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Part of the butterflies. Since Dawn was around her first experience with quesadillas was a good one instead of a horrible painful mess.

The central part is mostly unicorns but there’s also other creatures like griffins, minotaurs, and the occasional the Abyssinian.

extra "the" here.

The Galla was always such a stuffy affair.

one too many "l's" here.

Moonie, do you still Plan to do the whole eternal night thing?

unless you preface this with "The" it doesn't seem right to capitalize this word.

Star Song however showed great interest in the outside world and had even run off before while Mango was an odd bat.

you're missing some words or some context or grammar or something here, it just reads really oddly.

And Nightmare returns! I love how the "Dark Side's" of the princesses are glad/happy for Dawn, it's just a nice dynamic I don't see often and I wish I could see more of it.

Tho, these bats, I don't know if it's a good idea to keep Dawn for a few days and send a messenger, it could turn out badly especially if Daybreaker is at the helm.

In any case, looking forward to more of this, it's getting juicy, like a Mango.

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See if that reads better. I was a last minute addition for some context on the two fillies.

Nice

“Won’t be missed?” Aw, poor Mango. But Cheese ain’t complaining.

I thought the two colts were going to be pursued in the wilderness by the Minotaur. Hiding in the thestral city is the safest thing! … Good planning, guys.

Hooray! Moonie is back. Keep working on her, Dawn. Maybe keep working on the friendship, though? Certain subjects seem to counterproductive.

Hopefully Dawn remembers to pass on Luna's message before they leave.

Mo is a smart cat. She gets paid and doesn't get to find out how ants under a magnifying glass feel.

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It does read better. That said I dunno if I missed it the first time or you added it in after but here's another error.

After much debate most of the members realized they wouldn’t want to lose their own daughters to the outside world so decided tot to send them.

not

After much debate most of the members realized they wouldn’t want to lose their own daughters to the outside world so decided tot to send them.

*not

Great chapter. Thanks for keeping up with this!

Why are they trying to set up an arranged "marriage" when he's already told them about fluttershy? Racial purity? None of his parents have been thestrals for at least a few generations, if he doesn't remember his grandparents being one, and his parents didn't say anything when he told them about flutterbat for his great grandparents. I doubt his unicorn supremacist side of the family have thestral blood either. I think he told them he only became part thestral when he got his upgrade, so the thestrals know he's not related to any of their clans or whatever.

Yay a fix!
I feel like the longer Dawn doesn't tell thestrals that his form is an acquired one the worse the reveal will be for everyone.

I like how Imago tempers Daybreaker. They're interactions are nice to read.

No that job was for Twilight and her friends.

And yours too my butterfly effect friend

As always thanks for the new chapter

I would expect that thestrals like hearing things that go bump in the night or at least scaring day ponies with them. Or maybe they just aren’t afraid of them. Either way I would like to hear Dawn singing this to a thestral. Maybe call it a Minotaur legend.

while Mango was an odd bat who sadly wouldn’t be missed by many except her own family.

That's actually kind of depressing.

I wouldn't think a town that's sequestered themselves away for years on end would care so little for one of their own—even if she's a "dingbat."

So I'm glad she's leaving and starting on her own adventure.
And Cheese is also very glad she's coming with them. (Wink, wink).

I can approve some of what the council was talking about I jeast don't approved of trying to match making and saving it is ok to kick some 1 family member out saing only that family well only care about it

Ha! Getting paid with no risk? Cunning.
Wonder if Dawn will reveal that he's normally a day pony...
They're releasing two girls? Huh, expected one, but two is good too.

Celestia raised an eyebrow. “Mo?” The cat stood up and smiled. “What can the crown do for you today?”

Mo? What she is doing so far from Crash Landing?

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He is not, as it seems. He was before the ascension. It looks like alicorns here represent all ponies and not just three main tribes. And it looks like in this story NM might be similar to Flutterbat and Celestia's Daybreaker personality and form might be her thestral form. Dawn is kinda unique in this regard since he doesn't have second personality.

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Yep. Alicorns represent all ponies. They just predominantly have the traits of the most populous ponies. Since Earth, pegasui, and unicorns have the highest populations that’s what they look like most often without manually adjusting. Granted the general population doesn’t know this.

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Hm... Existence of Flutterbat actually makes me wonder do thestrals even exist in this universe or could it be they were pegasi all along? Could it be that all ponies might be able to flip into predator form and that's just their long forgotten ability? Or is she just an outlier due to mixed origins?

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That’s actually an interesting idea, that their magical transformation is just ‘stuck’ one way or another and a few rare ponies can easily tap into that magical like the alicorns can and it’s such an ancient magic not even Celestia or Luna knows about it..

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Makes me wonder what traits an alicorn could get from crystal ponies.