Balanced Dawn an 'average' colt from Sires Hollow, one that wasn’t ever supposed to exist. At least according to his new memories.
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It’s nice to see Twilight and Moondancer having a better time in school so far. Starlight and Sunburst, too. Really curious about Celestia’s plans given this. She’s definitely noticed, I wager. I’ll just have to wait for it.
Yup. Trixie likes our guy!! Atta girl. Go get’im.
Definitely looking forward to the visit to Ponyville. I hope the Apples are doing well given their situation.
Hope Lyra will be okay during break.
Has Dawn been strengthening his pegasus leylines by wearing the necklace or does he just think it’s cool?
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He just thinks it’s a cool since only those that went on the trip got one.
Caught a few grammar errors and typos.
Thanks for the updates!
I suppose this makes sense, seeing as how future Trixie will end up pulling her home in a cart everywhere.
Some mistakes I picked up:
Consistent misspelling of "Twinkleshine" - you have an extra 'i'
Consistently incorrect use of 'to' and 'too' - 'too' denotes exaggeration
- should be much too sunnily
Your upload rate is really fast too, and chapters come out in pairs. The first one comes out before I go to bed and the second one after I'm asleep, so I always have one waiting in the morning after. The story is enjoyable so far. I'm going to go and finish reading the chapter now.
I wonder if Dawn grandparents we'll try to get rid of his parents so they become a legal Guardians.
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Always good to have backups...
I don't think twi knows morality, well just yet at least.