Balanced Dawn an 'average' colt from Sires Hollow, one that wasn’t ever supposed to exist. At least according to his new memories.
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We all know that Dawn has pegasus leylines. Visiting the cloud layer would be an obvious next step. Having some incident that causes damage or loss of cloud-walking necklace would also make sense. Dawn has been on cloud's before, but always with a cloud walking spell applied prior. Yet Dawn has pegasus leylines, and probably pegasus magic. I'd assume the cliffhanger means we'll see that pegasus magic put to the test next chapter.
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then I hope you stick with us, I have a unique plan for her.
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Kinda, hopefully you will like the twist.
Great chapter...
Hand should be Hoof.
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ah thanks for the catch.
I was hoping one or both of them would show up! This will be interesting. The relatives are shipping Dawn and Starlight hard.
I look forward to Dawn experimenting with his pegasus magic. Maybe he’ll give seed clouds a try? I imagine those seed clouds are also used for cloud-house construction? If he can cloud walk without a spell, maybe he’ll improve his dorm bed. Or maybe make cloud-wings? I think there’s a poke mon like that.
In “Life Finds a Way,” pegasus magic is also described as the ability to alter one’s weight or without changing density or mass. Without wings, this could still help mobility… or carrying things. “Wow, Big Mac. You lifted that whole wagon of apples. Hold my cider. Ima lift the barn.”
I take it Lyra didn’t go because she’d have to get permission from the parents? That’s too bad. Would have been a good opportunity to get away for a day. Maybe she’ll be able to request a dorm room when she gets some seniority? Unless that requires higher tuition…
Your capitalization is strange, kind of 19th century novelist style.
The weirdest, though, is 'tOo'. What?
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Ah thanks for the feedback. I stopped using it later for the emphasis so it will probably be gone next time I do story wide editing.
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Too*
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It's not even the letter O
It's a zero???
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Oh that explains it
But how much emphasis can you even put on the word "too"?
And why a zero?
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Yeah don't randomly capitalize things. If ya need emphasis, there's a nifty thing called italics for that. 🙃
Kinda wondered if because Dawns leylines are more pegasus then unicorn, if he'd be able to walk on clouds without magical assistance