Thomas, a human, has appeared in the magical land of Equestria, though it is much different from the show. Ponies of this world are all anthros. What's more, Thomas has been assigned as Princess Luna's royal concubine.
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I loved this chapter. I got to say that Sun Dancer's interaction with Thomas and her personality were enjoyable. It's obvious that she carries authority given how nervous Thomas and the gang were and she really hit the nail with Thomas' issues. I got to say that I didn't expected Sun Dancer to actually love Celestia the same way that Thomas loves Luna or that she considers Thomas a herdmate (part of me hopes he takes her offer to rut her at some point in the future). Finally, I'm happy that Thomas finally got the guts to confess to Luna, that was long overdue but it was worth the wait.
That was fun, may I have another? Looking forward to more.
Keep up the good work. Deus tecum.
It will be hard for Thomas to adapt.
A big reason why I think it will be more difficult would be that Thomas may subconsciously feel that the only thing he truly has left of home is his cultural identity.
I just hope that his transition is not too painful.
6518596 I'm thankful for your kind words. It's good to hear this chapter wasn't a total flop.
Don't you mean fur?
6518703 Always happy to oblige.
6518706 Considering he just found out the person he loves loves him back, it'll be a bit easier.
6518786 Palm of the hand, not so much fur.
That was really good! I love how you introduce these new characters in each chapter, and the lore of pony traditions.
Thou must also take into fact how he might have been raised, to value marriage or even depending on life style. How it was expected of him to marry a 'good girl' that his family approved of, or how the importance of it can be on a whole. Which could lead to some interesting topics, child or foals in this case to ponies. Though there should be a rather scary period for the human, the time of Estrus or 'heat' that comes. Because if thou factors an alicorn having the 'might' of three ponies in one, when inhibitions and restraint are taken away, couldn't the poor human is injured in such a case?
Since it is a fact that he is weaker then them, even though he's a omnivore. His size to them being that of a teenage colt, literally no protection to his being under his own power. Though on a darker note couldn't some being get close to him in order to worm themselves into Luna's graces? She could likely see the 'ruse' but the poor human likely may not, though we wonder how entertaining the Princess's reaction would be if a Noble 'demanded' that the human be put into a 'petting zoo' or quarantined because the 'alien' or monkey thing has mind controlled her. Over reactions and plots to bump him off from the pedestal Luna has him on, there should be instances where the protection the castle gives isn't infallible. As one example would be how the Changelings got in, which hasn't happened yet. Or even spies from Foreign countries who might take interest in the human. Because no one likes to hear of the fact there is a unknown representative to another species that may or may not be stronger then them.
Thank the stars. And just like that this story moves from 'read later' to 'favorites'.
This was another awesome read we get to learn more about what herds are ,And how they work,And we get meet Sun Dancer and what she looks like ,and get to to know her .Thomas finds out that he's not the only one whos in love with there prencess .And that Luna loves him just as much.and thay finnly shere that love with one another.
Now that it's out, I hope Thomas feels better about their relationship...at least a little. I expect there to be more trials for Thomas. He may be accepted by a lot of the palace staff, but not all, and certainly not the rest of Equestria. I hope that day will come soon, but not too soon. After all, I really like what I am reading.
6519078 And I'm happy that you're happy.
6519394 All ideas I have in the works, but reading this makes them start to take a bit more shape. Thomas' position being challenged, for example, already has a chapter written, just no idea where to put it. Thomas' cultural norms, on the other hand, has not been explored enough, but I think I'm getting some ideas on how it should be done.
6519512 Glad everyone's enjoying it.
6519670 Yes. That was indeed the summary of events.
6519884 I'm laughing as I read this comment. You have no idea just how relevant its about to be.
Probably everyone in that room would jump his bones if asked. One did ask! And he's still insecure.
Screwing Sun Dancer's brains out would also probably be good for him. Reminds me of that "intimacy brings understanding" quote from Mass Effect 2.
6521357 Jesus. Everyone wants Thomas to become an all around stud, don't they. Well... we'll see.
6521130 Perhaps the human may have a couple nightmares of how his family would react to his current 'standing'? Or even of himself being inferior or lost in the 'crowd' whom vie for Luna's attentions, because performance in action he is definitely 'inferior goods' by how he is capable. Though one of the biggest biases that Ponies could have would be focused on Cutie Marks, for example: 'Why hire some pony who says they are good at massage when there is a pony with a massage cutie mark?' or 'Why do I need a monkey to do my taxes when my friend knows a good pony with a accounting cutie mark?'
Being the Senior Consort is the 'Highest' that any pleasure oriented ponies with said fitting cutie marks could get to, true it is said that the beings in Celestia's harem don't have those types. But what's to say that Luna wouldn't try or include one or two? She is from a older period of mindset, also having some mare who's experienced in this modern era wouldn't hurt. But it just means how would their personality be most of all? On a side note, what stallion or mare would turn down a roll in the hay with a famous adult star? We mean that as the 'wet dream' type of deal, though we'd offer a name for one if considered. 'Five Stars', a earth pony from the Gentleman for mares series we read.
