Balanced Dawn an 'average' colt from Sires Hollow, one that wasn’t ever supposed to exist. At least according to his new memories.
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That gone better than I expected
Welp, it needed to happen. Now it's up to Starlight. Can't believe she said Dawn was a replacement right to his face. She needs to work out her abandonment issues and her feelings for Sunburst.
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Anyways... Jesus. That girl has issues
As always thanks for the new chapter
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Well she didn’t become a cutie mark stealing dictator overnight.
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I had a feeling this fight was going to happen considering how possessive she was of him. She was determined to drive anyone who wasn't Trixie away. She never wanted to hear anything but what she wanted to hear. And yes twilight chose a bad time to ask to be in the herd but when given a chance she is a nice person and maybe even a good friend,
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That's pretty upsetting tbh. Slavery is bad, m'kay. I hope if that collar does get used again, it will have its current magic stripped or at least heavily altered. No matter what most isekais tell you, slaves can't be friends. Especially if it's enforced via magic. Removing someone's ability to choose is morally and ethically evil. The maid was freed. Let's not backtrack on that.
Well I don't know if I can really say nice to this. So good job. And put Celestia in a maid outfit
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I could definitely do that.
I really wanna see Twilight's reaction to this. FIrst happy, then really stressing out about being the new lead mare. That would be a disaster, but kind of funny to watch.
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I'm so happy
And I fear twilight asking starlight again before dawn has a chance talk/warn twilight
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lol!
*knock, knock*
: Come i~n!
Dawn: Celery, Twilight and I- …
: !
: P-! Princess!?
: Twilight! Dawn! Y- you caught me when I was… uh~ tidying up my room! Yes. That’s what I was doing… what did you need?
: *takes notes: need to look the part…*
Dawn: Never mind! Let’s go, Twilight!
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I might just use something like that.
Pizza 🍕
Starlight really can't help but drive everyone away, huh? Hell, the chapter even ends on saying in no uncertain terms that her roommate hates her. She did this to herself entirely on her own, yet I doubt she'll even consider it a possibility.
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I'd say it can be a necessary evil especially if used on something that inherently evil. But that a sloppy slop to begin with.
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That pretty much how most cursed items go. High risk high reward. On one hand he can turn practically anything with a mind to his side, on the other mind control is a twisted art.
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Ye good idea let's piss off a border line demi-god/godling who may one day become a full fledge god and make him dislike us.
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No, slavery is never a necessary evil. Prison? That I can agree with. Not slavery. You would have to jump through some major mental hoops to get me to agree with that.
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Fair enough to each their own.
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I feel if knowledge of changling is not top secret of the select few it somewhat unrealistic that their like no mass panic distrust or something like that.
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It’s not top secret just a little know fact, like ponies could look it up in thousand year old history books but how many bother looking into ancient history.
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Ok we are not putting the slave collar with the rest of the cursed objects like the Alicorn amulet. This doesn't come with an upside to the wearer. Honestly I'd still call it evil not matter how much good can come of it.
I do agree with not screwing with an alicorn. Sure you might get away with something at the moment but in the end they can get the last laugh. Insanely powerful or just outlive you.
Just imagine the Griffen king is laying in his death bed. His kingdom living the golden age after extorting the Equestria through the new prince. Being woken up by a sudden noise only to find a tall regal figure gazing down at him with a sweet smile. Frozen in place by some unknown force keeping him from so much as breathing let alone calling for help. Leaning down whispering into his ear how much they have learned from the experience, that they would not be missed. That they would start the process of undoing everything they have achieved. Wipe there name from the history books and ending his bloodline where it is.
No thinks!
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It a mind control device it upside is for the one controlling the wearer. Thou if it had some for of berserker enchantment as well shrug
As for angering a Alicorn, I mean the celestial sister control FREAK DAMNIT CELESTIAL BODY'S does that even need details? The amount of bull f€ckery going deep on any Alicorn potential powers over reality is a rabbit hole.(
technically any of the elemental wielder as well)Besides the amount of power even one Alicorn has eclipse most other creature with a exception of a few exceptional (cought plot armor cought) individual. And maybe dragon's depending on how you characterized them as a species.
Well done. Loving the progress and I think the conflict was handled well. It at least kept every character in character for their roles that you've set up in the story, regardless of how readers feel about it. My personal take is Dawn's better off without Starlight as a lead mare, but love is weird sometimes.
