Balanced Dawn an 'average' colt from Sires Hollow, one that wasn’t ever supposed to exist. At least according to his new memories.
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yay!
Thanks for the awesome Christmas presents!!!
...some how I don't think nightmares return is going to be quite as smooth as the original
Suddenly more alicorns
Celestia:hmmm a surprise but not an unwelcome one
This is especially funny considering Dawn literally exploded right under the Princess's nose.
I'm both surprised and entertained by your early reveal of Dawn's ascension. Life Finds A Way did a wonderful job of springing it on us, and I'm liking your way of saying 'the work of higher powers doesn't care for your sense of dramatic timing'. Not like we didn't know it was going to happen sooner or later anyway.
I'm looking forward to Dawn's reaction to this. Both in the immediate sense of his "this is an inconvenience at best" attitude and in later finding his domain and actually earning and living up to his new mantle. Thanks for the fantastic Hearth's Warming gift of new chapters!
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Yeah, I guess making the peel/skin gold would be more viable.
Merry Christmas everyone
Merry Christmas! This whole ascension bit and quest from Luna is great. I'm looking forward to what happens when she comes back. The drama will be amazing...or hilariously anticlimactic. One of the two.
Also Celestia could have his ascension/coronation be a distraction for the element bearers so they don't get swarmed or something?
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Yes, considering they can eat gems, they should be able to eat gold.
Well at least pure gold(silver too) because their pure forms are uncannily deformable.
Like you can treat them like a dough. And I'm not trolling or joking I got to work with gold and silver in their pure form they are ridiculously weak.
So dawn now has a scavenger chaise for the lunar pegasus's or thestal (NGL I hope they somewhat be their own thing). So that gives him about a decade to find them? This could be interesting.
Twilight is confused and doesn't know how to process this.
And the new colony is soon to be brought to canterlot, this will actually make the wedding part tricky, and fills me with unease of how it will go.
Well love ya work, have a happy holiday's!
Twilight: Is he one of my people?
Our guy needs to learn to use his wings with as few ponies learning about it as possible, then a great hunt begins.
Cadence would be a good choice for flight teacher, right? She did used to be a pegasus, after all.
Dawn might have some trouble getting around a crowded school and never bumping anypony. And now, Twilight’s going to have an eye on him. Way to go, Velvet, but now there’s also more plot ammunition for jokes and embarrassing situations.
please leave youre desk before the quality drops.
I have seen it a couple times (on mysels included) where there is to much motivation and you start making trash so you can write (I removed the last chapter of mine for this reason) but still gtting more chapters is a good thing.
And remember long delays are better than quick trash.
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I don’t remember.
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Ngl personaly hoping that Luna gets Dawn and Cure gets Celestia. Would be an intresting way for both stories to further diverge. (for lack of a better word.)
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I feel like I should clarify I don't mind either getting both, I just don't think that is going to happen atm.
Well looking for the Thestrals seems to be next major goal
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That's fair i guess. Must have done that earlier.
So, BS: (and Things i generaly hate that adds up to drop)
"Dam and sire" in very 1st chapter and no explanation to boot.
Stud contract. Nice.
Slip-ups. Comedy™.
Waking up in a cold sweat + Having memory about NMM (name implies) = no thought. head empty. (Multiple occasions)
Teasing Celly, Caddy, Moonie.
Having access to library and not trying to obtain self-defence spells (probably general course of action of story)
Having trust in NMM (spiritual parasite/dark entity/total unknown?) Having deal with NMM. Being f...d in the head with possible lethal outcome(Comedy™?) by NMM.
No practice with shadowstep cause reasons.
Overshadow much.
Noble house escapade and no violence(death,dark)tag... Wow nice slice of life huh? Being blackmailed by dangerous grandparents and having no attemps to dealing with it until too late.
Well that was a big waste of time trying to remember and translate this.
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We both know the answer to this question. I'm caught up with the story. Might even know the authors secret kink to
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Not trying to say you are wrong and we all like different things, but I'd like to point out a few things:
> "Dam and sire" in very 1st chapter and no explanation to boot.
The author expected people to read "Life Finds a Way" at least partially, I suppose. Right now, there's a warning right in the first chapter mentioning the Dam/Mom/Sire thing. There's a repeated explanation a few chapters later. Additionally, everyone here has access to the internet, so it's quite easy to check what dam and sire mean.
> Stud contract. Nice.
> Slip-ups. Comedy™.
Imagine an entire alien civilization that always had way more females than males. They will have completely different social norms and expectations from ours, and that's the reason it's RGRE. And that's why they are more open about sex. Especially considering there's a heat season. So yes, stud contracts are a social norm there to protect the stallions population, yet they give mares the option of having children when they can't find a herd. Stallions don't have to participate, but some just choose to. It's not shameful there, unlike prostitution here.
> Waking up in a cold sweat + Having memory about NMM (name implies) = no thought. head empty. (Multiple occasions)
Why would you expect NM to be there when you know she's imprisoned on the moon? Besides, he clearly had his fair share of nightmares and woke up in cold sweat back on Earth. May as well expect them to stay. I honestly wouldn't expect NM to be around at his place either. Bad idea in hindsight.
