Balanced Dawn an 'average' colt from Sires Hollow, one that wasn’t ever supposed to exist. At least according to his new memories.
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A lot of unnecessary capitalizations in this chapter for some reason.
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Ty as always.
Winding up the rumor mill! This year will be a doozy!
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Yeah I thought about having the other girls come along but also wanted to keep the ticket master episode in some form so had trouble not changing the timeline on that too much.
"“Yes Sugarcube. You’re your mothers and I don’t want you ending up embarrassed"
-"your mother", not "you are mothers"
“It’s not my fault my legs feel like pudding.” Twilight wined. whined
-twilight was complaining, not making wines.
A nice little fluffy chapter, looking forward to more
Speaking of timelines are we gonna get a time skip or are we moving day by day slowly and surely
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No big time skipping but I do jump anywhere between a few weeks to not at all between chapters. From the beginning of the story we have moved about 1.5 years already. Dawn started school in early spring, got captured during fall break, had hearths warming, and it’s about a month before fall break again. It does get a bit confusing since they have year round schooling with a couple large breaks for holidays, heat season, etc..l
Oh~ I wonder who might ask Applejack to dance?
And what ideas will Rarity be planting during those dance lessons?
Alicia is cute. Now if we can get Spike and Applebloom in on this, there might be a cute-pocalypse… !
I like the reference to Celestia’s acting skills. I can see her secretly practicing her acting skills in plain sight of everypony to try and make the perception that she’s not bad at it… until somepony finally asks her to stop. lol
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Alright. I'll trust your processes. My only complaint is how short the chapters are. I'm enjoying everything else. I shall now return to my nice comments
If theirs one thing I can say about your fic, it that the relationship and it dinamic between characters is phenomenal. Which sadly I rarely see with herd es que fics. Most focus on mc and his relationship with his girls while leaving any connections between them as not important or non existent.
First thing I noticed was an extra L in the spelling of "Gala" in the title. Now I shall actually start reading.
Finished reading. Found some grammatical issues. I shall list a couple here.
Primarily, there's a lot of run on sentences and missing commas.
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She said it! She said the thing!
As always thanks for the new chapter
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It was intentional in the title since that spelling means “something unpleasant.” But it may have kept happening in the story.
A changeling named Ditto?
What next, Chrysalis gets cloned and the clone gets named ChrysalisTwo?
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no she would be named Chrissy or Crystal.
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“Nein Nein Nein zis ist all vong.” Coughs
“Feet in step! Nein! How many times must I tell you. It’s front right hood foward then back then back left hoof! Again!”
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https://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/dam
That, Twilight, is called socializing. You need to lay off your books and get out more.
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Aggressively snuggled.
Tbh, I suspected that Tia was pretendung to act bad
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Or it happened some years earlier
referencing the episode Celestia is supposed to play herself in a play, but is terrible. She always wanted to be an actor before she became ruler if I remember right.