Balanced Dawn an 'average' colt from Sires Hollow, one that wasn’t ever supposed to exist. At least according to his new memories.
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It's funny, I had just finished reading a chapter when a new one appeared in front of me.
Less nice
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Yep
Well that both wholesome and mest up to all hell.
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Queens can produce drones Asexually as a clutch or single eggs but need a mate(preferably another race or hive) to birth a royal. Female drones can lay single eggs unless they become a special breed and require a mate either way. They can give either pony offspring (while in disguise) or changeling eggs if they’re not. I’ll prob add a blog post later with more story specifics since y’all keep asking nicely for world building.
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OMG!! I don't know if that's worse... Well if Dawn help her not being killed Celestial could have a whole hive of loyal spies. If things go well...
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Nice, thank you were much!
Also most likely help keep things straightYou spoil us absolutely rotten with all these chapters, not that I want you to stop.
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Wait so does this mean pony Lyra and human Lyra switched? Will we get to see other Lyra eventually or is there no plans for that at all.
Or did they fuse?
I guess a darker take could be the human Lyra drowned and she is actually in a similar situation to dawn.
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Spoilers darling but it will be brought up again down the line.
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I look forward to it thx
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She a queen changling, she just refuses to call herself a queen. And my problem is that it implied their more queens and that it make multiple hives which make a mess of how they live in a narrative. Also I'm very sceptical with this since we never got a sniff of their being more queens in any media of MLP.
That the thing it a cheat which is a deus ex machine copout, so instead of having a plausible explanation for them, they just can now essentially brake a fundamental law of no process make more energy then it takes. I can rave about it but I just find it utterly rediculuse.
Especially since it paints Chrysalis into the 'derpy evil for lol' queen. Since up to that point I had a view of her as a War Mother(a ruler who has to deal with a rotten hand for their people and burdens the sin of their choices) which could have had so much nuances.
Like I understand why they choose the canon root and BS reason because it a kid show and friends/good should resolve all problems. Doesn't make it any less deus ex, which is why I love fics that paint the transformation as having proportional disabilities or cons of it own.
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Ehh canon is a good place to start but I have to admit I don't like a lot of what they did like the rainbow bugs bit and the infinite energy cheat, plus there are a lot of things that they commonly do in fanfiction that I really like that very clearly aren't a thing in the show.
Personally I like the idea of additional hives as it gives options for OC and new locations to explore although at this point i'm not really seeing how they're supposed to fit in this story, this princess is under chrysalis and is part of her same hive she would be assumed to either form her own or take over from chrysalis but chrysalis is supposed to be ancient so more likely form another potentially subordinate hive elsewhere rather than take over.
Like one of my favorite ones: Hive minds; not a thing in the show they're even shown having to use objects to make video calls but yet hive minds are so much more interesting no one cares.
You even mentioned one in the show Chrysalis is evil she isn't portrayed as having a bad hand she just wants power but yet in fanfiction we almost always get the heavily romanticized version where she isn't evil and is actually a well meaning queen trying to provide for her people.
Like I said I think they had a good balance initially before the rainbow bug thing.
Often I see stories add limitations to changelings that aren't there in the show like claiming they can't change into things that don't look like ponies (dragons) or inanimate (ocellus turns into a rock) because it's deemed as being too OP.
IMHO the best fanfiction creation backstory i've read for them was the one where a great mage transformed the entire windigo species from feeding on hate to feeding on love and intended for them to be able to help and live in harmony but that all happened so long ago everyone forgot. Cultural Artifacts. I do not recommend that story, the bit with the changelings isn't a large part of the over half million word story and it had an incredibly unsatisfying ending, here i'll share what I wrote in my notes about the ending The MC is dead and everyone is pregnant and it makes just as much sense regardless on if you've read the story or not, there's not even a changeling until ch26, the creation backstory is in ch30.
I also read one a while back where love sharing actually kills changelings after a while Resolution of a Queen I don't recommend that story either because it's dark and it's all chrysalis's fault as she deliberately suppressed the knowledge of it being dangerous.
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Well no need to worry, I’m not making rainbow changelings that can do a feeding loop. Sharing love just nulifies the addictive properties of love that makes them crazy and burn through it faster than necessary and this princess is just well fed so no holes.
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I've always been partial to the explanation that they just never got enough because the the love they took wasn't for them but for their disguise or outright stolen and since it wasn't for them it's way less powerful, something something love freely given is better than love taken through deceit so just getting ponies to accept them in their natural form solves their food shortages.
I’m still quite curious about how Lyra became enamored with humans. Maybe she isn’t exactly like Dawn, but there’s got to be some similarity -some way she’s connected to the mythical creatures.
Maybe she and Dawn will have that discussion at some point. Not sure how many years are in the CSGU curriculum, but that seems like a junior-year or later topic. Do you have different years planned like that potter story?
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Ok i agree that the War Mother Chrysalis is more fanon but i just prefer it to the clishe queen of the show. It has more potential and narrative intrigue. Call me bias but this is where I stand.
The hive mind is similar a clithe but it one that fit well and can actually make interesting interaction.
As for the multiple queen, tbh this idea creates what I call 'Galahad existence' where a character existence (not even physically shown) but it diminishes/bash another character (Chrysalis in this case). Because if the other queen are to chrysalis what luna is to celestia then she should be ooc or change from her show persona.
The equivalent would be if in story they mentioned another Equestria with similar set of sister alicorns but not show or have their presence affect the overarching plot at all.
If only 1-2 OC why not just go with they are Chrysalis royal descendants and are exiled/run away/rebellious to her rule. It fit so much more smoothly then saying that 'o their more queen's then chrysalis' and not have them even be mentioned again or interact with.
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That actually get rid of my second red flag. TBH that should have been their from the start(Mlp i mean not this fic). Thank you for clearing that up.
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In their defence they are monstrous even in canon, considering how skittish pony are(looking at Zecora episode) especially if it ancient times before the sisters?
Apologies if i came off too strong or pushy.
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A pony Lyra and our (a human Lyra most likely from girls) swapped places obviously.
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Whos cure wave?
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The MC of the story that inspired mine.
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That was Antropology :P
Because they had a stranger masquerading as their daughter?
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That is actually an interesting observation. I hadn’t even really thought of it like that until now since it was both ‘lyra’ and she did not switch out of malicious intent.
Princess's*
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Funnily enough, still wrong. A rule that's easy to forget is that you don't put an s with the ' after another s, so the correct grammar is Princess'. It's a bit weird, yeah, but that's how english be.
My word.
If Human Soul Lyra, now a unicorn, ever thought about how there is now a unicorn pony trapped in a human body that will never be able to cast magic for the rest of her life despite knowing in the depths of her very soul that it's something she should be able to do, Human Soul Lyra would be a full blown monster for how she seemingly hasn't tried to tell anyone about this incident yet, instead of just a thoughtless child who doesn't know any better.
Though, I don't suppose that Pony Soul Lyra will find that any small comfort given she's, in all likelihood, suffering under the same conditions of poor parenthood but worse, since magic isn't really supposed to exist in the human realm, so the human parents don't even have the excuse that they have ignored calling on a great and obvious magician for help.
Meanwhile eqg Lyra starts a ponies club. 😈