> Teasing Celly, Caddy, Moonie.
I kind of agree, but why the hell not? He's a colt; he knows he can get away with BS, so he may at least try. Even better when it works. Would you really not try to do anything like this in his place?
> Having access to library and not trying to obtain self-defence spells (probably general course of action of story)
Yep, that's weird. In LFtW protag went 100% paranoid on security.
> Having trust in NMM (spiritual parasite/dark entity/total unknown?) Having deal with NMM. Being f...d in the head with possible lethal outcome(Comedy™?) by NMM.
He doesn't trust NM (Nightmare Moon, why NMM?), but what would you do in that situation? Better some help than none at all. He clearly didn't expect her to do what she did or that she could do this in the first place, though. Why he decided to tolerate her or keep her presence secret after that, I don't know, but I have a feeling he's trying to "fix her". It's a dumb idea, but considering Luna occasionally shines through, it might not be completely improbable. It may backfire later on or produce a lot of comedy when NM returns. Not the best attitude for survival, but not a completely improbable course of action either. Besides, she clearly could do much worse... yet she didn't. She could take him over and turn him into her puppet, yet she didn't. She's dangerous, but apparently not as malevolent and irredimable as we may expect. I think it's important to think about not only what someone did but also what they could do but decided not to do.
> No practice with shadowstep cause reasons.
We haven't seen every moment of his life, so he might've practiced a bit more during the following days. On the other hand, The Maid was almost always nearby, so he probably didn't have enough time alone for that even during the night.
> Overshadow much.
That's fair. In some cases it's there to highlight deviations from the expected course of action, though. But fair enough.
> Noble house escapade and no violence(death,dark)tag... Wow nice slice of life huh? Being blackmailed by dangerous grandparents and having no attemps to dealing with it until too late.
And here, I completely agree. Tags are missing.
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Hey guys so about the tags, they only allow so many of them, guess I could add it to the summary but honestly it didn’t feel as dark as some of the stories that are on here. As for him not learning defensive spells he was trying to be a pacifist pony and embrace (magic is friendshiptm) and not revert into a human/predator mindset after his memories came back. Maybe I can delve into that a bit more… The teasing is from him watching the full show and finds ponies absolutely adorable and also knows Celestia wants more normal interactions instead of everyone bowing to her which he can get away with as a young colt. As for the reason he hasn’t told anyone about NM. He is under her magical influence (a bit) but doesn’t even know it and justifies not telling since she can’t interact with anyone/thing else (except Lyra and that was only with difficulty while she was magically drained) which he finds lonely. Also telling would put him under observation and maybe reveal the memories of his past life that he isn’t ready to share. Dawn went the secretive route while Cure went the full truth route. This will probably both come up later.
But hey it’s cool if you don’t enjoy it, there’s plenty of stuff on here that wasn’t my cup of tea.
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Just to be clear, I do enjoy the story, and I like it. I'd drop it already and probably downvote otherwise. It had to be incredibly bad for the latter, though.
I think it's worth adding missing tags to the description, though. While dark themes are not prominent, it's still better to mark that they are there. Some people really dislike any dark themes in fics they read, and here we have an abduction, slavery, multiple deaths, mind-rape from NM and coercion from his grandparents. Some deaths are implied, but some happen right in the story. At least you clearly mentioned that his version of the spell is reversible, which means all the others weren't and is likely the reason why his family line is cursed. That's a self-inflicted curse, isn't it? They are cursed because Harmony itself doesn't want this filth to propagate. On top of that, his grandparents were crazy enough to sell gilded corpses as art. That's not as dark as it can get, but more than enough to put a warning that it gets quite dark in some chapters.
I mocked myself. Mocking action doesn't have directionality to it unlike actions which involves movement in any way including figurative like "write up".
Lyra.
Not even Clover the Clever could do. Otherwise that's double negative which means she could. Also implies she wasn't that powerful in the first place.
And I'd recommend rephrasing last sentence. It feels weird.
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Ah thanks I cleaned it up.
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preformed - performed
Didn't caught this last time.
Well, decidee to binge-read this over the past two nights. Glad I did. The writing quality I'll admit isn't perfect, but it's still good.
And uh oh, I get the feeling that Twilight is going to start acting weirdly towards Dawn (avoiding, etc.).
Can't wait to read more!
Poured
Princess's*
Oh no,pls their is no rarity x pinkie shipping
Im reminded of a TF2 skit, you magic pony princess now. No.
Well he was probably going to be curious already, now he just has a hidden impetus to actually go out and find them...
Here's just hoping Imago doesn't name one of her daughters "Chrysalis"....
Nifty that he's a alicorn but imo,way too fast. Dudes not even double digits in age yet. Imo woulda been more fitting to ascend him after nighmare moon fight.
Omg! He'll need to learn to fly! His mom will be so excited to teach him!!!