Balanced Dawn an 'average' colt from Sires Hollow, one that wasn’t ever supposed to exist. At least according to his new memories.
Page generated in 0.029 seconds
Total duration
923 users online
1,504,473 hits today, 2,924,228 yesterday
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
The pacing is a little fast for me, but its been good story so far.
I find your lack of
faithdouble e’s disturbingSpeaking of-
That was pleasant.
11748692
Have you ever considered saving all of those in the text field until you reach the end of the chapter and just posting once? Just curious.
Been*
Pacing seemed a bit fast, but I assume it's a bit of a window into the others before dealing with Dawn's kidnapping
Forefoot should be forehoof but other than that great chapter!
is this the two sisters from last chapter
11748793
Yeah just a peek at what the others were up to.
Nice R&R chapter. A little slice of life in the drama and action of the arc to contrast.
Cadance shipping sense are tingling here 🤣
seriously how can it be theirs no plotting cadence emojiAm sorry if this is a silly question but shouldn't Applebloom be a foal at this time that can berely walk?
11748975
I’m treating them like normal ponies a bit which can walk at birth and mature a bit faster but still live just as long. Even the show has the cake twins moving about in under a year.
11748981
A that a fair point...
Well that at least a blessing for parents. How old are the cutie mark crusaders in here actually?
11748983
All just a year. Im Going with heat seasons in spring and births nine months later just before winter so technically she is about to turn 2 and everypony else will age up as well soon.
11748991
Are heat the only time a foal can be conceived or it can happen outside of it throu some hoops?
What is the age where somepony considered as an adult, and what the coming of age well age?
Won't burts being near winter a bad idea? Like winter is one of the most unforgiving season, to my knowledge most equine have a gestation period of average 330 day. (about 11 monts)
11748997
Good point 11 so it’s right after winter would be better. And yeah it can happen out of season with modern magical assistance. Or that’s what I’m going with since magic is OP lol
11749004
I won't say magic is OP it more undefinable.
Similar to most things in type moon (tsukihime, fate)where it so obscure that it can't be defined or limited since the writer can do practically what ever.
Cue starlight being a wannabe Lancelot of MLP.
P.s.
Fun fact: elephant gestation period is a whopping 645 day(bucking nearly 2 years) let that sink in.
What I love about this story: First is well written and second the interactions of your OCs specially the protagonist with the canon characters it doesn't feel forced even when doing all those butterfly effects.
Like with Twilight she seriously needed a rival. Somepony equally good as her with academics and magic in her foalhood making her realize the world is bigger than just books. Or Starlight... She just needed a friend.
I love it thank you.
Are you implying Rarity is old enough to buy property? Emphasis on old?
derpicdn.net/img/view/2022/12/15/3007433.jpg
11752671
Nah, she isn’t much older that the others. pony society in this au just puts more emphasis on cutie marks than age so becoming an ‘adult’ happens differently for everyone. Like Dawn is technically able to buy property as well since he has his mark even though he is only almost 9 it’s just what Rarity did is rare.
I just finished reading this and I’m already hooked man keep going. It’s already a great story.😎
11753096
Ty. Already working on the next chapter.
11751597
To me it make sense. Reason:
1. Fear. The Dam doesn't just bet with her life but her wife and child. Emotions aren't rational especially fear, it easy to say to do 'the right' when not in the situation with the emotional baggage.
2. Where the evidence? Simply going to the guard without evidence will do jack, cause who believe her? Even if they do they still need a warranty to search the house.
3. Who's to say they don't have moles in the administration? If the dam so much as tryes to tell who say they won't tell her parents and the same situation happens? Only this time it can be more costly to her.
4. Celestia as a ruler most likely has a entire bureaucracy hell between her and any report. And her court I'd be surprised if the free slot aren't months in advance.
Thought i agree celestia and her RG incompetence in the situation is appalling. Hope this will serve as a wake up call.
Dawn might have set you up, Big Mac, but you know you’re going to have to stallion up.
In~teresting…
Had a thought that I am not proud of: what if Starlight ends up on the same path but develops that same pathology for Dawn, like what if he gets too wrapped up in his new family and friends? “Aw! I ended up creating the same problem I fixed. Dang it.”
11755086
OOOH HELL NAH,WHY TWILIGHT X MOON DANCER PLS NO
Bookmarking batpony investigations....
She's so sweet ;-;