So who are Trixie’s and Starlight’s roommates?
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so far seem to be extras... unless of course they’re Moonbeam’s friends in the canon
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I think your personal opinion is the opinion of the public, I also believe that Starlight will not be Yegua leader material at least not in this timeline, but it can be somewhat ambiguous considering that all are young teenagers and not young adults
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I wouldn’t be surprised if they thought it was a good idea...
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Yeah they really all have some more life to figure out. Even Dawn who’s going through a lot.
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Yep just extras.
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if we apply that in real life, we could refer to the various species of mosquitoes and cockroaches which there are several (of which I don’t know which is the maximum) but the common person will only know the species he has seen all his life as the common American/European cockroach that as its name says is common to see in their respective countries
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and enjoy every word written until the story is finished, is the only constant fic that is not something of the amount on this platform
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something expected although it still adds some change to history
Oh dear Starlight looks to be in for a ruff time in the near future. I hope she gets the help she needs to understand herself, work out her problems and make up with Dawn.
I not sure who would take lead mare position in Dawn’s current prospective herd. While future Twilight is the lead of the main 6, it wasn’t until they got to the return of the crystal empire that she became good at organising her friends on a regular basis and had many failures even after then. Current Twilight is nowhere near that level given her social ineptitude. Lyra is disadvantaged by her human mentality and would struggle to adapt to pony relationship dynamics especially if she had to be in charge of the group and not just a member. (Speaking of I wonder when she will get the courage to confide in Dawn about her human origins and what help Dawn might be able to provide her?) Trixie to me doesn’t seem like the sort of person to manage other like a lead mate would need to. And Moondancer doesn’t seem to be that close to Dawn and similar to Twilight socially. The rest of the main six have yet to talk to Dawn yet about their interest in him though from that group I’d say either Applejack or Rarity would have leadership material but coming from outside the initial Canterlot group if they did become the lead mare it wouldn’t be instantaneous and there would need to be an lead from Canterlot that would need to give up their position when they see the Ponyville members are better at the role, (such a switch could be painful if the lead is unwilling to hand over the position initially).
Eeyup, checks out.
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I'd assume that is mainly https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Frequency_illusion but I notice I do it too.
Loosing is almost never intentionally used in a sentence to the point that I used to have it in my text expander to auto correct all instances of loosing to losing.
For an example of something else that will also bug you from then on once it's pointed out check out kerning or better yet don't.
Oof, words have been said. Not as bad as I expected it but still stuff went down. I do hope starlight manages to talk with someone get herself and her emotions sorted and make up with dawn. They were adorable together, anyway tell next chapter my good author, keep up the awesome work!
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With the dynamics currently in play, Rarity is bound to be the most likely next head mare. She's already the head of the Ponyville prospects. I don't see her relinquishing that position without a damn good fight.
While I like Trixie here and she's adorable with Dawn, I don't like this Starlight much at all. Unless she severely changes her tune I'd rather Starlight make up with Starburst and Trixie can stay with Dawn.
Makes me wonder what the reception of Dawn's classmates will be after the announcement. After such a public fallout.
Hope we get more Sunburst soon.
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I could see it used as a temporary thing only to get them to the dungeon without them fighting or resisting, so long as it's removed the moment they're secured.
Just finished binge reading this and was mildly disappointed when I hit the end. Excited to read more.
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Well it’s not the end. It’s just what’s posted. Thanks for the read though.
Ah~ Starlight. The definition of Hoof meet Mouth made manifest. Hopefully things work out later. But she definitely has a lot of work to make it up.
Hey guys, do remember they all are foals here.
They have many more years to learn (or mislearn) things.
Mistakes and fuck ups will happen
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Tzar came from Latin "caesar" and it means as much "governor" as a "monarch" or a "king". I think in a few countires it was interchangeable with King. For prince Russia had the title of "tzarevich", which was later changed to "caesarevich". Weird. Additionally, all Russian tzars since 1721 had the title "Emperor of All Russia" and the title of Tzar became just a decoration.
Yet knowing Starlight's stubbornness, this is likely the new reason she ends up forming Our Town...
This is why we don't make life-changing decisions in the middle of heated arguments, folks!
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Agreed, people will see and conflate all the relationships and forget these little ponies are still effectively barely into secondary....