Balanced Dawn an 'average' colt from Sires Hollow, one that wasn’t ever supposed to exist. At least according to his new memories.
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Well I'd say called it!
Thou interesting lore for the social structure. Well Dawn you now get a crash course of trial by fire in diplomacy.
Celestia is a hair breath away from going nuclear and eviscerating a certain minotaur.(Not gonna lie I first thought it was one from the comic).
P.s.: will you use comic materials and/or plotlines?
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I haven’t been able to read the comics as it’s hard to find them for free. so just the show/ movies primarily and maybe something from other fics on here. Never anon filly!
Well, he found the Thestrals. That's good. There's going to be a run of obstacles between him and Canterlot, and I don't think he's getting his guide back....
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Would you like a link for a that? because the comic have some awesome and good material for them!
for one their 2 version kelpie one a semi monster with hypnotic ability the other a pony like creature that essentially an water elemental.
Interesting chapter
Well, he found them, mission objective complete!
Quite curious how they've managed to remain so hidden such that even outside information in the form of their captures hasn't sufficiently clued them in about their forgotten status. Perhaps nopony thought to ask...
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Or most though it was common knowledge and never check or compare notes.
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Keep in mind very few ponies have that curious spark we humans have to go out searching for the unknown. Herds stick together so Theatrals had an easy time hiding on the borders and there might be other colonies out there even this one doesn’t know about.
I like the story but the chapters are just so short
"That's it. I need a drink."
Guest
At first I thought it was like "August behaviour" but then I realized.
Man, Dawn is getting really unlucky with these lucky encounters. If he wasn't older in the head, I'd feel bad for him, he'd likely be traumatized by now and swear off filly's and mare's forever.
Maybe one of the bat pony girls can see if she can join the herd . It would not make her people look better by association but they get new blood that is strong. Considering they are into strong ponies marrying and having kids and alicorns are the strongest ponies.
So are they going to keep Cheese against his will?
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Yeah that’s the only thing getting him through it. A normal colt his age would not of put up with it. He on the other hoof does enjoy the attention but also wants love not flings.
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Better.
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I was going to ask that.
Was Pinkie holding off on joining Dawn’s trial herd with the others for her intuition about Cheese? And if he gets… appropriated by the Thestrals, will he be able to make that happen?
Also, will Dawn require Cheese to promise to keep his secret until the announcement? Does Cheese know the Pinkie Promise or does he have his own version? What would that even be?
Also also, hooray!! Dawn’s secret mission from Luna from wa~y back just kinda happened. I thought he was going to have to uncover some clues and find a way to sneak away to do this. Love it when a plan (that Dawn never planned) comes together.
Woof. Imago, good luck with that.
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He's not named sandwich for nothing! 😅
I just noticed it was Daybreaker talking there. The orange text NOT in italics flew right by me the first time. Celestia is NOT pleased. As she should not be, this is highly distressing for everypony.
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I wouldn't mind that link. I never had the opportunity to buy the comics outside of my MTG LGS that would have given me hell if they knew I was a brony.
That whole fight for a mate vaguely reminds me of the Chinese Amazons from Ranma 1/2
Alright... Let's take a look at the roster of beings who want to attack Equestria and/or Dawn.
1. The Storm King
Not much has currently been shown about him yet. It seems he sees Dawn as another enemy he will need to combat. Luckily though, he shouldn't show up for a while.
I am curious if he will try to steal Dawn before the big attack in this timeline, and if Dawn would be able to turn Tempest against the Storm King.
2. Sunrise/Moonrise
The duo that managed to escape Celestia's anger.
Dawn caused them strife, and when they inevitably escape they are very likely going to want revenge. They also shouldn't be able to show up for a little while, but when they do...
3. The slavers
Not much is known about these guys either. Presumably they are just some band of idiots who do not realize the target that they have placed on their own backs, all in pursuit of greed.
They don't stand a chance. If they actually manage to harm Dawn, I can only assume that Celestia will release Daybreaker upon them. Even as it stands, there's a decent chance that Daybreaker may get to have some fun time with them.
4. Chrysalis
Chrysalis is depicted as very ruthless in this story, so she is going to be a considerable threat. She has an army, and has strategically removed every single one of her enemies... Except the one that slipped through the cracks.
I wonder how Chrysalis' ruthlessness will affect the Canterlot raid, and the timing of it. Luckily, there will be an alicorn foal/teen (perhaps adult by the time she attacks) and a good changeling queen to help fight off the raid this time, but given what has been shown it will still be one hell of a battle.
A lot is going on in this story, and having it all in one story may lead to issues down the line. I'd be careful about adding too many major antagonists.
I am enjoying the story though, so keep on doing what you're doing :)
this story does not stop being very, very interesting, from kidnapping to knowing a tribe "lost"
so very very interesting
Nice
Good chapter!
Please let this be one of those days where you surprise us with another chapter or two before bedtime…
I like to think they saw something similar to this and their actions like this when Gandalf said let me risk a little more light. https://youtu.be/Mz6SQx76eJg?si=TDeVLkxovXZqerRR
Come on, Celestia. Make an example of those who would dare harm your prince.
I FORGOR ABOUT DIS SUBPLOT
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Yep, NMM tasked him with conscripting the thestrals to be ready for her return.
I wonder if celestia gonna teach dawn the spell to personally send her letters or will dawn end up taking self defense combat training 🤔
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He did take training with Shiny but the letter spell will prob be next
...That bitch told them in a letter!? Oh my gods 0.0 She could have at least told them in person!
This will certainly be interesting... I wondered how he'd get away from his studies to find the thestrals, and while I figured his kidnapping was a good chance, I never considered that they would find him. In hindsight, it makes the most sense. If they were easy ponies to find, they wouldn't exactly be hidden
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I forgot he took training with shining armor
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Yeah it wasn’t the best but also ‘Daybreaker’
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Very true. And also, busy running a country. Plus... I wouldn't wanna tell Dawn's dam, either. She'd yell at me.
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Hold your heart,
And never lie;
To ride y’need to be this high.
The Cheesy Promise? ¯\_(ツ)_/¯
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As predicted the breakneck have of updates ending has left me with withdrawl.
I've checked to see if this story updated more than 3 times today alone
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Ah sorry.
Dis story very gooooood