
A kiss from either Luna or NMM… many would say it was all worth it for that.
I’ve a feeling those twins aren’t out of the story quite yet, but I am looking forward to the trial. Going to be a minute before they escape though. And it won’t be easy by the sounds of it.
They didn’t mention if Lyra went with Dawn… I mean, did the grandparents file marriage/ herding paperwork? That stuff could be notarized and legit… so maybe she’s got a place to stay with Herd Apple? Princess can probably void depending… idk. Legal system yadda yadda. Maybe Bon Bon is out of the hospital?
Time for some fun back in Ponyville!!
"No." I Lied, leaving out her sister. She
This sentence just stops here?
There was another part where a sentence just stops but I can't find it right now.
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All great questions.
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Ug thanks, for some reason it didn’t save the some of the changes I made. Fixed.
Free at last! Now safe things should start to return to normal.
Neat.
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I'm not happy those two got captured by the griffons. Unless they are literally eaten, I'm worried they will come back in some capacity. I hope we get a view of Celestia reading out the charges to Onyx and family and them trying to have some sort of rebuttal. But beyond that I'm so glad that the filly that got turned into gold is okay and that Dawn and Lyra will have a chance for things to get better.
There was a notification about chapter 28.5 but now it's gone. False upload?
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Yeah accidentally posted it before I was done. Should be ready by tomorrow at the latest.
Nice
Nice to see an update again, keep it up.
Good. Very good.
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Honestly? They will likely live without to much damage so long as they can turn thing's into gold. You don't break something that makes you more money in the long run
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Funny enough yes but it's just to make sure the shoe stays flush. Always surprised me how behaved horses can be but so long as they don't see that part there fine.
This is not a horse we are talking about and what makes up a pony's hoof (not the real ones) is always going to but up to the author but...we are talking about a child. A tiny one at that so even if this was more realistic I don't think he would have that level of not caring. Plus they vary much can feel thing's is they can describe something as soft by running there hoof over it
I'm starting to think the Nightmare in this universe might just be an alicorns Id manifested. That Luna just fully embraced more then possessed by. It's not really a possession if it IS a part of you. It's just giving into your darker desires.
Going to hate waiting to find out but that's the price of story's in progress I guess
I feel like Dawn's first public interaction with Nightmare Moon/Luna is gonna be hilarious.
No don't! Then we can't make cakeflank jokes! or enjoy the view!
KARMA!
Cute!
How did they get out?
Didn't shining still have up the shield? Sure celestia was able to walk through it but she's celestia.
Shining is known for his bubble shields so I was assuming it was encapsulating the house to protect others from being hit by stray shots and to prevent anyone from escaping.
How did it work with celestia?
The way it sounds like it works is transforming a layer into gold which celestia melted off.
She melted off, she's pretty OP so she'd probably be fine without skin but for her to still have skin wouldn't she needed to have either reversed the spell (thus absorbing the gold or so none to shake off) or used magic to replace it or had some super op alicorn healing factor able to replace that much lost in seconds.
Why did they have to ask him what happened instead of him going hey! They made me turn a pony into gold!, ok so he was at least together enough to mention there was a pony in the basement but still.
Typos;
Celestial
in her her life.
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Ah good point in the shield I should edit it to Celestia breaking it when she steps through. And yeah I envision it melting off her while her skin regrows from her alicorn healing factor.
Ok somehow I did a brain fart and missed this chapter but read the next.
Anyway love the chapter, will admit I was cackling at the twins fate.
On another note my favorite interpretation of Nightmare Moon and Day Breaker being the sisters dark side. And the actual way to deal with them is to accept them as part of themselves. Bonus if this results in a power up.
Wow.. I guess you did a good job showing how incompetent both Celestia and her guard are. TBH, I really disliked this chapter, just feels so cheap to have them get away Also, the dam knew they were killing ponies but didn't report it because they would "come after them"? Makes no sense to me, they'd get arrested and put in prison for the rest of their lives, how would they be able to come after them?
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Keep in mind it’s ponies. Most don’t deal with or even think about true evil like humans.
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Second, unless it is a dark equestria, a grimdark or a Bad/Mad end, dark things do not usually reach the level of darkness that is in the evil that can reach humans
Awesome chapter but I got to ask why didn't Celestia just grab them with telekinesis
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Mostly anger and being out of practice with actual combat situations.
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Had arrogance played any part, pretty sure being akin to invincible existence to most modern ponies get one to be reckless to say the least.
Well I guess it's just too much BS for my taste at this point. TYVM.
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Strange, so far I only saw darker and more realistic Equestria. Alternative and different, yet recognizable and none of the so called "BS". I wouldn't even call it much "different" besides prominent RGRE part considering the show one is already a death world in disguise and the movie only highlighted that. So, care to elaborate?
I'm somewhat disappointed that Dawn didn't take any action, not even attempting to help his parents. Given his ability to transfigure someone into gold, he could have made a difference. Even Applejack's mom contributed. Additionally, I'm quite confused about his old memories. They seem to have little impact. He has matured somewhat, but not to the extent one would expect after gaining around 30 years of memories. He behaves, thinks, and reacts like a pony 95% of the time. The only noticeable difference is his attitude towards the princess, which for the life of me I can't figure out why or how this came from his previous life memories.
Despite me enjoying the story heavily I must admit that due to the insignificance of his previous life memories and experiences the addition of such concepts seem extra. In the story "Life finds a way,"
The memories change the protagonist outlook on life and even thought he accepted that he was not the human but a colt with the past memories of one, this event gave him the alien reactions and emotions which made him unique.
Dawn feels 100% pony. There is nothing human about him, nothing alien.
At least reversal through the original caster is apparently cheap.
Easy Pinkie, no need to get cynical!
This reads like a response to a critique someone made in a comment to the last chapter. Not a particularly strong one either considering how synonymous the word 'monster' is to the members of that family in-universe.
Something I found interesting is when possibly Daybreaker is showing signs, Luna is also showing signs as well, since Nightmare is nicer than usual.
I joked to a friend about Dawn becoming the Twilight to Lunas Celestia, but now it actually seems like it could go in that direction in a way. Wild.