It's taken me a little time to figure out what was bugging me about this chapter. I the only thing I can think of is Cadence and Twilight. Namely the fact of Alicorns. From what I can gather from this chapter if all this is true. Wouldn't Shining Armor only be Cadence's concubine instead of husband? It's just the only detail really bugging me since Shining Armor was a guard and not a royal it would factor that in. Twilight I can understand being free from all this in a way as she's new from it. So she would come in with the whole concubine as the rules and go with it. Just one of those details that just doesn't sit right and maybe you should clear up a bit in story. That's just me.
As for the chapter itself I did enjoy it. I mean yeah I knew Thomas wasn't going to rut Celestia's concubine like that and her asking was rather funny. Granted I could have seen her taken a more hands on approach to this and I would have liked to see the outcome. The last thing is I really wished Celestia would have had this talk with Thomas or at least do a cut away where Celestia and Luna talked about it more. As it's seems that yes they do talk a bit during the spa time. But not really getting to the meat and potatoes of it. Now this could be just me but I really would like to see Luna and Thomas get joined by Celestia at some point as a test to see if he could really handle it all. Not saying make him gun ho about it but it would be a good way to show Luna what's going on with him and his issues with being with more then one mare. Also I really want to see him and Midnight have some 'fun together'
I have enjoyed this story far and above that of any other Harem fic to date. Though I am disappointed that everypony there seems far more worried about his feelings then properly assisting him in understanding his roll at the Palace. In this chapter we get so close to it with the alpha stallion talk, but I fear that he will have as little understanding of that reference as he does of senior concubine. I do believe that a sence of responsibility go more than just this Luna's physical and emotional desires may instill a sence of pride in him. Also domepony should sit down with him and make sure he has a clear idea of his social and Palace standings so he will spend less time worrying about how to treat others around him.
6521545 Interesting suggestions, but you'll just have to wait. I can only write a few days a week.
6521717 Twilight's family are nobles, meaning Shining can get married, a tradition almost never taken by common ponies. His title would be Prince Consort. For everything else, that'll just have to wait.
6522149 All in good time.
All he knows thus far is to be polite, which is just fine so long as others are polite right back.
6522348 True we can wait, though as a after thought we forgot to include that the more 'Adult' rated Stars would likely be more open or willing perhaps to those not being ponies, because they may likely focus more on charm or personality. Unless they are quite a horrid whorse, but that's our thoughts. Though the reaction from Talon could be hilarious if she grasped the human's shoulders 'fangirling' and giving exposition on who the new attending mare for Luna is. XD Luna likely might pick a couple Threstals too?
Yaaay ! That was a super interesting chapter ! I love to see things moving like that !
I think I love seeing Thomas embarassed with something new and finally starting to enjoy it.
I can't wait to see the aftermath of all that. :)
6526178 Aftermath? No time for that. We got plot to develop.
6526352 but... But... :'(
Well okay... But I hope Moonlight's "plot" will have a biiig nice "developpement". 8D
I just seen the Coverart.... Not sure how long its been up but I really like it....
6527932 Cool.
Editing note left in?
The culture comparison, and world building. This is why I read fics like this.
ok I am going to brake my rule about posting on a story till I am caught up. yes Xenophilia is a vary good story and gives a good view about herding but I do know of a story that gives a closer look well it is 3 story's as one large story.
saltybedspackle
check out the 3 story's with Equestria in the title.
as all 3 are based on herding and just how powerful it really is.
and yes I am enjoying this story it is a good read.
FUCKING ROLL OUT THE CHAMPAGNE! CELEBRATION DOTH NEED COMMENCING!
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He's getting there slowly. Small steps for him.
*plays Jaws theme*
*increases tempo*
Dancer knows she's a GILF to most ponies?
*increases tempo some more*
Can't wait for the tabloid headline about Thomas "corrupting" Luna into devouring pony flesh.
8118126 Nice ones. Also, Luna was corrupted LONG before Thomas, as you will someday see in yet to be written chapters.
hello 8119103 (Were you royal or nobility, I would call you her husband)
How dos shiny armor Fits as husband of cadenza his not royal or nobility
8176472 I follow the interpretation that Twilight's family is, in fact, nobility, which accounts for why Shining can marry pink horse. Marriage is less common and considered much more formal than regular herding, and therefore mostly practiced for political purposes like sealing alliances through marriage. The nobility still hold the practice fairly sacred, even if most don't see the need to personally follow it, but they would raise an uproar if Thomas were to marry an alicorn. It's just much less of a headache for everyone involved if the Princesses don't officially herd or marry outside the nobility, and just stick to the harems, which are basically the same in practice if not name.
Dude, I read so many chapters all at once. You've written such a good universe. I'm so glad that Tom and Luna have finally expressed their love and that this'll hopefully make Tom more confident in the next chapters (yeah, yeah, I know I'll see in a bit since I don't have to wait). Thanks so much for this story.
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The only mistake I've found so far. Doesn't mean it's the only mistake you've made, but the chapters have been well edited enough that I never really notice except for more obvious mistakes. Here, you've either got 1 period too many or 1 period too few.
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Thanks for the appreciation and the catch.
A shame then, that she didnt go far ENOUGH in her questions
Seriously, Thomas? Even I know about alphas, betas and omegas. He must have skipped nature shows altogether.
9788604
Well done.
Hmm...
*reads chapter endnotes for once*
Wtf?